Good one, David, masterful in suggestion. I never see comments from you; or do I just miss them?
Comment is about HEART OF WALES (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Glorious is fleeting friendly human contact CBT ;-)
Comment is about Child in a Stroller (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Welcome to WOL. I'm sure you will enjoy the site. Please take part whenever you can, with poems and comments.
Comment is about anastasia pelletier (poet profile)
Original item by anastasia pelletier
This is strong. Why not put these words into a 'poetic break structure'? They fall very naturally into such a form. The last thought is powerful in its truth. Check 'crocodile'.
Comment is about untitled (blog)
Original item by anastasia pelletier
Cute! Tight and clever. Well done. Sometimes I get the 'rhyming fits' which can be a real pain. The only cure is to spit them out into the 'poem' they're longing to be. But one not often worth sharing.
Comment is about Coffee shop blues (blog)
Original item by Pauliegreg
And I think the health of the entire Digestive System is paramount to the health of everything else. I hope the prayer worked. If we could only get rid of the waste material in our heads - maybe with a prayer there too.
Comment is about THE POWER OF PRAYER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Very wisely put. But I still think the heart needs a little caution. Life is a complicated business.
Comment is about Happy Ending (blog)
Original item by Vanna
Always an interesting read - but I see two poems in this - even with 'See - ' by way of some sort of explanation for 'Part 1' . IMO, you are addressing two completely different ideas which can stand brilliantly alone.
Always with respect.
Comment is about Tell it to the wind (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
Travis Brow
Wed 10th Jun 2015 11:32
Thanks, Graham. I've had problems before, copying from my source in Word, in Windows 8. I'm so inexpert (is that even a word?) but I stick with it to see if I can correct the glitch. Multiple copies seems fairly frequent. You sure are 'on the ball'. I have no idea why there is a line 'dysfunction' on the master Poetry Blogs'.
Know what you mean, I do, about chattering children. But I encourage it by chatting right back - block after block. They can be so funny - and very observant.
Comment is about Child in a Stroller (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
The standout part of this is the fact that the tiny child is facing you and not its mother.
I took my sixteen-month old granddaughter out on Sunday morning and she doesn't stop chattering.
I must sound as mad as those people who walk everywhere with an earpiece in their ear whilst talking on the phone.
Good observation of the sourness of the mother's demeanor.
Comment is about Child in a Stroller (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Koans come when you least expect them Laura. I was puzzling over the cult of celebrity actually and why/how people want to be "someone" on the world's stage, and how if they achieve some celebrity can they keep their selfness?
Me, I'm just happy to teach my sixteen-month old granddaughter to blow kisses.
Thank you for reading it Laura.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Don't knock it John,
I've been known to murmur Jesus Christ!! in there a few times. Usually whilst reading the sport section on Sunday mornings.
Comment is about THE POWER OF PRAYER (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
One person's 'oddball' is another person's thinker. I prefer the latter. I operate on an honesty level that doesn't sit well with many people. I think that's why I found it so hard to 'fit in' for so many years. I LOVE how your mind works :)
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Jealous of your rhyming ability Paul...must have been quite a hefty bill for that beanfeast great poem x
Comment is about Coffee shop blues (blog)
Original item by Pauliegreg
Haha....what an escapade!! Well told though!
Comment is about I quite like raisins, except for the one that got stuck up my nose! (blog)
Original item by Pauliegreg
"I could see that things were looking up, when I saw you looking down." Love that line! Nice work.
Comment is about LADY CONTORTIONIST (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Daniel,
Nice contribution to this weeks`Taffy takeover.
As a wartime evacuee I got my first taste of real countryside around the Menai straits
Why didn`t you do it in quatrain stanzas?
Comment is about MIST ON THE MENAI (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Darron,
Just when I was thinkin`of goin`on another cruise!
Comment is about DRIVEN BY FEAR (blog)
Original item by THE PEN AND THE PAGE
Laura, thanks so much for reading 'Moon Month', and making such an encouraging comment. The first motivation was, in fact, many months after the death of a very dear friend. But the idea gained much more richness as I gave the whole concept some really deep thought.
I don't consider myself bold at all, just trying for a little female honesty, never sure whether I'm an oddball, but relatively certain that I'm not.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thank you Steve. Can you say more about how the title doesn't serve the poem? I appreciate your input.
Comment is about Zen/Anger (blog)
Original item by Gina Mae Jarvi
Very similar to my Saturday afternoons as a child.
Another great poem
Comment is about Cake Mix (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 9th Jun 2015 09:54
multiply my comments as much as you like Jon,because this poem soooo deserves much more than one.
(no rhyme intended.) x
Comment is about Ocean Blue (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 9th Jun 2015 09:44
Welcome back D.D! Love this piece.Very airy! x
Comment is about MIST ON THE MENAI (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Very evocative, Daniel. I particularly like the circularity of it.
