This is lovely Katy but makes me feel it is more a song than a poem. Particularly like the opening line

Comment is about La Petite Mort of Creativity (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

I love the opening line 'The sky is tragic rippled with fire'
Fab

Comment is about flat (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Crittall windows, there is a blast from the past Ray. I remember them well. awkward metal things that used to warp in the heat. I love the grim reaper in the white coat.

Comment is about HOW LOW CAN YOU GET? (blog)

Original item by ray pool

An interesting take on first love. Nice one David

Comment is about First Love (blog)

Original item by David R Mellor

A moment caught in time here Trevor almost frozen. Fab

Comment is about Fancy (blog)

Original item by Trevor Alexander

Martin, I absolutely love this poem. I haven't the eloquence to do justice to your craft. I do hope you are extremely proud of your work, it is truly beautiful.

Comment is about In Dickens (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks Rose - always good to get a bit of feedback. These were just daft, a bit of fun. Probably not poetry at all, the purists will be snarling, but it makes me happy to write whilst unemployed and worried about everything else under the sun.

Been reading some of Colin Hill's stuff and they make me laugh. I like poetry/verse/whatever that doesn't conform and is not up its own backside. Some of my stuff rhymes (when I make the effort), but a lot is just a brain dump imagined at 4am in the morning.

Anyway, as always, thanks for even bothering to comment. Good or bad, it is always good to know what people think. I just write for fun mainly, but I do have some serious ones too (see my blog). Basically, at the moment, I just find it a Cathartic process. Always.

A

Comment is about Daft (blog)

Original item by Andy Smyth

I've no doubt their handlers have ways to make sure those blasts go off in the event someone has a moment of unsurety. Or else we would hear more about these "unsuicided" suicide bombers.

Cool thought, though, and well put together.

elPintor

Comment is about Satisfaction (blog)

Original item by terry ireland

Thanks for the kind comment kimafia.

I'm enjoying your stuff - 'Dance' works - can you make a longer poem?

Comment is about kimafia Jones (poet profile)

Original item by kimafia Jones

Busted again..! x

Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Thats a winner Lynne... (i'm the secret Judge) ... (but don't tell anyone).... (or maybe i'm not)

"I will write what I want where I want." thats poetry baby!

Respect the humour.

Comment is about POTW concerns (blog)

clever(always)comical (always) am I envious(always)

but do I enjoy Andys poems?(always!)

Rose

Comment is about Daft (blog)

Original item by Andy Smyth

I don't use this site, very often, as it does not have the capacity to give me positive feedback when I want it !! Another 'irritation' is the advertising of USA sites !! Most of us have neither the money or desire to travel to the USA purely for some poetry performance !! Why don't they form their own 'Write Out Loud' !! They have no place on a British site. Whose was this cockamaney idea in the first place ???

Comment is about joe ranter (poet profile)

Original item by joe ranter

Wow, you are going back, to The Sweet Green days, when there were but 7 or 8 of us members of Write Out Loud.

A truly lovely piece of writing Chris, and what a fascinating background background. Thank you.

Comment is about 'Tourdion' by Chris Stevenson is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

profile poems are great.. will have to have a look at the rest defo but excelent.. x

Comment is about Edwyna Beaumont (poet profile)

Original item by Edwyna Beaumont

Ps. What do think the odds are on POTW?

Comment is about POTW concerns (blog)

Sorry Lynn for misinterpreting your work.
I merely meant that if the topic was placed on the discussion pages, it would stand a better chance of being debated in a wider forum.

Comment is about POTW concerns (blog)

agree wholeheartedly with you Graham.

P&S

Comment is about POTW concerns (blog)

Hi Graham. Thanks for you inbox message confirming that the judges will not reveal their identities.

I will write what I want where I want. It's a poem and it's just a bit of fun!

Lynn x

Comment is about POTW concerns (blog)

the title drew me right in.

A "graphite beam" bearing observer and a muse..it seems a well conveyed tribute to enamoration with the peculiarities that coexist with the ordinary.

It is almost as if it were our perceptions of who (or what) we love must be treasured and guarded as much as the object of love itself.

I like it.

