Excellent title. This does ring of sincerity.

Comment is about Just Another Bowl of Cornflakes (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

Lovely. The 4th stanza rings so true for me. However, knowing this keeps me strong, but in other ways. Thank you.

Comment is about Just Another Bowl of Cornflakes (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

Enjoyed this, Hazel.

I also enjoyed Brian's comment - hooted aloud even. It's so brutally true. And I'm so aware of this 'truth' as I look at all my 'stuff'. Might just be the kick I need to take some action.

Comment is about Almost a Prayer (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

I take your point. Excellent philosophy.

Comment is about May I Never (blog)

Original item by mike booth

Hi Suki, just wanted to stop by and give this one my full attention as my first read was a little hurried - two sons and various builders currently occupying a good part of my time although I now have a week off from the builders as they've buggered off somewhere else to do something else for someone else - as builders do.

I like the backwards forwards conversation of this piece which seems to have been echoed somewhat in the comments. All good fun and to add my own little echo of Ray's comment about the porter, well I had to laugh out loud at that line.

It's also interesting how you touch on certain subjects without going into details, almost as little asides to get the reader thinking without realising they've been made to think. Very effective.

Anyway, it's a great poem and well worth your three weeks of penance. Looking forward to the next one. Col.

Comment is about Confession: Feeding Cornflakes To A Deceased Nun Is Easy If You Don't Know What You're Doing (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

My wife's father spent much of his spare time pottering around outside in the garden, in his garage and in his shed. He had a vast supply of tools, brackets he'd made, bits and pieces etc. In the last weeks of his life he was very keen that others should get the benefit of his life's work. We assured him that we would distribute his tools etc amongst us and this gave him real satisfaction.

After his death we threw 99% of it away.

Comment is about Almost a Prayer (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

Damon

I am new here and just finding my feet. Not wishing to probe is your poem based on personal experience or just 'made-up' for the poem. Just curious

Don

Comment is about Just Another Bowl of Cornflakes (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

Very nice Hazel. I like the way you separated yourself and looked at your life as a piece of art still in progress. We never die with a satisfied and complete canvas.

Don ?

Comment is about Almost a Prayer (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

Brian - good news !

I'll try my best to write good stuff
It's what I came here for
Disregard my definer
Gotta go write some more

By now you will have guessed full well
You provide good material
I've spoken to my manager and
We're planning a serial

Don ?

PS. I do not expect you to take personal situations into account when commenting on poems. I just wanted you to know where I'm coming from.

Comment is about I'm Bipolar - don't talk about it don (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Damon,
Poems from a breaking heart invariably come from a deep well which lies within our true selves. The reader is able to feel your dilema and quite possibly relate to it. The third stanza is a cry from the heart. Well done. You have given the poem an excellent title.
Keith

Comment is about Just Another Bowl of Cornflakes (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

Hazel.
Some very carefully chosen words which express the thoughts we often have during our earthly pilgrimage. The first and last lines are the most interesting for the reader. How best to spend what time is left and that despite all, our lives will remain unfinished. The poem is very thought provoking, one I believe, based on personal recollection but relevant to us all. Thank you for this special piece of work.
Keith

Comment is about Almost a Prayer (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

you come up with some simple but effective images Damon - 'breaking like clumps of sand' is a good example as the reader can literally feel the sand between their fingers as they read the words. I like that very much. Col.

Comment is about Just Another Bowl of Cornflakes (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

each to their own Damon - as long as the process of pacing the parking lot provides you with inspiration to write great poetry . . .

Comment is about I Doubt She Will See This (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

how beautifully put Hazel - 'This work of art is still in progress'. I'll nominate you for next year's Turner Prize. Either that or send you on a cruise to see the Northern Lights . . . painting course in Tuscany? Have a nice day. C?L

Comment is about Almost a Prayer (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

Amen to that! Great piece hazel...

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Comment is about Almost a Prayer (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

Don

Personally I judge the poems on their merits alone. I do not take personal circumstances into account because, let's face it, everyone could probably come up with something that defines them. Just write good stuff Don.

