Hi Dave,
Thanks for your comment on 'Play Me', glad you liked it.
Cx

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Sounds good gal... Im partial to the odd diamond or two{or three} myself!
Cate xx

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

A very amusing poem... made me laugh out loud! Its amazing how you put pairs of socks into the washer and loads of odd ones come out! At least I can now blame it on Pandora!!
Cate xx

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Original item by Dave Carr

The Best! x

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Dave,

You been spying on me? (Maybe not - even I wouldn't do socks with sandals!) A fitting illustration of why we shouldn't judge by appearances. Had to look up "crutonic" though - where did you find that one? Nunty (numpty?) and zooker had me floundering too - but any new words ae welcome!

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments. I think that remembering Neil's story and the consequent parental warnings probably put me off potholes for life ("don't go near there or you'll end up like . . .") I'm really impressed you did the Cheese Press. For me the test seems so much more mental than physical - although I doubt they make potholes in my width these days!

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Good one! Love to see if you can perform it without losing it! Maybe see you at the Tudor to test it out.
Cate xx

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Alison. The first Lance poem I have ever seen! Win

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Original item by Alison Smiles

Yes!

I'm with Gus - the last pic was very short-lived!

Thank you for visting "Neil" and your helpful and generous comments. I agree with all you say re the audio. I'm not too sure what I'm doing with it at the moment - a learning curve; so any comments/technical assistance are/is appreciated. I'll have a play around with it, but I'm pleased you saw what I had in mind. Sorry if I made you cry - it makes me cry too when I think about him.

Regards,A.E. x

p.s. You miscalculated - it's "LI" not "LII" - "LII" is sooo next year!

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Original item by Isobel

Hi Cate,

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments. I guess it's a story that's haunted me all of my life. It was a strange and somehow comforting experience to write about him and share it with people. I guess the truth of the story makes it more powerful. Perhaps truth is, as they say STRONGER than fiction. I'm pleased it touched you.

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Cate

Hi S.C. (I wasn't sure if it was Shoeless, or Carole - or both)

Thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments.

I looked at this earlier but didn't have time to comment - and now notice (as others have) that you have exchanged boobs for bivouacs (prefer boobs myself, but then I would, I'm a bloke!)

Like the chap visiting the shrink who told him, "Doctor, some days I think I'm a tepee, others I think I'm a marquee."
" I see the problem" said the Doc, "You're simply too tense."

Wear those rocks with pride!

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

Hi Alison,

And thanks for visiting "Neil" and your comments. Good to see poetry on contemporary issues - and handled deftly with the weaving-in of technical and relevant expressions.

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Alison Smiles

Hi Ray,

Thanks for your comments on "Visiting Neil." Any crit/crib is always welcome and valued. I'm not sure if you've read the note I posted shortly after; this may put the piece in a slightly different context.

This immediately put me in mind of Eminem's work. Fantastic manipulation of half-rhymes/off-rhymes and assonances throughout, tricking and toying with your reader's expectations to create that almost staccato effect. I always admire your obvious technical skills; when they are matched by content and context it just gets better.

Regards,
A.E.

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You have returned to the defensive and aggressive pic again.... NEED yer legs!!!

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Original item by Isobel

Hi Ann,

And thanks for visiting "Neil." There seems to quite a lot of "sensual" stuff being penned by you ladies at the moment. Are they putting something in the water?

Just one small query - What's "foreplay?" ;-)

I always feel I ought to be trying to write something erotic from the male perspective, but haven't managed it yet. Women are so much better at it.

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Picasso roaming

foaming into the heart of a

Manchester coffee break

slipping out of her shoe

she bleeds into the the blue memory stones of somewhere

Squinting

Watching rose tinting Matadors
Paint out politicos with strokes of dazzle day sunlight

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Hi Dave,

I'm a big fan of the use of dialect in poetry - and humour too. We are sometimes so serious about poetry we forget how to laugh. I'm glad that you're around to remind us. Got to keep those chuckle-muscles working!

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Dave Carr

Hi Ann,

Apologies for not commenting on this earlier. You posted it when I was off-site for a while so I missed it; and only now (via a very circuitous route) have discovered it. You don't need to change anything in this, and I would second Banksy's comments - it's a beautiful poem, delicately and thoughtfully handled. If there were a riposte to Auden's "Funeral Blues" this would be it. The title draws the reader in (isn't Coromandel a fantastic word - in the same way that Timbuktu and Samarkand and Xanadu are?) There is only one thing wrong with this - I wish I'd written it!

Regards,
A.E.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

No mention of sex Carole.... save the reference to sexual intercourse and size ....

Quote - 'and fuck off big diamonds'


Mmmmmmm... it always comes down to the same old issues...

Wonderful poem!!

Gus xx

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Original item by Shoeless Carole

a mouthful of poems...
come now...
... you don't expect me to swallow that, do you?

Seriously though this poem, which is good, could have , in my opinion, been superb if you had edited it a few times over.

Take your time... your work is worth it.

Gusxx

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

I like this one Kath! Sad and poignant :-)

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

This really gets the imagination going. Well written Steve.

