curmudgeon..what a wonderful word..

A subject which we all have our views and..that last verse of yours is great..as Isobel says good rhyme and pace throughout..nice work MC

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Original item by M.C. Newberry

Lovely poem, Ann. I agree with Terry, it's what you don't say that says as much as what you do. Good that he will be back for Christmas. xxx

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Felt where you were coming from with this..but like Lynn I do think you can do with some editing and cherry pick your lines to make the point..really like the lines I don't know what I am or can be to you, but I cannot be this..says much. :)

Comment is about Beholder's Eyes (blog)

Original item by Ushiku Crisafulli

Orchids?..beautiful yes and there was a time they thrived in my hands but sadly I have lost them all and it seems sensless to have beauty die in my hands so now I am left orchidless :(

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

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Not all sexual relationships are vaccuous, Isobel. Indeed the donkey and I have been very happy since that first encounter.

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Hello Lynn. Glad you liked "Imagine my Surprise".

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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Thanks for the comments on "Imagine my Surprise". I will leave the line between fantasy and the autobiographical unclear.

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I enjoyed this, especially the first verse and "this lost boy without a map carving wishes into the whispers in the wind". I never consider myself a good critic, yet I would say there are several other lines I think are good, although I worry if in whole it may be over long. I also like the repetition of I can't be this.

Comment is about Beholder's Eyes (blog)

Original item by Ushiku Crisafulli

Really good, Anne. "my toe within your heel" is fab.

wash up two cups

and two crumbed plates.

would sound more natural to me.The next verse is a cracker but like Winston I wasn't so keen on those longer lines at the end.

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Lynn
The fact that someone enjoys what I've written means the world, so thank you very much.
I'm trying to write the follow-up to Out of the Mouths, but I can't figure out if I'm going OTT. I probably am, but what the heck
Thanks for taking the time.

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Sorry that should be "Graham"! But good luck to Chris too!

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Original item by Graham Robinson

Chris, can't make Oct but very much hope to come in Nov. Good luck with the launch - I'm sure it'll be a brilliant night.

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Original item by Graham Robinson

Had me welling up as soon as (by line 2) I realised what this was about. Very effective in an understated and delicate manner. This is a few years off for me (son 13) but I'm blubbing already!! XXX

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Anne
Those first three lines are corkers!

Lovely sad/sweet `Fled the nest` poem.

Without the title and lines 13 and 14 it would make a very moving poem of a different kind.

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi there ant, welcome to WOL. Winston

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Elaine, Great to see your comments on Autism and fit. I am on a bit of a roll at the moment and really enjoying writing. and yes I now have a mini collection of these football report found poems. Win x

Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)

Original item by Elaine

Coopey! Love it man, smiled the whole time I was reading!!

Comment is about "Imagine my Surprise..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

"At least you got to getting old!
And when at last life loses hold,
Salute and draw your pay."

Those lines really jumped out at me. This is one of my favorite subjects to read. I love to see how people express this, and let me just say, you have done a stand up job!

Comment is about LAST POST (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

You did a great job capturing this Lynn.

Comment is about Autumn Dawn (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Wow, you really poured out the emotion in these lines.

Comment is about Is It Cold Where You Are? (blog)

Original item by Tom

I like this. What you didn't say says as much as what you did.

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Lynn, 'hands deep in my pockets' reminded me of a poem by Fleur Adcock I think called The Immigrant. Yours so well expressed the sudden change of weather tone.

Comment is about Autumn Dawn (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Heh heh - be careful where you think of performing this John. If I was a vicar with a card sharp wife, I'd wouldn't take kindly to this. Or if I owned that donkey on Blackpool beach...

Comment is about "Imagine my Surprise..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Super read lady.. :)

Comment is about Trip Wolf (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

I guess that age can take away the presumption
of good health and the inferred superiority of youth. Freedom can come with being able to say and do what you want after a lifetime of
being held captive saying and doing what was
expected. It's termed "eccentric" and no worse
for that. I prefer "curmudgeon". :-)

Comment is about LAST POST (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Well...blimey!

bit of an eyebrow raiser..

