Great fun to read, Lynn. Very enjoyable. x

Comment is about Railway Robbery That Never Was (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Look forward to hearing this performed, Chris. I really appreciate how you have captured this experience. xx

Comment is about A-HEAD-OF-ME. (blog)

Original item by christine yates

Good stuff, John. Full of burning resentment - does it lead to murder, I wonder...?

Comment is about It's so very touching (blog)

You have painted a wonderful picture with words.

Comment is about Supplicant (blog)

Hi John,

Just thought I'd drop you a line to introduce you to:

http://www.lightenup-online.co.uk/

It's run by a friend of mine, Martin Parker -

http://www.martinparkerverse.co.uk/

I feel sure that your work would be welcomed there and wondered if you might be minded to submit a few pieces?

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

like it! a haiku I can relate to. :o) made me smile!

Comment is about why do bananas (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I'd agree with those comments. Hilarious John and so well crafted.

Comment is about Edward 11 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks again Andy! How ya feeling now? x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thanks Ann x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thank you for your coment. I shall take it as a compliment. The Twitter poem, is part of my joke style of writing, I have more, but it's knowing how much rude material I can post on here. Kx

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

i like the structure of your language here, kath.. you really are starting to try out different things at the moment...

excellent x

Comment is about driftwood (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

Hi Alison,
Congratulations on poem of the month!

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Thank you David for your comment and your thoughts. I will update that poem. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

Endorsed! Edward II, plus a nod to Glen Campbell. Marvellous!

Comment is about Edward 11 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks for your comments on Edward 11, A. I don't often get accused of intellect!

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Cleverly crafted - the right balance of intellect and absurdity. Great hook, well paced - with a "poker up the bum" finish! What more could one ask of a ballad? Loved it!

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about Edward 11 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I think that sheep are probably safe from wrens too! xx

Comment is about Sparrows vs Cows (blog)

There seem to be lots of crows and magpies on here lately! Nice one John - they do have to live! And thanks for commenting on my crow.

Comment is about The Magpie (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks for kind comments.

Comment is about Holding the hand of the model maker (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

This poem has a delicacy about it. I enjoyed reading it Kath. xx

Comment is about driftwood (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

strange how we can all agree & next thing all disagree - for me, the last two lines are it. I know that they are somehow incongruous to the rest, but still work for me.

Comment is about retirement (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

I'm a little late catching up with my reading. Thanks for this.

Comment is about An interesting read - for the competitive . . . (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Having thought about it, I think the intro and ending could be beefed up. Just my opinion - lots of people will probably disagree now LOL x

Comment is about retirement (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

This is an enigmatic one for me Anthony.

If I had to guess, I'd say it was about suicide victims. There is some great imagery in here. I found the bit 'curled like foetuses at the sharp end of a needle' very powerful - unpleasantly so - which I guess is the effect you want. It also ties in to the unnatural way of life ending. Thinking about it abortion and suicide are quite linked - the planning and method that can go into it.

'Every one an exit wound' - is also a wonderfully sad way of describing such an end.

Great to see you posting.

Isobel x

Comment is about retirement (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

You men are something else...
I normally take the trouble to empty my tank before I get in the bath... Just how long do you lot spend in there?

Nice light hearted poem Dave. I think we can all identify! x

Comment is about Lie back and enjoy (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

It moved me too, Ann.

Comment is about Holding the hand of the model maker (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Dave,

Do what the "posh" folks do - pee on the sponge - then wring it out in the sink! Sorted.

Much to be said for bathing Dave. It's like food, something that can be bland or beautuful - depending on the experience. The hot tub - outside with a view of snow covered mountains and stars; oh and a bottle of the fizzy stuff . or the tin one in front of the fire (yep, got that t-shirt!)

An ancient and worthy ritual - anyone care for another geisha?

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Lie back and enjoy (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thanks for your comment on Trainspotters, Jane. I mean to check out the East Lancs some day, hopefully when I'm next up north. Greg.

Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)

Original item by jane wilcock

francine thankyou for your comment , but you read too much into the poem. there is no loss in this poem only gain

Comment is about in another life (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

I always pee in the bath.... but only when there's water in it :D

Comment is about Lie back and enjoy (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

BTW Cyn - I posted a pointer to a poem I liked out of the guardian by David Harsent called "Red".
given your thoughtful way of writing I thought you might appreciate it - for me it gets better every time I read it. xx

http://www.poetryfoundation.org/archive/poem.html?id=237476

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Cyn - ta very much.
(around dawn) - the odd thing is that you seem to like mine which I think are barely worth posting ! Hmph. xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I can hear Longfellow again. It's a lovely rhythmic piece.

Comment is about A World,s Turn Away (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

This is lovely but sounds like it should be set to music.

Comment is about Separation (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

A great poem, absolutely spot on. One of those 'I wish I'd written that' moments!

Comment is about The Magpie (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

It is hard to accept that we cannot have it all sometimes. I often think this too about the missed opportunities, etc... I have to believe that things happen for a reason and we do our best to follow our passions despite discouraging circumstances at times...

p.s. I love your comment!

Comment is about in another life (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

I see your time spent at the museum brought about some inspiration for you... Evocative and touching, Ann.

Comment is about Holding the hand of the model maker (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I wrote this to celebrate a moment where past and present meet - a time when you can almost touch someone you never met, by joining their skill(great) with your own(scant.) It moved me greatly.

Comment is about Holding the hand of the model maker (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

John, thanks in return for your comment on Trainspotters. I knew I could rely on a steam engine buff like you!

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Hello Cynthia,
Thanks for your thoughts on Magpie. You're right about the substitution of "probably". I'll bear it in mind when I perform it.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hello Greg,
Thanks for your thoughts on Magpie.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Great poem, John. Greg has it all said for me. One small point: 'as like as like not' could be simply 'probably' with a perfect metrical beat maintained and no loss of intent. Just a suggestion.

Comment is about The Magpie (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I hate magpies, even though they look beautiful, because of their behaviour and the ugly sounds they make. But this observant, clear-eyed poem makes clear why making bird friends and enemies is an irrational, human trait. Good work, John

Comment is about The Magpie (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Love it, oh shoeless one. xx

Comment is about in another life (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

yes, you are right, will sleep on it.

Comment is about in another life (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Ok - I think the first verse is much stronger than the second.
Personally - I would lose the 'So' (2nd line, 2nd verse) and re-arrange slightly so the rhythms match in both verses.
The last two lines are ambiguous (I tend to like ambiguity - allows for some interpretation), but they could possibly be a bit stronger.

Nevertheless, I did like it - but then I like the idea of another life - what could've been etc. Wrote something in a similar vein a long while back - 'Confetti'
:)
Cx

Comment is about in another life (blog)

Original item by Shoeless Carole

Just had 15 seconds to thank you for your comments on Interview before - Whooaa - here it comes again!

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor