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Sea Dreams

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Barefoot she walks along the beach 
Retracing lost memories in ripples of sand
The murmur of the surf plays in her ears like muffled 
notes bowed on a cello
the sun drips down behind 
the cobalt waves casting shadows to equal those of 
her longest night 
Hushed colours paint her skin in hues of poignancy, 
her heart beats in rhythm with the tide as she glides
through the surf
Footprints erased as if she herself had ceased to exist
A hallucination in the twilight
She pauses
Salty spray kisses her cheeks like unshed tears from 
fatigued days and solitary nights 
Gazing out upon this vast entity 
Sublime in its majesty 
She recognises
The meaning of it all 
Life, love, death 
Images of antiquity play a delicate overture 
weaving dreams
A skittish child, pigtails and freckles, wearing a 
yellow gingham dress - collecting precious shells that 
will gather dust in a long forgotten attic
A timid teenager throwing pebbles into oblivion with 
the boy who will steal her heart, her kisses, her youth
A young family drawing their lives in the sand 
building castles for the sole pleasure of knocking 
them down
A graceful woman cloaked in bereavement concealing 
a smile for the reflection of youth glimpsed in the
 wrinkled mirror of time  
She lays herself down on a bed limestone
Silver hair fanning out amongst the seaweed 
And gives her last memory 
Back to the sea

(C) Pixievic



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Vicki Ayers

Sun 8th May 2016 10:51

Thanks again Bill & Helen for taking time out to read & comment :)) xx

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Helen Elliott

Tue 3rd May 2016 20:28

Wonderful. This really moved me. Some really beautiful lines and excellent imagery throughout :)

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Vicki Ayers

Tue 3rd May 2016 17:17

Wow thanks chaps :)) -
Graham thank you - I started writing this while listening to a cello piece - it stuck with me!
Jemima - thank you so much I'm glad you liked it!
Stu ...... praise indeed! I'm glad you stuck with it! It's not my normal style I thought I'd give it a go - so Thank you indeed xx

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Stu Buck

Tue 3rd May 2016 14:13

this is as far from my cup of tea as you can get but its beautifully written and does have some great lines in it and loads of imagery and assonance. 99 out of 100 of these i start and dont finish but this one i read in full and im glad i did. i love the closing lines to. nice to have you back.

Jemima Jones

Tue 3rd May 2016 12:45

Wonderful Pixievic! Thank you.Jemima.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 3rd May 2016 10:53

"The murmur of the surf plays in her ears like muffled
notes bowed on a cello"............

I like those words a lot!

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