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Pandora's Box

“Refine your appetite.”

 

The hand is mercurial, a pensile obedience

for a cute fox, the champion of open heart surgery,

                                                                                                                             

and runs far beyond the prophetic tease, death is tepid

or so the child believes, the one that smiles in the stretch

 

of the sleeve, training the lock like a tarot. The earth walks

in the flesh of  the woman arrogantly, she is a folly of seasons;

 

a blush and then a pale, and so is no fairer to the changing tides

of our God, Curiosity, and slips, tipping apocalypse

 

like petals, marinating men maudlin.  Shaking the pantry, the prison

and the pill box, the best asphyxiation remains –

 

that heaven sent evil of Hope, lingering on a hinge.

◄ THE VINDICTIVE VOWEL (or the deflated self).

Walk alone ►

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winston plowes

Fri 28th May 2010 00:18

The Best! x

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Isobel

Mon 24th May 2010 15:01

I wasn't criticising the ending Marianne - just commenting on the irony that hope should be the clinching evil - it's the paradox that lends the poem pathos and makes it stand out. As artists, we all reflect our moods in poetry - don't know about you, but I can from go from one extreme to the other in a day or a month...
Don't feel any need to bang a big base drum just on my account. x

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Mon 24th May 2010 08:53

thankyou for the comments, I am considering ptting up an audio as soon as i can get my hands on a device to record.
isobel - i shall try to write a more optimistic poem in the future...

marianne

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Cate Greenlees

Sat 22nd May 2010 22:38

I have to agree with everything said Marianne. A very powerful piece of work.
Cate xx

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Francine

Sat 22nd May 2010 18:10

I have to agree with the powerful imagery at work here Marianne...
so many exquisite lines. Brilliant!

Francine x

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Anthony Emmerson

Sat 22nd May 2010 01:50

Hi Marianne,

You juggle words, sounds and meanings seamlessly. Particularly liked:

"the one that smiles in the stretch of the sleeve"

"she is a folly of seasons"

and others previuosly mentioned. I would still love to hear an audio of your reading, as I'm never convinced I'm hearing it as you intend it. Go on, treat us all!

Regards,
A.E.

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Isobel

Fri 21st May 2010 18:12

As I would expect from you - original and startling imagery. I'm presuming that pantry, prison and pill box stand for famine, crime and illness...you have such an unusual way of expressing yourself! Love the 'hope lingering on a hinge' but all in all a pessimistic ending, since it is perceived as being asphyxiating and evil...

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Andy N

Thu 20th May 2010 08:17

phew.. excellent, Marianne.. Bet that took some work! x

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Wed 19th May 2010 17:59

There is powerful imagery at work here, Apocalyptic in deed in it's message to us mere men ;-)
TC

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 19th May 2010 14:31

Wow Marianne! A winner IMO! Wonderful. "training the lock like a tarot", "tipping apocalypse like petals" "Hope, lingering on a hinge". x

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