I can feel the emotion threading each line in this piece with a needle and crimson sew. The stark reality laid bare. Purged. Unmended and mended. Thank you for sharing such an exquisitely viscerally vivid piece. May your river pen flow eternal with creative endeavor. Blessings to you from the Universe ????
Comment is about The Awakening (blog)
Original item by Chakraj
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 22:33
John,
This is so wonderfully consoling. Deciphering your work is like opening a Chinese puzzle box. I mean that as a compliment. Once opened, there is always a gem inside.
D
Comment is about Zoroastrian (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I suspect said Milligan was a far braver man than me, Leon.
And thanks for the “Like”. Chrystel too.
Comment is about WHEN HITLER BROUGHT THE HOUSE DOWN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 22:12
That sounds pretty cool. I love an ever-changing work environment. There are a lot of older machines out there, especially in rural communities, that require such fabrication shops to keep going. The parts are no longer available. But, of course, you know that.
D
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
<Deleted User> (17847)
Fri 30th Aug 2019 22:05
John, can I take it for granted that you will have like Mr Milligan had re Adolf, a part in Boris's downfall? ?
Comment is about WHEN HITLER BROUGHT THE HOUSE DOWN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I work for a typical small community metal fab and engineering shop. We take on all kinds of work. Lots of chassis for other components, aviation parts, exercise equipment...all those metal parts that everyone just takes for granted. Large and small. I love it because its always changing. My daughter works there also. She does the silkscreening.
Oh yeah...restaurant equipment too!
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Thanks gentlemen. Good quote Don! Luckily it is all theoretical for us normal folk...!
Thanks for dropping in, Lisa, Devon and Ghazala. Many thanks.
Ray
Comment is about TARIFF (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 21:47
If you don't mind me asking, what sort of things do you make there?
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Yes... It is like that some days...lol..! Its a small shop and a lot of fun.
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 21:37
Thank you, Lisa. Brought a smile to my face. Makes me think of the music in the old WB cartoons whenever they cut to a factory scene. Ha! Found it -
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=23jdesvCoOY
D
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
I appreciate all the likes and comments my poem received.
I was inspired to write it, after reading this message on a inspirational card:
‘Sometimes when I say I'm OK, I want someone to look me in the eyes, hug me tight and say: I know you're not.'
Forgive me if I'm being schmaltzy, but I think that, deep down, we can all relate to those words.
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Really really good. Love the shaping as well.
J. x
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 19:52
Chrystal,
I think the form of this poem adds quite a bit to the thoughts presented here. The distance between reality and expectation. What does courtesy allow? Is the question "How are you" ever sincerely asked? If we answer honestly, are we breaking the rules of civil society? If we did answer honestly, every time, I think there could be a great deal of healing. Thanks for this.
D
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Thanks for that Lightbox message, Phil. Yes, little Kayla was marvellous. I have two lovely pictures of her which I have put on our Facebook site - maybe I should post them here, too. Her dad said it would be all right. There were 21 floor readers, plus Pete the featured poet and Rodney the compere. And thanks for your comment on my Three Kings poem. That was a pub where myself and fellow former newspaper colleagues met once a month from March 2013 until earlier this year. It changed hands, lost its rhinoceros, and we have moved to a pub a few staggers away, across the road. It's not the same - our pints often slide off the table and crash on the floor. Although maybe the subject of the poem has something to do with that ... that has never occurred to me before ...
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 19:39
Louise,
1) I love dogs
2) I love reading about dogs
3) I love reading about the canine/human relationship
4) I love songs about dogs - so here is a link for you:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gO11WcWFLow
Thanks,
D
Comment is about Lara (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
Beautiful Dog you have there Lara. Last week it was International Dog Day and this is a good poem for it. You can't beat the unconditional love of a dog
Comment is about Lara (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
What is the point that Don, Adam and Graham are hoping to achieve with their negative simplicity?
Am i losing something?
I appreciate the points from Ruth.
Surely Chrystel has a valid point.
Why the negativity folks?
Tommy
psps. I think that I may have missed some of the finer points made by Don, Adam and Graham. Apologies if I have.
tc
Comment is about Ruth O'Reilly (poet profile)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
What is the point that Don, Adam and Graham are hoping to achieve with their negative simplicity?
Am i losing something?
I appreciate the points from Ruth.
Surely Chrystel has a valid point.
Why the negativity folks?
Tommy
ps. I think that I may have missed some of the finer points made by Don, Adam and Graham. Apologies if I have.
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
You are right dear Devon. Thanks! I was actually thinking of removing it from the title. Will do!
Thank you for reading, liking and suggesting!?
Mae
Comment is about Blessed With A Curse -A Wretched Rhyme (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Sorry Laurence, but, I think that I disagree with everything that you say on this post. But feel free to disagree.
Tommy
Comment is about Clausal inference (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Loved it, and yes it is priceless. I also know what Don means. For me it's because I'm dyslexic, it doesn't mean I can't read it, it just means it's more difficult. Great poem though and whoever, "He," is he should think himself lucky ?.
J. x
Comment is about Pocket Full Of Lint (blog)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
Cheers, Ray!