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Original item by stephen smith

A marvellous piece of writing, and a remarkable story which really should be kept alive. So vivid and moving. I've been through the Cheesepress in Long Churn. Bad enough but kid's stuff compared with what Neil was doing.

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Fun, fun, fun! This reminds me of a rewrite I did on one of Lady Ga Ga's songs. It's called Gased by your underpants and it starts like this... Ra Ra Rom ma ma-a - a bad aroma ma-maa.... Do you recogise it? Don't know if I'll ever get round to performing it (I need a backing track) but I'd love to hear yours performed. The Pandora series has been fascinating - hasn't it? I've loved every one of them - the different personalities of poets on show, as much as the poetry! xx

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Original item by Dave Carr

I agree with Isobel... Beautiful writing and sentiments Anthony.
I am moved beyond words.

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Pandora's Box = sock heaven. Brilliant. Thanks for commenting on mine Dave. This is far better.

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Original item by Dave Carr

Just to emphasise the first sylable (in a Northern sort of way). Maybe it doesn't need it. Thanks - Dave

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Brilliant, Dave, very funny, I liked the sandals bit best of all. Don't know why Oh lympic flame, typo or am I missing summat?

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Original item by Dave Carr

Excellent.
I've seen him in Netto. Ooops!

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Enjoyed reading all the Pandora's Box poems. Here's something silly from me.
Dave

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Original item by Dave Carr

Banksy - you're obviously with the wrong woman!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi - Ann - yes I guess we should WALOP. Only problem being that people must email me with poems they feel worthy of nomination, for us then to all to vote on a winner. I have only had a couple of people do that so far. Do you have a list for me? If so, do email me... I will put a reminder up tomorrow. I guess Pandora's box may end up on two lists - but that doesn't matter, since the original idea was just a bit of fun.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

I feel I should have said something else - superb writing - the sort that touches you inside and leaves you feeling like you can't say enough...

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I'm glad you posted the explanation of who Neil is and how he died - it helps to understand the poem better and the sound effects.

I liked the introduction - like a conversation with an old friend before you launch into the meat of the poem.

I would have liked the echoing effects to diminish or cease from 'a firmament...' onwards and then pick up again towards the end. I say this because the words were so beautiful, I wanted to hear the weight of them without the distraction of the echo.

I think the echo effect represented perfectly the sounds you'd hear trapped in a cave - also the slipping in and out of consciousness of a dying mind.

I found the poem incredibly moving and yes I cried... There are too many beautiful lines to comment on, so I will just leave it at that. x

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi - "Visiting Neil" - would you allow me to put this on my website under "favourite poems by other authors" ? all the best. B

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what can we say - I'm sure you can hear the applause. B

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Beautiful. Just beautiful. Such a wonderful richness of language and imagery, and this poem will touch so many people on so many different levels. Anthony you have surpassed yourself!!
Cate xx

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Oh just some things I brought for you
I thought you might have missed – comforts, more for me than you
perhaps,

The whole poem is very accurate but, yes taking gifts to a grave side is a most devastating moment in life

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I'm soft. My eyes welled up too. In a good way.

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Ta very much, Tommy, Dave and Andy.

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Beautiful, I love such poems as these, and though it seems churlish to crib it, I shall anyway. The excellence of the poem lies between "a firmament of winter stars" and "an agnostic's faltering prayer". I think if you ended there and abbreviated the intro somewhat you'd have a great poem.

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I used "unthought" in the last poem I posted, without being certain it's a proper word. So I'll assume it is now.I love your inventive way with language, without always grasping what you're on about, though that's not the be-all. Funnily enough, I thought the best line was the simple "It makes me want to stamp my feet".

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi Andy, thanks for your feedback. I do agree with you about not needing hard and defensive together but when i read it back again i cant seem to not say it now. x

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Original item by Andy N

Hi, dear Ann! Thank you very much for congratulating me with my birthday. Your birthday is on the 26th of May, isn't it? We are really spiritually very close to each other. My congratulations to you. We say here: better late than never. With warmest wishes, Larisa

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Yes, this is superb. Its language, its pace but overall its theme which resonates with me as I lost a childhood 'best friend' when we were both just 15.

Great writing Anthony.

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi;

I referred my painter friend Olga over to your comment on your paintings... Have you being given any links off her stuff to look at online (there is a few bits and pieces) x

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

enjoyed this, marianne.. top banana in particular 'a suspended child willing the will of work away' but the language is generally pretty crisp and shows a lot of thought...

i enjoyed this! x

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

excellent dave.. i would totally fail to keep a straight face if i was trying to perform this however.. lol

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Original item by Dave Bradley

couple of layers there, kath which could be take several ways but i like the way you change it from the third person to the first person in the last stanza works pretty well..

not sure if you need both defensive and hard on the last stanza as i think it adds a extra beat which doesn't exist in the first two stanzas..

either way, top banana - i think you are defo getting better x

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

excellent stuff - lot of good lines but my favourite is 'the ill-defined tremor of repeat prescriptions'

andy n

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Me too ... absolutely wonderful. Love it!
Cx

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Original item by Anthony Emmerson