Comment is about sometimes the only way to react to this life is to find hope in stupid things. (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

POTW has been running for only 3-4 weeks or so and has been well received.

Perhaps this thread belongs on the discussion section and not amongst the blogs!

Oh! And by the way Lynn, this is meant to be fun and each nominated poet does have the right of refusal.

Comment is about POTW concerns (blog)

hi kimafia.Hope you get to win dude.

P&S xx

Comment is about New Beginnings (blog)

Original item by kimafia Jones

Lovely work, Chris. I particularly like that last stanza! And thanks to you I now know what a 'tourdion' is, too.

Comment is about 'Tourdion' by Chris Stevenson is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

cheers david. the shape just grew naturally. it took quite a long time to work out the different anagrams (dont know if you'd noticed but everything is an anagram of the first line).

Comment is about sad news (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Lynn check your PM

Comment is about 'Airways, Breathing, Circulation' by Peter Knaggs is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Now this POTW (in my opinion) is a positive example of well earned notoriety.

Wish I were capable of producing such a fresh approach to this eternally well worn theme. Excellent

Comment is about 'Tourdion' by Chris Stevenson is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Could somebody answer my previous question please?

Comment is about 'Airways, Breathing, Circulation' by Peter Knaggs is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hahaha! Love it xx

Comment is about SNAIL INTELLIGENCE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Beautiful ugly - love that xx

Comment is about sometimes the only way to react to this life is to find hope in stupid things. (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hey Stu - been away for a bit - you know life stuff .....!! Thanks for reading & commenting on SeaDreams - I'm so pleased you liked it!! :)) xx

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Helen for taking the time to read & comment on SeaReams - I'm glad you liked it xx

Comment is about Helen (poet profile)

Original item by Helen

Thanks again Bill & Helen for taking time out to read & comment :)) xx

Comment is about Sea Dreams (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

it's just so beautiful....
cuddos for ur thoughts

Comment is about Beauty Day (blog)

Original item by Joshua

this is an excellent piece of writing that i had completely missed. i have no doubt it will inspire 30 odd comments like the previous piece...

Comment is about 'Tourdion' by Chris Stevenson is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

very moving piece Michael.Thank you.Jemima.

Comment is about Live On - Awake Till Death (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Mike, what has your years of support and threats of violence to do with the facts, the bald lies and state abuse? (I went to my first match in 1964) Tommy

Comment is about 'Airways, Breathing, Circulation' by Peter Knaggs is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Maybe we all suffer frustration starting with school when our young minds felt nowhere to dwell in the adult sphere, and that curse is carried on into adult life - which again is full of curses and pettiness . I understand fully the sentiment , it is wonderfully clear.

Ray

Comment is about Splendid Is The Flower (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

As always, MC, your opinion disagrees with my own but you express it cogently and with courtesy.
I will supersede this post with another shortly which should encourage the ending of comments.

Comment is about SHOULD WE STAY OR SHOULD WE GO? (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Just one more thing if I may.

All praise and no criticism diverts 'Promise' from the open road to perfection. Into a cul-de-sac named mediocre.

Bout time a line was drawn under this one 'eh.

Comment is about 'Airways, Breathing, Circulation' by Peter Knaggs is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

The EC decision to choose "harmonisation" instead of a
proper free trade arrangement led to massive regulation,
legislation, unrestricted immigration and resultant costs.
As part of this Union (referring to 2014 figures) we run
a trade deficit with the EU at £61.5 billion - and a
surplus with the rest of the world. The UK pays towards
EU costs the sum of £55 million per day to keep its
red tape empire on the road, including the commitment
to "progressive realisation of economic and monetary union".
Ergo, to remain within its grip sees the Euro waiting, as
well as irresistible policies that might be forced upon
us in the future about which we would have no choice
but to accept, no matter how damaging to this small
country, its products and its services. In the meantime,
the vast world beyond the EU looks on and waits.
Do we take a chance on freedom on our own terms
or let ourselves become hostages to the plans of
an entity with little love for us or our country?
The date in June is indeed a date with destiny.
Enough from me! It's been a most interesting
exchange of views on this post...thanks.

