Melissa, you penned such a gem. Beautifully embraced the beauty of the rose. but I read in between the lines that the rose has much deeper meaning in your poem .Great Tribute to someone special.

"This rose
stands tall
here
and now
no longer in my hands
but
in the earth
that we walk each day,
trying to find meaning
for our own lives
and looking toward the heroes
to keep guiding us.
You were my hero,
and this is your flower.
Your memory stays with
me,
and it'll stay with this world."

Very well wrapped at the end with this last stanza. BEAUTIFUL POEM!!

Zuzanna

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Hello Neil--Imaginative and thought provoking poem.Life often creates a hurdles and it is difficult to be happy at all times. You have captured that in your poem quite well.

"Your mind crawls between the web dust and into the cosy corner of books,"

Loved the attached picture... Zuzanna

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Original item by Neil Francis Brooks

Hello Malcolm,

Grete take on the female cosmetic surgery. I am rather against those artificial improvements. You have used a humorous lines too. That adds a
more taste to the entire write. But the sadness creeps in your last stanza. Thank you for the angle look at different solution to self improvement. Have a great holidays!

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Neil, hi You have used a lot of creativity in your poem I love your lines about the Ocean. It gives me the vision of strength, power. Fear of the anger of the high waves! All of that creates a wonderful picture in my mind!

Great write!
Zuzanna

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Original item by Neil Francis Brooks

Daniel ~ your poem sounds great! It show the appreciation for life. Each day it is a gift.
Your lines show a lot of beauty, sorrows, hope, love , passion. Days to enjoy and savor like a great food. Very inspirational and like Moxy said
"Very reflective." Thank you for sharing this great food for thought in your enjoyable poem...Zuzanna

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Terrific lament for the passing moment -- Carpe Deum! I think it's so very strong that you don't need the last line because that's implicit in the rest of the poem. Very reflective and yet uplifting, Daniel.

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Oh bleak beauty! Oh lament of the final incision! The grave's a very private place, but none, I think, do there embrace, dermabrase, or chemical peel. I shall now call you Malpoet Marvell.

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Morag, I'm new to this site (joined this morning!) so was looking through some old poems of the month. This is such a powerful poem, anthemic almost and chock full of some great couplets. Men underestimate women at their peril!

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I loved reading this John - there is a sincerity with which you capture that lost time.

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Philip
You are amazing writer!
I love your feelings. You know how to grab an attention of a reader. Great poem!

Zuzanna

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HI Phil, this is a wonderful poem.

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Hi ricardo, this is nice.

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hi daniel, this is a very nice poem!

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great poem phil with all those innits going around here is a poem called rebel for you!

I am a slave to conformity
A social sheep
I go with the flow
And I am not too deep
I follow the latest fashion and fads
I hate all pop music especially my dads
I am hip and happening and talking like bling
Pretending I am black innit and ting

When I get older I’ll pull up my jeans
Comb down my hair and forget my teens
But today I’ll never conform or so it seems
I’ll live life in rebellion or so it seems

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valentines day is fast aproaching and I would have loved to write this poem and dedicate it to my valentine
well done!

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nothing to say is also a great poem
I love the imagey please put some more up!

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very good poem some great stanzas in there a humourous but a dark poem aswell

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Thank you to all three of you for your kind words. Love is a complicated feeling to experience.

Paul I hope to cross the stage at bolton soon

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Original item by Phil Golding

Zuzanna thank you very much for you very kind words

One of the formats I enjoy is trying to put myself into another persons shoes or cive force to an object bringing it to life.

Thank you once my fellow poet

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Original item by Phil Golding

Philip,

WONDERFUL POEM!
You have captured new life, a miracle I call.


"Wind sweeps in, “don’t like this” you cry in your first cry

“Put me back now, its bloody cold out here”, you think say,

“Who ever pulled me out can just put me right back”."

These lines a very powerful image!!
Perhaps the new born feels that way, I am sure.
They are not able to say a word at the time of birth.
Beautiful write my dear Poet!

Thank you...Zuzanna

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Original item by Phil Golding

Ricardo,
It reminds of those long days on the Polar Circle where there in no darkness just day light there is a lot of imagination as well. The picture I draw from your write it is scary. Loved the mystery, the unknown…Great read!

Thank you...Zuzanna

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Hi Neil, nice poem

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Original item by Neil Francis Brooks

I really like the way you have used the words in this poem, they give the poem a beautiful ryhthm i feel.

One of my favourite lines is 'Once her glad eyes traced masses, now a tooth retraces dynastic clashes'.

I just imagine this great woman of her time, like Joan Arc, an iconic female figure.

I think it a wonderful, powerful poem, and well thought out.

Well done

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itchy feet

if all roads lead to rome
then to roam i must go.....


stuart smith

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hi dave
sounds like a great thing to hovis in wonderland. please get in touch and let me know when the next batch is going on. i am still in penrith and a bit out of touch, but keeping bumping into old friends of mine and richards even up here. take care
stuart smith

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Lenford
Great take on the subject!

"My Hands Were Made Strong"

We do have modern type of slavery in every corner of the planet! Often one does not know that has been treated differently then others, why because it is under the table type of slavery.
It is visible over here to- I think it is very sad to know that slavery still exists. It can be compared to discrimination because of the country of origin or the colour of the skin. there are many things that fall into this category. It reminds of "ROOTS"- A movie I have seen many times and was always sorry for those young black African people that were captured and used as slaves for a free labour. This is endless subject for me.