Comment is about Involvement (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

lovely, simply lovely x

I did one similar Kath shall try to find it..think it was about glittering acres and the moon swallowing herself or summat :)

These moments are precious and few words are needed x

Comment is about For a moment (blog)

Original item by Kath Hewitt

A tonic - so much poetry is "worthy" and navel gazing. This is the perfect tone for the subject!

Comment is about "Imagine my Surprise..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi Ann,
Nice poem.Creates the mood without being over explanatory.Lovely.

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks both - yes Win, they were all done - on Thursday! You may be right about the end but I'm still hanging onto those images for now. (But he's coming down for christmas so that's OK!)

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Nick, Welcome to WOL. Hope you continue to post things on here. Winston

Comment is about Nick Coleman (poet profile)

Original item by Nick Coleman

Lol! Thanks for your comments, S&T, much appreciated. This was inspired by walking Benji at 6.20 in the morning before going to work! Thanks again, Lynn xxxx

Comment is about Autumn Dawn (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi again zethembiso, thanks for adding a picture and welcome aboard. Winston

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Hi Emma, welcome to WOL. Winston

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Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Hi Rose, Welcome to Write Out Loud. Winston

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Original item by Rose Fraser Ritchie

Hi Ann

loved all these reflective actions. Can see them all being done. great poem

might be tempted to make a blunter end and get rid of the two longer lines at the end. just an idea. like this -


Fold back the futon
shake the duvet
wash the sheets.


put away the sugar
till next time.

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Lol - I can imagine the reading groups you lot must belong to!

I've read this more than once and it always makes me laugh. What is it about Tunbridge Wells? I bet they're just as rampant as any other town - probably worse cos it's all pent up.

Comment is about "Imagine my Surprise..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Nice rhyme and pace - and good to see some positives in getting old... Some old people tend to think their age gives them an excuse to say exactly what they like without wrapping anything up. I'll probably be one of them :)

Comment is about LAST POST (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Spare and very effective, Ann.

Comment is about son goes (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I really like the way you express the thoughts and feelings in this, Thom.
It's always reflective. I especially like the title and these lines:

'All this assumption of absolutes, burned bridges
there being no way to return to stir this into a mess'

'All this forward thinking, predictive dreaming
pushing eyes and minds to see something not yet shown'

Comment is about Is It Cold Where You Are? (blog)

Original item by Tom

Hee hee, wicked, John.

Comment is about "Imagine my Surprise..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

marvellous !!

Comment is about Unfeeling (blog)

aha!
did,nt let my ignorance show
this time.(having nearly missed 'love games)

this reminds me of so many
woodland Autumn walks we have had,
in which we always ended up
making piles with dead leaves-
lying down on them and......(better not)

you will have the sweats hee hee.

especially loved the last two lines

night night lovely Lady
S&T.xxxxxx

Comment is about Autumn Dawn (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I thought you'd be more of the "H&E" generation ;) .......sorry

Comment is about "Imagine my Surprise..." (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Westminster seems a better bet
If company you seek to get!
Your lines brought a mix of wry sympathy and
a knowing twinkle to these old London eyes.
M.C.

Comment is about Christmas in Camden (blog)

Original item by Jack Pascoe

thanks Winston

Comment is about Bob Hill (poet profile)

Original item by Bob Hill

most excellent...nuff said !

Comment is about Clear Blue Air (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hi Dave
I love poems that I can understand; are witty; and very clever. For me, this does it all.

Comment is about Not a tit at all (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

To anyone considering attending this group,I'd say just give it a go.I attend every month and it's a good group to join in with for making you think more deeply about the construction of your poems. Of course,Elaine is also a great host also!

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Original item by The Poetry Society Wigan Stanza Group

Hi Jack, Welcome to WOL. Winston

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