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Revenge is a dish

best served cold


Even if it broke your heart


I would try and advise you to

just get on with

your life.


You may tell me

you loved him with

all your heart

I would still try and

tell you to just get on

with your life.


You may scream and rant until

I am blue in the face

but I would still try

to tell you

to just walk away

and carry on

with your life.


You may drive round

to their house

and just sit there

until you see

them leave

before trying to run

them down

just to scare the sh*t

out of them

but I would still advise you

not to bother.


You may tell me

he's stolen all of

your Charles Bukowski books

and made a big bonfire

out of them

in his back garden.


I'd lend you my car keys

if he did that.


◄ Edge of the World with Billy Mackenzie

For Silence ►


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Jeff Dawson

Thu 13th Aug 2009 00:43

Hi Andy, like the layout of this, nice one and an ineteresting piece, cheers Jeff

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Thu 30th Jul 2009 20:12

I think that most of us can relate to the emotions involved... always nice to know you have a friend who will listen to you and humour you when you need it most...
This put a smile on my face : )

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winston plowes

Tue 28th Jul 2009 22:35

Hi Andy, What about adding a line at the end, something like

I'd lend you my car keys
and go for a stroll (or similar)
if he did that.

liked this one Andy. Win x

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Cate Greenlees

Tue 28th Jul 2009 14:32

Agreed.....but its hard to see humour in a situation when you are the one involved and just want to rip the bastards heart out!!!!!
Cate xx

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Tue 28th Jul 2009 14:15

I like the humour at the end too Andy - life can throw a lot of shit at everyone but we must never lose that.
Isobel x

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Tue 28th Jul 2009 11:37

Nice one Andy.
I absolutely love the use of Charles Bukowski in this poem. It speaks volumes, and in keeping with Cynthia's comment, there's a wry kind of humour in the ending. I like that.


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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 28th Jul 2009 09:41

Good one, Andy. Very true, and therefore quite funny. I do think there is really more humour in life that any other true emotion.
I did get a teeny bit lost in your pronouns - the mix of singulars and plurals. You might clarify what you meant to keep the thought strong.

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