The poem you wrote has depth and a lot of educational base. It teaches those who do not know much about what has happened at the beginning how the slavery started. Thank you for the great writes...Zuzanna

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Lenford
I will come back to read more of your poems soon. It is a pleasure to read your poetry.
Thank you...Zuzanna

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Hello Lenford

Your love poem has many wonderful faces. The poetry shows a lot of depth, almost psychological approach toward the emotion. You have depth in expression too. Being a thinker by nature you are able to put all on paper what was on your mind merely from observing others.

Your intuitive nature helps to create with vision and easiness each line that you intent to present to the reader. Fabulous job!
Zuzanna

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Lenford

Any written word can not be judged as good or bad so I was told. This is why I would like to pass the information on you so you will not be as hard on yourself thinking that your writes are good or not. Poetry today has many different faces. Some are free style some are Sonnets, some Haiku. People use many styles. All styles are nice.

I found your writing very nice. Easy to read and your feelings are in connections with your words.
Enjoyed this stanza in particular, as it gave me the perfection of your expressed feelings toward someone special.

"Lying down, I idly stroke your face and twist your hair around my fingers
You smell delicious, your skin is so silky, I put my arms around you and
Give you the tightest of squeezes. We both hold our breath.
Two hearts beat in unison, valentine’s day is our day. "

Very well written! Great poem!...Zuzanna

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Oh and I forgot one new type of slavery, very popular all areound america. Its the illegal mexicans, that are in a strange way the new slaves, they havent a clue! They get paid dirt wages. But then they have perks like free medical/dental, education, no taxes, free houseing and food.They can get loans for homes and cars and open bank accounts, with little to know proof of wages or who they are. I guess it could be said to be a modern type of slavery, with a twist.

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Original item by Lenford White

HI Lenford, nice poem.Are your from the South? I grew up hearing storys from family about slavery. Slavery is alive and doing well still today. The slave trade has been found in London, and Isreal, and Im sure other places as well. They now sell females of all ages, and I would guess boys to a point.The jobs are probably more degrading in this day and age as they are all sex slaves, working 12 hours or more a day, and their owner takes 80-90 % of the money made. Its interesting that the UN knows about this and the respective governments know, but never do anything to stop the slave trade. thanks

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It can mess with your mind but always follow the yellow brick road and don't forget to click your heels three times and you'll get there.
Where have you been? We've missed you at both Bolton and Wigan?

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Original item by Phil Golding

Hi Neil
I like the imagery and tautness of both these poems - keep 'em coming

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Lovely jewels of poems, the rhymes exactly right, and without undue fuss, drive the whole poems wonderfully.

Just the right amount of play with the themes to bring up the sparks, and just the right use of the colloquial to blow the blaze.
(stop using silly metaphors! Sorry aboput that!)

And what a lovely photo!

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Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Great one Phil, love sure does mess us all up.

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Philip ~ This poem is wonderful! I like the way you presented the love and fear of being loved.
The Metamorphosis are great in your write.

GREAT JOB!!

Zuzanna

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Original item by Phil Golding

With out of DREAMS people will have difficulties to exist. Dreams are vital to human beings.
Your poem is thought provoking and well written.

Thank you Melissa for sharing the dreams for better tomorrow.

Zuzanna

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Great poem Daniel!!

Love,passion and pain. I feel each of your words if they were like a 'block letters' that one can touch!

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Original item by Daniel Hooks

Thank you Paul and Clariisa for your feedback and taking the time to read my poem.

Much appreciated

Belinda

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Original item by Belinda

Thank you Mel, I wanted the poem to trigger some thoughts but at the same time for the reader to be taken on a journey, and it sounds like I've managed to achieve that.

Belinda x

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Original item by Belinda

Thank you steve for your comments about my poem. The rhyme in the poem wasn't deliberate, it's just the way it came out, and I agree that it read like a short story that flows.

Many thanks again

Belinda

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Hi Clarissa its not altogther true I am supersenstive but i don't get really angry I just become hurt I worte this poem because i wanted to take the mickey out of myself and I wanted to wirte a funny poem about that!

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Original item by Daniel Hooks

HI daniel, if this is true, your like my youngest child ! Hes a wonderful child but can get so mad hes like a little bomb. I enjoyed reading this and was reminded of some relatives now passed.Yoga may be a good class to take, need peace of mind.

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Original item by Daniel Hooks

Hi Daniel, This is a nice poem, I could really understand it.

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Original item by Daniel Hooks

A beautiful poem Belinda. I love the contrast between the poem's soft rhyme and rhythm and the clinical questions. It asks you strong questions, but strokes your hand at the same time. lovely, lovely.

Mel
xx

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Hello Belinda

I really like how 'Donald' flows. (That sounds weird, doesn't it? A flowing Donald.)

I like what you've done with the rhyme in this poem. It challenges preconceived ideas about rhyming poetry, and that's a good thing - far too many poetry snobs in the world.

Paul's right. It is an oddly moving poem. There's a sadness to it - but it's a sadness that observes rather than seeking to engage the reader's sympathy/pity.

Great opening line too.

Good 'un.

Steve

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Original item by Belinda

I'd like to see you perform this one. Powerful stuff.

Of course, I'd expect nothing less than the Pete Crompton copyrighted trademarked and rubber-stamped full-on relentless rage with it.

Reads well off the page (well, screen). Good 'un.

Steve

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Really like the line 'shrunken violet promises'.

It's a great, tight poem, Peter.

Well done.

Steve

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Melissa~ This poem is wonderful!
You have described a lot of emotions that you experience in life. Thought provoking as well. Great use of metamorphosis.

GREAT POEM!!!

Zuzanna


I busy my mind
with distractions and dreams.
I ride the ocean.
I just forget that the wave
that I cling to
will come down,
crashing upon me,
and I will have no choice
but to feel.

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Hi Melissa, This is a nice poem. Hope your well! Clarissa

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