Comment is about I'm Bipolar - don't talk about it don (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

allpoetry.com/Madhup

Comment is about Madhusoodanan Nair (poet profile)

Original item by Madhusoodanan Nair

No moral ground involved

I could not resist
but she insisted
and tempted me to fall in line
that is how I could not decline

why should anyone feel regret
as it was willingly let
it is like normal hunger
and adults do offer

No morality question involved dear
so keep no fear
it is correct to hold morality ground
but no concrete substance is found in that argument

nothing happens without His grace
so accept it on the face
love has its traces all over
and definitely we take shelter

no demon work is involved
as you have loved
and thought it over
love is the normal attachment and fever

Comment is about A Sinner's Confession (blog)

Original item by A. Jade

Nicely done.?

Comment is about Imperfect Leaders (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

I love the imagery of greenery and different types of plants. Such a magnificent way to weave words when it all ends on the same plate of excellence. And thank you for your comments as well Rachel, I do appreciate it!?

Comment is about Nectar- the offering (part 2) (blog)

Original item by Rachel Mhlongo

Zahir - Like Brian I like people who stick their neck out and have some good clean fun

Don ?

Comment is about Dear Mr. Turtle ?-_-_-_ (blog)

Original item by Zahir Sookoor

Thank you Hazel ettridge for reading it and leaving me feedback on it and yes short sweet with the words and giving that sense of wonder, excitement wanting to know more but I'm glad you liked my post thank you once again ?

Comment is about His Love (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

Thanks Patrick yes it's a keeper that's for sure and let me say thanks for reading it and don't worry love will happen for you someday soon I hope but me I'm enjoying the single life style lol ? ?

Comment is about His Love (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

Lovely poem Blackery ? Btw sometimes we doubt many things when in fact they're out there wondering the same way ? Edit "you're" on the first line of last paragraph?

Comment is about I Doubt She Will See This (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

You are so very kind, Anya.. thank you for giving me such a warm welcome ??
xxx

Comment is about D Zwieble (poet profile)

Original item by D Zwieble

Keep it coming Rachel, this is beautiful poetry.


All the bes des

Comment is about Nectar- the offering (part 2) (blog)

Original item by Rachel Mhlongo

Zahir - I really think you've come out of your shell and are sticking your neck out with this one. I like it...a bit of good clean fun!

Comment is about Dear Mr. Turtle ?-_-_-_ (blog)

Original item by Zahir Sookoor

This poem is actually based on what I do every night from 11 to 12.

Comment is about I Doubt She Will See This (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

a black and white movie of a poem Ray full of atmosphere - street lights and rain washed tarmac, the driver struggling to stay awake. Throw in a few flashbacks and the plot automatically thickens and the pulse races . . . Noice one guv' . . .

Comment is about ALWAYS ON THE ROAD (blog)

Original item by ray pool

nicely open-ended with plenty of opportunities for personal interpretation. Almost feels like the opener to something longer - the promise of more to come with a sci-fi twist perhaps? Tea and biscuits before or after the bank robbery? I'll have mine after as a reward please - assuming all goes to plan . . . Cheers, Col.

Comment is about Biscuits (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

I'm always fascinated by the way you arrange words.

Comment is about Arranged Verse (blog)

Original item by Wood

love that last line Damon. I hope you don't mind but I tinkered with your poem and took out some of the miss you / love you lines which I believe don't add anything. Here's what I got which I also think is the essence of your poem and shows how your writing has real guts and depth when freed from the miss you's and love you's etc. These are still your own words and I think they are fab. Keep writing and experimenting Damon - you have something worth encouraging. Col.

I'm chain-smoking menthol cigarettes
Melancholy and pacing in the parking lot
Talking to myself barefooted on the warm concrete

I may be taller than you
But I'm here without you
So where's the bright side in it?

And now I'm just letting myself bleed
Bashing my head on the concrete
Waiting on the day you come back home

The cigarettes and alcohol on breath was my lullaby

Comment is about I Doubt She Will See This (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

Up the wooden hill to Bedfordshire

Comment is about Dreamland (blog)

Original item by Mike Bartram

contagion - what a word - a petrol-soaked virus awaiting a struck match. I'm liking your Thought Patterns Lynn. All the best. Col.

Comment is about THOUGHT PATTERNS (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

Thank you, this one is about Stuart Adamson, a brilliant artist who shunned the fame despite tasting huge success for a time. Stuart just wanted to make the world a better place through his music and nothing more. That's my CND patch he is wearing in my Demons poem! He wanted to wear it for a televised Liverpool gig in 1983! Sadly Stuart went missing in 2001 and was found hung in a hotel room in Honolulu, he had recently turned to heavy drinking again.