Comment is about Bunty, I Miss You!: Heather Moulson, Dempsey & Windle (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks Devon and penguin, I had in mind some sort of outlaw type figure (Black Jack). But it really was like riffing, a bit, which is probably why it seems to have a "beat." I know what you mean Devon, but can't think of the track, it's like the echo of a whisper.
J. x
Comment is about Black Jack (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Great review for a great collection Greg! I would be rushing to add it to my shelf, but I have it. already dog - eared.
Ray Pool
Comment is about Bunty, I Miss You!: Heather Moulson, Dempsey & Windle (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
"Understand" doesn't seem quite the correct word, but you need the rhyme, so...
Last line scan better without "man's"?
Comment is about GIVING A HAND (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Ha-ha.
With the state of some roads these days, he should have visited
one of the pitted surfaces in need of repair and survived as a "toad in the hole".
Comment is about The Toad In The Road (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Enjoyed. I can almost hear Ella Fitzgerald.
Comment is about Black Jack (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 16:04
Mae,
The first five lines are a true limerick. But I think that if you had stayed with it throughout the piece, your point would not have come off as you intended as limericks in general are humorous and light.
Thanks,
D
Comment is about Blessed With A Curse -A Wretched Rhyme (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 15:22
Adam,
I agree with Mae - this is a radical twist on the Ghazal form. I am shocked and delighted by the departure for the usual longer couplets. Well presented you rebel!
D
Comment is about Ghazalit (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 15:18
Dk,
You are so tuned in to the seasons. It's toad time here - due north of ya' - they are all over the roads, particularly when it rains.
D
Comment is about The Toad In The Road (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 15:16
Jason,
Love the intense rhythm and rhyme of this poem. I've been snapping my fingers and reading it aloud - multiple times. I would love to hear an audio file of this. It almost reads like "Hit the Road Jack", but there is another tune that is hanging around in the back of my head that is more rhythmically similar. As you gave me "Othello" (and thank you for that), perhaps you know what tune that's snapping away at the back of my skull.
You are always one to write positive and inspiring work, and this one does it in a very Beat fashion.
Thanks,
D
Comment is about Black Jack (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thank you for teading liking and commenting.
Don, the true fruit of art is never low hanging but must be climbed for as though one were seeking a rainbow in a cloud.
Metaphysically,
A.
Comment is about Ghazalit (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Not a clue where this one came from just had that "Ack," sound on my tongue. ?
(P.S. They are all genuine words, none made up for poetic licence ?)
J. x
Comment is about Black Jack (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Always enjoy animal poems, He should have stayed at Toad Hall!
Comment is about The Toad In The Road (blog)
Original item by d.knape
After a certain point in his life, yes, stone deaf.
I don't know what qualifies for what, I'm not even sure my limerick is even a limerick, I think so....? But either way I do like your verse Don! Thank you?
Mae
Comment is about Blessed With A Curse -A Wretched Rhyme (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Lisa, Jason Thank You for your T words ? Don what do those other letters stand for?
Comment is about Chat But Not Like That (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Golly gosh he's gone to ground.
Ooops. Tomorrow's letter. Sorry Ruth.
Comment is about Chat But Not Like That (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Amanda, have you thought of putting it into stanzas? I find it hard to digest all in this linear fashion. But that's just me......
Comment is about Pocket Full Of Lint (blog)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
Lisa - me at my sexiest best
Ruth - I was in Singapore many years ago and the drag queens had their own street, since pulled down. You are right, they can be quite stunning. Seems this is still quite a feature of Singapore
https://sgmagazine.com/nightlife/news/meet-4-drag-queens-competing-next-drag-wars-singapore-crown
Chrystel - my dress doesn't fit anymore. I've grown in all the wrong places
Comment is about Parental Failure (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Wasn't Beethoven stone deaf ?
There was a young maiden from Froze
Who got a rose stuck up her nose
The silly little maid was beside herself
Well you would go and sniff rose you chose
Now our Rose would not be so silly
To get a rose stuck up her nose
(She's living it up in Barbados)
I hope she comes back,(need her prose)
Does this qualify as a limerick Mae?
Only the first line Don......?
Comment is about Blessed With A Curse -A Wretched Rhyme (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
And his terse tendencies teeter towards topical tension.
Terrific!?
J. x
Comment is about Chat But Not Like That (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Perhaps the more pressing question is who is your Ariadne? Who gives you the ball of thread so that you can find your way back? Because without this, Theseus though brave, would still be lost. Before any of us try to navigate the labyrinth of our minds we need Ariadne's thread and something really secure to anchor it to. Love this thought provoking poem.
J. x
Comment is about Labyrinthine thoughts (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby
I, like Tommy, would say:
I now think it done.)
As is.
Comment is about Clausal inference (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
raypool
Fri 30th Aug 2019 23:13
Thanks for your considerations David. The fact is we don't get a choice , but if there was one - ah there's the rub. I just can't catch you out you scallywag. I can see your point entirely, thanks!
Ray
Comment is about TARIFF (blog)
Original item by ray pool