I was going to ask the same Brian??

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Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

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Clever JR ?

Comment is about I Can't Paint, I can Paint (blog)

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Graham - I agree, and I apologise for my comment which seems to have triggered this off. It was meant to be a throwaway line but I think it was interpreted wrongly.

Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

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I think it's about time the comments on this thread became little less personal and abusive. I for one am getting fed up with differing opinions turning into metaphorical pokes in the eye. Be different but be nice!

Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

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I know you alternated on the rhymes throughout, but you did a great job with how some of the alternate rhymes are near rhymes with the ones above and below them as well. Interesting read to say the least, and the second-to-last stanza really stood out and made me laugh (even if that wasn't the intention). Nice one!?

Comment is about The Yellow-Bellied Idles (Homage to J. Milton Hayes) (blog)

Original item by J R Harris

Powerful beginning and increasingly eye-catching by the ending. Well done, especially like the title.?

Comment is about Emotional Prostitute (blog)

Original item by Jay

That'll teach you! You can't help some scorpions...or people.

Comment is about Requital (blog)

Original item by Binte Afroz

I can picture the scene Keith...very well described.

Comment is about The Videomatic Tutor (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thanks David. I have always been afflicted (or blessed)with a strange sense of reality. With the tangled skeins of nightmare realism confronting us it is a relief to throw a bit of insane logic into the mix IMO.


I can see how you fixed on that tune Martin. That's the power of lyrics! I think I also see a parallel with Old Man River, again the power of lyrics.


Thanks Brian for that. Yes, it's remarkable how often this kind of doggerel appeared in lyrics.


I'm ok thanks Suki. I think this should really be Doo lally.


Yes they were a bargaining chip in those days - a sort of meaningless gap filler.


This is getting interesting Graham - what have I started!
I think your example is one of the better ones of the genre.

I quite agree about that David. It brings light relief to more weighty considerations. Almost gravity defying !
Thanks.

My particular favourite is Blue Moon with that long introduction by the Platters. I can't quote it in full though....


Thanks for liking, Rachel Hannah and Anya.

Thanks everyone for enjoying the poem.

Ray

Comment is about DOO LANG A LANG (blog)

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Wel done JR...first poem not about Wigan!

Comment is about I Can't Paint, I can Paint (blog)

Original item by J R Harris

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Comment is about I Can't Paint, I can Paint (blog)

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Yes I do agree with rehabilitation, but you can take a horse to water...

I also don't agree with reduced sentence for a guilty plea and reduced sentence for good behaviour. I think good behaviour should be the norm and that any bad behaviour should result in a longer sentence.

Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

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Going for rehabilitation is like going for world peace. You have to keep trying because the alternative is unthinkable.

Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

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When these leftie liberals come on the telly and tell us that prison doesn't work, I always ask back "for whom?" If a persistent criminal is taken out of circulation for a couple of years I'm all for it.

Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

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I'll try

Comment is about Silence In Her Arms (Lyrics.) (blog)

Original item by Mikey V Kinsey

MC.,
A well composed poem which will appeal to many whilst also reminding people to make politicians fully accountable responsible for those who they claim to represent.
Thank you for this
Keith

Comment is about POWER SHOWER (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Reminded of the old joke.
Masochist: beat me, beat me!
Sadist: no!

Comment is about Fight (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

I'm not sure about the contradiction that asks how much then states "2 or 10 percent" being seen. I think this
could be revised accordingly...e.g.
I wonder of 100
How much of you I see
Is it 2 or 10 percent...
The same you see of me?
Sorry, that's the songwriter in me!!
But the premise is both inventive
and entertaining.

Comment is about Percentage You (blog)

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Last two lines really raise that (the) bar, so to speak. ?

Comment is about Thoughts in a dark room (blog)

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Thank you Sofia. I appreciate your comment. ?

Comment is about Memory of you (blog)

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Comment is about Something (blog)

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I liked this Donovan. Very cleverly thought out. Nice to see another rhymer on the site ?

Comment is about Percentage You (blog)

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Suki - I go with Gary when he refers to "competes". In the
widest sense, all material vies (competes) for space, attention and even comment when placed in the public
arena, whether that be for online or other forms of publication. This is distinct from competing in the "prize"
sense of the word when subjective choice comes into play
to judge the estimated worth of material within the framework of a competition.
MC

Comment is about Novice Slamming: Giving it back to the people? (article)

Original item by Mike Took

A shining star is visible here, to be enjoyed by all discerning readers. Great poem tickling all those dark fancies Hannah !