My own memories aren't quite as attractive. As a 12 year old my cousin and I had gone trainspotting to Holyhead. We got evicted from Llanfair Station by a surly station master where we'd stopped off on the way home cos I needed a poo.
I was desperate but when the train came that he pushed us on it had the old fashioned corridor-less carriages.
I had to do my poo in a plastic bag and chuck it out the window in the tunnel.
Happy days.
Comment is about MIST ON THE MENAI (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
thanks for commenting on 'dragon's nest' Cynthia - yes - the perceived 'threat' of windfarms appear to be that they're unsightly and noisy - a glance below the soil or at the clouds may show us what the dirty alternative is ;-) appreciate you being so supportive
Ian
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
You can find more of my poetry on line including some videos simply by searching on my name DAVID SUBACCHI.
Comment is about HEART OF WALES (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
I like the short lines - well suited and evocative, with a
rhythm that could be put to music.
Nice one.
Comment is about MIST ON THE MENAI (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Now that this campaign has closed upon reaching a very
substantial percentage of the total sought, further news
about the establishment of this intended London poetry outlet is looked forward to.
The aim is laudable and the possibilities appealing in their
variety.
Comment is about 'There's no reason why poetry should have such a small readership': Paul McMenemy on his plans for a poetry bookshop (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I remain unsure about the aim or the target in lines that
vary from the opening somewhat general tone to the more
specific relating to "one so young" who could be employed
by the Metropolitan Police (but in what capacity?).
It seems that someone somewhere has upset the writer
of this post!
Comment is about A POLICEMAN'S LOT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Preeti Sinha
Mon 8th Jun 2015 15:51
Loved it
Comment is about Judgements (blog)
Lynn Hamilton
Mon 8th Jun 2015 13:24
Lynn Hamilton
Mon 8th Jun 2015 13:22
Hi Andy. Thank you for your comments. Very much appreciated. x
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Lynn Hamilton
Mon 8th Jun 2015 13:17
Hi Tommy. Thanks for the consideration but it was absolutely not necessary. I appreciate all comments, regardless. I only need to look at myself another 999 times to reach 2000 eh! xx
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
yeah, i agree with Cynthia. this may work better as a series of poems but you have my respect for trying to do it as one poem and the ideas are certainly there..
Comment is about Concrete Eyes (blog)
the last stanza perhaps tells a bit for my liking, but it's needed i think here.
again some excellent images and ideas in this. keep it up
Comment is about BLAZER POCKET (blog)
nice use of language.
not sure if i would have used the last sometimes in the last stanza but the ideas behind this are spot on.
this needs to be performed.
Comment is about SOMETIMES (blog)
i like the shortness of this piece, lynn. suits you well. really enjoyed it x
Comment is about ;) (blog)
i like the shortness of this piece, lynn. suits you well. really enjoyed it x
Comment is about ;) (blog)
enjoyed this Lynn.. Nice use of sparse language in the stanzas.. good stuff. really enjoyed this.. x
Comment is about Colour Me In (blog)
yes ben would be shocked to taste them now were he to come back from australia
Comment is about birth of a nation (blog)
Original item by jeremy young
I don't know HOW I missed this except to say that I was quite depressed over xmas and maybe didn't want to communicate with anyone. That's how it gets you sometimes.
Anyway, this is an amazing poem Cynthia. I love how you're so unafraid to really get into the physicality of your subject. It's something women won't talk about much as well - especially the smell of the blood.
Some killer lines in here:
Every love act that was good
Is in the memory of my body.
Those who really knew me there
Are with me there.
Oh yes. It is so important and life-affirming, good sex. I was raped when in my teens, and didn't recover joy in sexuality until my late 30s and early 40s. I'm incredibly pissed off about that as it feels like it was stolen from me, but I'm VERY pleased that I do have it back finally. And making the most of it :)
The idea of a cunt writhing in the poignancy of its own life. Wow.
I may be completely wrong here, but towards the end of the poem, is that like as a woman ages, and sensation begins to lessen - tonight my body remembers and searches? If you know what I mean?
This is a fantastic poem. So glad I found it.
Comment is about Moon Month (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (9882)
Mon 8th Jun 2015 09:26
Thanks a tonne Lynn Hamilton for letting me know what my genre is called .. :)
Comment is about Fate’s handwriting (blog)
Original item by Juhi Gupte
@ Cynthia Buell Thomas :: Pls take this as my in-person Thanks for your inputs
I will surely practise :)
Comment is about Fate’s handwriting (blog)
Original item by Juhi Gupte
Lynn Hamilton
Sun 7th Jun 2015 22:52
Evening Tommy. Thank you for your comments on Colour Me In, which I just managed to read before the comment disappeared! Technology eh!
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Tommy Carroll
Wed 10th Jun 2015 12:44
Don't listen to your Aunty Cynthia Vanna, rejoice in human contact, let your heart sing! :)
Comment is about Happy Ending (blog)
Original item by Vanna