Comment is about SHOULD WE STAY OR SHOULD WE GO? (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Indeed, Lancs. But there is no question that there is a usage beyond its origin, a la "Putting the Great back into Britain". Check out the Facebook page entitled this. Check out the government's plan to market Great Britain abroad as a tourist destination.

Comment is about SHOULD WE STAY OR SHOULD WE GO? (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

It's a different member of the editorial team each week, on a rota basis (more or less, depending on availability, free time, and enthusiasm).

Since the POTW is about the *poem* not the person who picked it, and because we've agreed it as a team, their identity remains a closely-guarded secret even from themselves.

Nothing to stop you thinking "I'll bet so-and-so picked that one" if you want to, mind. But, really, it's all about the poem.

Comment is about Coming soon ... picking a Poem of the Week on Write Out Loud (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

So who picks the POTW? Who are they? Ta Tommy

Comment is about Coming soon ... picking a Poem of the Week on Write Out Loud (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Wolfie,
You are the first person ever to read and comment on my words. (Except for my primary school teacher!)
As a poetry virgin, I wasn't expecting the lift I felt when I read your comment.
It inspires me to write more. Thanks.

Comment is about Will I Do? (blog)

Original item by Chrissy R.

Phil,your explantion tells where the rot probably set in,but both of you did try your best in dealing with it.

No more whatsoever could be asked for.

Well tried,to the both of you.


Rose.x

Comment is about My mate Nick. (blog)

Original item by mentalelf. Philk.

Steven, you might be correct on your theorising regarding emotion. Unfortunately I think you may have misread what Ken wrote. I don't think he suggested it was lacking emotion. In fact I think he implies the opposite, saying that if drained of its emotion, he thought it unremarkable. Which seems to have been disproved here as there have been quite a few remarks. All be they, not all exclusively about the piece itself. Your response is a good example of how things may be misinterpreted and then subsequently cause some displeasure to some. Of course I may have missed something, but having reviewed several times I don't think so.

Harry.

Comment is about 'Airways, Breathing, Circulation' by Peter Knaggs is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Anyone who says this poem is devoid of emotion obviously has no notion of how to convey emotion in a poem. You don't tell everyone what the emotion is, you show it through the words and the action of the poem. Here, it also comes through in the long sentences broken into short clauses that give a desperate, breathless energy to the piece. As a dramatic monologue in the voice of an ambulance man, it does not use any flowery poetic language because the character would not use that kind of language. There's an edge of barely controlled anger at the journalist, as well as seeing a man trying to concentrate on the ABC's of his job.

I don't blame people for making the assumption that this is about Hillsborough; it is after all, in the news. But this could be about any disaster in a stadium.

I think it's an excellent example of what poetry can do: this is not merely a memorial of a sad event, it's a kind of re-enactment through the imagination. I'd even use the word 'anamnesis' about it: like the Eucharistic service in church brings the body of the crucified Christ right into the church with us, this is bringing back a disaster into our living rooms.

Comment is about 'Airways, Breathing, Circulation' by Peter Knaggs is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thank you for those words everyone David, Lynne, Steve, Rose, and the palatine.
Nicky died a while ago now when I was shipping out of NewZealand.
Nicky was never going to win, His dad was a drinker and his sons were drinkers. In his day he had been a brilliant engineer.
He was on a ferry that run aground in rough weather, he was in charge of a lifeboat as they abandoned ship, unfortunately they turned over in the weather and half his passengers drowned... he'd panicked and didn't start the engine properly, he never really overcame that. Stopped blaming himself.
I could talk sense to him but I could never overcome his self loathing.

Comment is about My mate Nick. (blog)

Original item by mentalelf. Philk.

Graham,

Thanks for the lovely feedback. I had the idea festering in my mental allotment for a couple of months before trying to do something with it. I'm really glad you like it.

Cheers,
Paul

Comment is about Mare's Tail (blog)

Original item by Paul A M Palmer

Hello Joshua,

Just a word of advice. you seem to have posted a poem on the Discussion section of the site instead of the Blog section.

If you would like others to read and comment on your work it would be more visible on the Blog section.

The discussion section is typically where a more general topic is aired and given a good old throw around.

very best regards, and keep posting!

Comment is about Joshua (poet profile)

Original item by Joshua