Ray

Comment is about ‘That Thing In The Cupboard’ by Hannah Collins is our Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by steve pottinger

Thanks for the like Col


All the best des

Comment is about They step (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Hi Damon, thank you for your comments on my poetry. They are very much appreciated. I do read and admire a lot of your poetry too. So just keep on writing, it’s the only way to develop and enhance your own style.




All the best Des

Comment is about They step (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Really enjoyed reading this.
Healing and positive.

Hannah

Comment is about As I listen (blog)

Original item by Nicola Byrnes

It is sad and movingly written.

Hannah

Comment is about A Shell (blog)

Original item by Penelope Overman

Good Morning Hasmukh,

I enjoyed this poem as it highlights the fact that a funeral is more for the living than the one who is departed. It is the final rite of passage and those who are left have confused feelings ranging from regret, remorse, one´own mortality and the need for some latent form of reconciliation.
Thank you for this
Keith

Comment is about Decent farewell (blog)

Original item by Hasmukh Mehta

Now I know what a ditch is. Am I missing something subtle here? How does a bycycle differ from a bicycle? Must be a UK thing ...?

Regardless, I love nonsense verse...keep it coming

Comment is about ` BYCYCLE DITCH TROLL ~ (blog)

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Love it! This will be read a few more times....??

Comment is about Fight (blog)

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Strong words....

Comment is about The Devil (blog)

Original item by Penelope Overman

Love it! Sometimes I really enjoy poems that don’t make sense to me, I love the words you have used and how the poem moves...

Comment is about ` BYCYCLE DITCH TROLL ~ (blog)

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...lol..?????

Comment is about ~ univerity ~ (blog)

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All the celebrity scousers...they love Liverpool so much they move hundreds of miles away.

Comment is about Above all That (blog)

Original item by Mike Bartram

What exactly is a bicycle ditch?

Comment is about ` BYCYCLE DITCH TROLL ~ (blog)

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Thankyou Keith for your comments it’s been a long time coming my writing and I’m enjoying myself writing things down . And I’m sure there will be a lot more love Wendy x

Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thankyou for commenting and liking my poem I love to be awoken by the birds and listening to them sing it’s surprising what I write about love Wendy .

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Desmond I look up to most on this platform. If I could make poems half as good as you god that would be great.

Comment is about They step (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Isn't it sweet
To hear that beat
And tap your feet
When the thing's complete?

Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)

Original item by Don Matthews

Penelope, This is an interesting and imaginative poem of how you perceive evil and its master at work. A good poem
Thank you
Keith

Comment is about The Devil (blog)

Original item by Penelope Overman

Hazel,
I can relate to this poem because it insists on my being honest. I have always endeavoured to be a calm and collected person, in no way aggressive and abhoring violence. These commendable attributes have altered significantly with the years. I don´t enjoy a good fight but I am now fully prepared to speak out and in the strongest terms and have a good shouting match to let people know that I am bloody furious and get my point across. What is there to lose when one has reached 70?

You have made me feel quite stroppy.
Well done and well said
Thanks
Keith

Comment is about Fight (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

Brian, don't worry, I'm not coming round.

This poem was inspired by a very interesting person I met through my work.

David, you are a tornado.

Comment is about Fight (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

You've made me feel a bit uneasy Haze.

Comment is about Fight (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

What a beautiful poem. So well constructed with fluid images and a great atmosphere - shamanic.

Comment is about Llyfnant (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

Thanks for your reading and comments Suki they are always welcome
Cheers my friend

Comment is about Hard lines (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks to all for reading. Thanks to Rachel, Brian, Jon, Anya and Darren for liking.

Thanks to Colin, Pat and Hannah for commenting . I seem to be writing a lot of stuff around my past these days which is fine as long as I don't become a BOF. That is to say not a bigger one than usual
Thanks again everybody, much appreciated
Martin

Comment is about old kid, new tricks (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Fabulous Hannah. I am really pleased for you. I look forward to reading more of your work
Many congratulations

Comment is about ‘That Thing In The Cupboard’ by Hannah Collins is our Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by steve pottinger

Interesting poem and subject matter Ian which I enjoyed reading. I was wondering how it might work with the last 4 verses interspersed between the first 4:
“what is beautiful?”...
Eliza weeps...
“why are they hurtful?”...
in that hour of hunger...
etc
as it stands it feels a bit like two one-sided conversations bolted together. Maybe you've done it this way for performance whereas I'm coming to it on the page so to speak - as a reader rather than a listener.
I was in a discussion here recently about explaining poetry. I think in this case the added picture and tags are a distraction - the words speak for themselves.
Hope you don't mind me chucking my musings at you Ian. All the very best, Colin.

Comment is about Strange Fruit (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley