Goodbye Childhood

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Ah, that old chair, weakened from many 'talks' previous to this one,

He started to speak while the others observed me, too professional and ignorant to reach me,

"Have you seen anything?" he said,

I was seven, i had seen alot of things,

Sympathetically, he added, "Do you know what i'm asking you?"

How stupid of him to percieve me as a child,

"Yes" i said, "i'm not a child you know",

They were waiting to drink every word i muttered,

I told them of ' the walkway' times, where he took us to do what ' good girls' did,

I told them there was nothing to worry about, that he probably wouldn't be mad at them,

They were just here certainly to make sure i was a good girl,

Oh i was excited about that, They'd tell him i was great, the best,

and i wondered how i would be rewarded,

Maybe a library book, a jam sandwhich, or the ultimate, a pengiun bar,

I was trying to work out which sister i would share it with,

I perceded to tell them of how i was the best look out,

They gasped, horrified...

One of them had broke down crying now, I certainly wouldn't be sharing my reward with her,

Crying was forbidden and i thought she would get me into trouble, I would stay away from her,

I waited impatiently outside while i listened to the older ones angrily recalling their 'good girl' incidents,

Oh they were sobbing heartily and heavily,

They would be in trouble,

Then it was over, but why did he look so angry?

Why was he being taken away in that car?

Mam had that severe disappointed look on her face, at us,

We were left in silence,

I was confused,

Dad was gone, mam was angry with us,

We were all taken away,

After everything i had told them, not cried,

"A very brave little girl"

No reward?... That was the saddest part of that day

I was seven.


◄ How Will I Feel Today?

goodbye ►


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Wed 30th Mar 2011 10:10

I am sure that was dug from somewhere deep and it rings of truth and sadness, yes, even love.

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melanie coady

Sun 13th Mar 2011 10:41

thank you very much gareth xx

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Gareth Writer-Davies

Thu 10th Mar 2011 22:50

Very touching

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melanie coady

Thu 10th Mar 2011 08:26

laura thank you greatly for ur comment xx jules i am truly so sorry to hear that i really am..if you ever need to talk my emails on my page or you can find me on facebook xx

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Laura Taylor

Wed 9th Mar 2011 14:42

Searing honesty, and the capturing of the innocence of the child in that situation.

I admire your ability to get it down on the page as it felt at the time...

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melanie coady

Wed 9th Mar 2011 12:34

thanks kealan xxx

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kealan coady

Wed 9th Mar 2011 12:29

beautiful piece girl, honest meaningful writing

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Wed 9th Mar 2011 09:59

I cried at this, because I have lost access to my son for the last sixteen years.

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melanie coady

Wed 9th Mar 2011 08:21

thanks andy hard writing it but c'est la vie and all that jazz lol

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Andy N

Wed 9th Mar 2011 08:08

i think it's probably more of a short story / bit of prose, melanie but i do like it and think the last sentence 'i was seven' has a lot of power behind it. top one! x

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melanie coady

Wed 9th Mar 2011 07:22

thank you hun...i wasn't sure whethar to put it up

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Tue 8th Mar 2011 22:14

a sad sad story,but very well written indeed.thanks for sharing.x

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