'Soon the effigy of man
Stands to scare the crows
His infant stake
Fused in the long-standing earth'

Some great lines there.

Comment is about The Blue Of Autumn (blog)

Dear Melissa

Excellent poem- It shows that you have been collecting your thoughts and examining your life. Found the serenity in your write which gives a relief to your emotional state.
I like the write a lot!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Drifting Upon Waves (blog)

Hello, Antonio

Did you write a lyric this time? It sounds that I could have sung this as it has an even beat to the written word. Excellent write, it shows your happy mood and time that you enjoyed spending with your Mother, if I am correct guessing. Nice style, quite different from your previous poems that have been reading.

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about What I did today, hey (blog)

HI, Jeff

Thank you for the comment on my poem
'A Smile a Day'- I should have mentioned at the beginning that it was an autobiographical write. This was written for a laughter and fun. Just to smile...:)
So if I made you smile this was the point in my write.

Thanks again,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Ladies and Gentle sausages...i give you, the one, the only, Mr Peter Crompton...
You have a complex mind Crompton...I love it.

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

Hi Melissa - it sounds to me like you've had some sort of epiphany occur in your life. Whether this is just a simple realization or something more profound, perhaps only time will tell!
Most of what you have to say is very direct and the last few lines are indicative of somebody who has lived through a 'significant emotional event', which takes me back to the epiphany statement...i always enjoy your poetry but I think that you know that already.

Comment is about Drifting Upon Waves (blog)

Hi Pete, gripping stuff! Probably the longest poem I've ever read but well worth seeing it to the end, cheers Jeff

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

This is great Antonio, dark poetry with dark humour, just up my street! It's probably my favourite piece of work of yours that I have read so far, nice one, Jeff ps thanks for your comment on my 'Morning' poem.

Comment is about Rain in the arse (blog)

I Totally agree. Had very similar thoughts. Loved this poem

Comment is about Identity! Is it a dream? (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Hi Melissa, thanks for your comment. I love this you have done, and it's written in a similar sentiment to mine! great stuff Jeff x

Comment is about Drifting Upon Waves (blog)

Love the title. That was very clever, and I love the picture.

As my grandfather once said, "Rain, rain, go away and come back another day."

Comment is about Rain in the arse (blog)

Thank you everyone for your wonderful comments. :)

Comment is about String That Binds Us (blog)

Hi Andy, just want to say thanks for your comment on my blog, neptune meets venus.
I've read your samples and i like snow ghost, valentine and the windscreen one.
I meant to comment on " i remember" but can't remember if i did or not. ha ha.
Janet.x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi, ok. Here goes.
My first thought was of you as the soldier in an air raid shelter with the sound effects of gun shot and cannon in the background.
However, it might need someone else in the background as a kind of narrator for the bits in between .
The second vision was more manic, as if the soldier is constantly re-living the war nightmare and goes on rampage in every town and village he visits, well after the war is over. A more modern up-take on the first. Rambo style.

I don't even know if any of it is possible, but i do hope it gives you an idea of your own, picking out the bits you like.
I look forward to hearing it anyway. love Janet.x

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

Thanks Janet, Antoni.

Please make your suggestion Janet, there is no formula for performance for this piece yet.

I also see it as a film aka apocalypse now (ref the razor)

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

Hi mARK. i just read your samples, i like poisoned smile and think fifty free frees is brilliant. I lost it a bit in the middle but soon picked it up again.
oops! sorry, it should be firty not fifty. oh well.
janet.x

Comment is about Mark Underwood (poet profile)

Original item by Mark Underwood

You are fantastic.
I just thought I had to say :).
Not that it means so much but well, you are. Supporting Cooper Clarke makes you fantastic-er of course :)

Comment is about Gerard McKeown (poet profile)

Original item by Gerard McKeown

Hi Pete, i've read this loads of times and each time, i see something different. That in itself says a lot. It's like a movie.
I'd be interested to know how you see yourself performing this one.
I have 2 very different visions in my mind on how it could be done. However, you're the experienced one in performance, so i won't insult your intelligence by making a suggestion.
Somehow, i see 4 "people" in your written piece.
Great work. Janet.x

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

Hi Jordan, you know, in my view, this isn't unlike Phils poem on identity... as if the mask is hiding the true self, then when it's removed, there's nothing there. Life situations and people having had too much influence over his life.
It leaves him feeling bereft in nothingness.
poignant and sad.
I'd be interested to know your own ideas of what it means though. Janet.x

Comment is about The Masked and Unmasked Man (blog)

Original item by Jordan

Hello Phil,
Your poem rings bells with me. It reminds me of when i" lost my identity" when i was married.
Then when you're set free and find yourself once more, you want to shout it from the rooftops.
Although it probably has a different meaning for you, it just goes to show how others can see something of themselves in other peoples work.
Great poem, great statement.
Janet.x

Comment is about Identity! Is it a dream? (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Hiya, plenty dry humour in this one Antonioni.
I like that.
Bloody hell, i do wish people would use larger print in their blogs. I've lost my readers specs.
Blurred vision back.

Comment is about Rain in the arse (blog)

A refreshing approach to poetry. Good work

Comment is about The Masked and Unmasked Man (blog)

Original item by Jordan

Cheers Andy thanks for comment, bet this 'Fun' thing was fun! Hope to get to next freed up thing. To be honest I've been quite lucky at the fests I've been to weather wise, but yes you go with expectation to wear out any clobber for good! cheer Jeff

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Unusual, but I like it..

Comment is about The Masked and Unmasked Man (blog)

Original item by Jordan

Very well written poem, it creates a powerful image in my mind of what is happening.

Thanks for sharing this!

have fun,
Jordan

Comment is about An eternity in the hole (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Thankyou for the comments everyone! It's always good to get feedback! I feel a ric/jefferama poetry sesh making its way in the ancient field

Comment is about An eternity in the hole (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Brilliant Richard, tons of great stuff in here, love it, the lines-
I saw a haunted beach
haunted by Lucifers children
only the beach
stands between me and my destiny

are excellent. I've been writing some stuff from a dark period in my lie lately and will have them out soon, keep up the good work, Jeff

Comment is about An eternity in the hole (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Sounds like you're heartbroken Mirna, but will survive, I hope.. thanks Jeff

Comment is about A Woman's Curse (blog)

Oh i do like this one Mirna.
A true story of survival in the face of adversity, if you'll excuse the phrase.
Then there's a little touch of humour if i may say so, in the ending. Or is that just my warped sense of rough justice shining through.
Lovely, Janet.x

Comment is about A Woman's Curse (blog)

Hi Richard, The first phrase which springs to mind is, "depression leads to expression."
Strangely enough, it was wrirren on an "angel card." would you believe.
I love the reference to carrying the world on ones shoulders, "the cross."
The nightmare in "screaming like a coyote hound, i haven't made a sound."
and the wanting to leave but you know you have to stay.
Finally, i just want to share with you, i have a spirit child who works with me in my spiritual work. She always hands me a daisy chain before she leaves and kisses me on the cheek.

Absolutely, a TERRIFIC write. From beginning to end, i was in there with you.
Thanks, Janet.x

Comment is about An eternity in the hole (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

hiya. we talked briefly on thurs at the 'arty types show'. my profile has my email on it. keep me informed about your shows- we'd love to come and see what you're up to in scouseland.

especially becasue your set was so awesome. we really really enjoyed it. :-)

Comment is about Angry Sam (poet profile)

Original item by Angry Sam

excellent use of the psychoanalysis also. When you read it you can almost hear the subconscious of the soldier in theray, it works well, the lines create feelings of obscurity and obviously the sub-conscious comes out in an obscure an dsometimes obsurd way. Ric

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

'Tis sad, Katie, and your verse is good.

Comment is about Katie Sandham (poet profile)

Original item by Katie Sandham

Hi
Thank you Richard.
the word 'emanate' means to emerge from or 'beam from' as though a ray of light emanates from the sunshine.

some of the words are 'automatic' together with the fact they rhyme, when I say automatic I just mean the next word that came into my mind. It is part of a way of discovering your inner feelings as you know, automatic writing. I think that if you supress emotion then automatic writing is very beneficial.

I wanted to connect with the feelings in another lifetime of being in the war zone or battlefield and imagine the soldiers very own 'automatic writing' but in a ghostly way, as though he appointed me his own ghost writer.

thanks again for your support and I'm glad you enjoyed it, I really enjoyed reading it back a second time.