Comment is about One More Bottle (blog)

Original item by Mike Bartram

It was wynken, blynken and nod in my day!

Comment is about Dreamland (blog)

Original item by Mike Bartram

Have you read and listened to Xoanxo's poetry here on WoL? I think your poetry would go well to music too, maybe with an extra verse or two. I'm always intrigued and wonder what your accent would be and what music you would choose. Thanks for posting. Col.

https://www.writeoutloud.net/profiles/xoanxo

Comment is about Arranged Verse (blog)

Original item by Wood

a strong sense of Lennon hangs over your poem ALM and like his song we should all strive for higher goals of equality. Just how possible and achievable that is I couldn't say but I do admire the spirit of this piece. Thanks for posting. Colin.

Comment is about Imagine a world (blog)

Original item by Alonelymouse

your Love poem Cynthia has stopped me in my tracks. I like it very much but cannot decide if I wholeheartedly agree - for sound and touch surely play an important part when it comes to intimacy - but do they equal the look from eyes? And are eyes not capable of deception too? Of course I might just be a dunce in these matters . . .

Comment is about Love (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

It's a lovely thought Mousey, but unfortunately tens of millions from the third world want to come to a handful of countries of the developed world - which would swamp us to the point that this country and others would soon become very unattractive places to live.

Comment is about Imagine a world (blog)

Original item by Alonelymouse

What a beautiful poem this one’s a keeper whoever he is he’s a very lucky man

Comment is about His Love (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

Ho there,

Lol! Yes, I do remember; wasn't so long ago really. Thanks for your return comment too.

If you recall Bez from the Happy Mondays - he used to dance like he was wading in treacle. Well, if I attempt to dance, that's what I dance like!

BTW, sometimes I'm away from WOL for weeks at a time, as I have quite a lot on at the mo. Just so you know, in case I don't reply in a timely manner.

90s music. Under rated in my opinion. Glad you feel the same way..

Cheers,
Suki

Comment is about Hey Suki, You Out There ? (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

true story..

Comment is about Metropolis (blog)

Original item by Charlotte Henson

Thank you all for the comments. The subject will remain
a topic of concern from what I see happening in society
today. Moral courage has been hijacked by an attitude of
mind that gives every avenue of excuse and escape to the
wrongdoer, with the legal profession (via a substantial
representation in Parliament) playing endless games with
the meaning and effect of words they alone are
responsible for in formulating and enacting the laws we
try to abide by, only to see them manipulated and "massaged" to mendacious ends by their creators/
interpreters. No wonder the great W.S. Gilbert (himself a barrister) took aim with such knowing accuracy
in the famous G&S comic operas back in a time of less susceptible sensitive social sensibilities.

Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Hi Suki,

I'm also pleased to make your acquaintance.

Another mind in turmoil? Maybe not. Whatever. You have an interesting mind. For the reason I am bipolar with a mind full of thoughts racing round helter-skelter wanting to get out. One thought leads to another, to another, to another. Before too long you find yourself in the land of borderline credibility. As Brian says - Basil Fawltyish

Glad to make your acquaintance

Don

PSW. Have you picked up on my Hey Suki, You Out There? yet ?

Comment is about Confession: Feeding Cornflakes To A Deceased Nun Is Easy If You Don't Know What You're Doing (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

came by. Thanks for sharing.

Comment is about a song for you (blog)

Original item by A. Jade

What an amazing line; "tight lipped in automobilitic flight,"
the whole poem is contained in that amazing line.
?

Comment is about ALWAYS ON THE ROAD (blog)

Original item by ray pool

thanks don

from BRIAN

Comment is about Hey Suki, You Out There ? (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Brilliant.
I love poetry about fame and the down side, the glory but misery it can bring.
Famous people are often led to drink or drugs.
Well written.

Hannah

Comment is about One More Bottle (blog)

Original item by Mike Bartram

Lovely image -- people often seem to float away, just beyond our reach. Reminded me of children chasing bubbles. Even when they catch them, they soon pop.

Comment is about Be Begin Be End (blog)

Original item by Bryan Hunter