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

Love this poem, this should be poem of the month. A very hard and shocking poem with alot to say and could hear the rythem very easily. I particulary liked this section You are the wife’s of acrobats
You are the dingbats and misunderstood
You are the perfectly believable killers
You are the soldiers and the communards
You roll on
P.S what does this word mean 'emanate'?
Ric

Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)

Hi Val. Thanks for your comment on my poem, spirit island. I 've tried to explain the last line in a comment on my blog if you wish to take a look at it.
I've read some of your work previously and enjoyed much of it. It's very easy on the eye and senses. Well written in my view.
I have no great literary experience but i do know what i like to read. love Janet.xx

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Thanks Mirna, Which probably explains the shiver down my spine.
Heaven and hell is a place on earth.
I see now that your poem reflects feelings of love in general and not with one person in mind.
Very individual style of writing which i do enjoy reading. Better still when i can ask about what i can't see in it.
Thanks for your very kind response to my request. Janet.x

Comment is about I’m Gone (blog)

Well if i'd known you were on your own i would have gone. Still, if there's a next time, i'll come see you. Hope it went well by the way?love janet.xx

Comment is about A simpleton's guide to Wimbledon (blog)

Thank you Janet, well for me,It’s all about things that can only be felt.
How each one understands love; and how love sometimes can be received as hate, doubt, fear and aggressiveness, you can feel it every time you’ve been held, every moment you look through the eyes, in time of silence where showing love has totally disappeared; it's about what lies behind paradise, might be hell for real.

Comment is about I’m Gone (blog)

Hello, Steve

Sounds like fun sort of Festival in the city like...?
Not sure as each Country has its own fun in the summer time. Your poem has good reflection on the event. Although, I found it a little on a dark side; thank you for sharing.

Written well!

Cheers!
Zuzanna

Comment is about The Fun-Fair (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Your poem really is very deep, so deep that i couldn't get into what lies behind the words.
To be honest it sent a shiver down my spine, very unusual. I've read it about six times and the same thing happens each time.
I don't suppose you could see your way to explaining a little could you? I'm intrigued.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about I’m Gone (blog)

Wow, I loved that.

Comment is about The Hare (article)

Thanks for confirming my feeling.
There is a certain amount of emotion in there, particularly in the last 4 lines.
I'm just one of those people who pick up on the sensitive issues within peoples writings. Some think that's a bit weird and it's got me into trouble on more than one occasion when i've opened my mouth to those who can't understand how i do it.
Keep up the good work, you'll go far.
love Janet.x

Comment is about Unborn Child Of The World (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

I've always loved the funfair, but this does show the darker side of it.
My neice was killed on a local fairground ride 14 years ago at the age of 15. It hasn't put me off but does make me more aware of the dangers.
I think i enjoyed reading your poem but it brought mixed emotions for me.
Take care, love janet.x

Comment is about The Fun-Fair (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

your very right Janet, it is written a long time after something which happened within the family which is why it might come across as having 'less emotion' I still intedned for there to be some however, but I guess you could say there is an acceptance in the poem that one would not have if a child had only recently been lost. Thanks for taking time to know the real meaning of the poem Janet

Comment is about Unborn Child Of The World (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

If this poem is relates to a personal incident, i find it a little odd that i didn't sense the emotion one would expect. My feeling is that it was written long after an event to which you have respect for. eg; a friend or close relative.
I'd be interested to know if my "feeling" is right.
There's more to this than what shows up in the first couple of readings.
Thanks for your comment. love janet.x

Comment is about Unborn Child Of The World (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Jeff, thanks agai for the your kind words. I'm glad you used the word tribute because that's exactly what i wanted it to be, not just to the unborn child in my family but to anyone that has experienced it. Thanks again and keep writing bud

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi Richard, it's a very sad and poignant piece of work, and my sympathy to you or the people involved if this is personal, but I have to say it's a very well written tribute, the last few lines say it all... thanks Jeff

Comment is about Unborn Child Of The World (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Steve, really like this, the stark reality of most funfairs.

Did you read my 'Funfair' this month. It's more of an ideal world funfair but hope you like it! Jeff

Comment is about The Fun-Fair (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Richard is wrong, neither the poet nor poem have been chosen as poem of the month on this site before this month - check the list.

When winners are asked to chose the next poem of the month they are given a list of previous winners and instructed not to chose a poem by any one of them to be the next poem of the month.

Comment is about The Hare (article)