Thankyou, Greg, David and Stephen.
I set this scene in the Miners Welfare as a collier rants at my dad while we sit drinking after after my shiftus horribilis.
Seams really were so tight that men had to shovel coal onto a conveyor behind them by lying on their side. Before the National Day Wage Agreement men were paid for the tonnage of coal they shifted. So for a whole face team to have to crawl out to let some twat turn his shovel round cost them time and money.
The language would be authentic - there was no-one more helpful than miners for pointing out your shortcomings.
And thanks for the Like, Bethany.
Comment is about WRONG ROAD ROUN' (An Urban Villanelle) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
What a wonderful read, Ian. An inspirational piece of verse to be set to music. A jewel of a poem.
Comment is about Citizens (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Well done, John. Probably wouldn't make the Tatler, but none the worse for that.
Comment is about WRONG ROAD ROUN' (An Urban Villanelle) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you, David, for reminding us of the ongoing nature of such horror. Man's inhumanity of man, and especially to women and children.....
Thank you, Jennifer, for your support. Yes, the battle against evil may never be completely won, but it has to be fought.
One of the most horrible aspects of the Bucha massacre was the attempt to pass it off as a 'staged event'. See my poem from two years ago.
https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=121913
And thanks to Nigel, Steve, Hugh, Holden, Manish, Auracle, Hélène and Tim for liking this.
Comment is about Words from Bucha (April 2024) (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
What I particularly like about this John is its authenticity.
I like the tone of the reading, in tune with the disdain one might imagine seasoned colliers speaking to such an individual.
This kind of poetry is vital to communities in their remembrance of the labour that built them.
Such toil is remote from most work places today, some might not even believe such ardous endeavour ever existed.
I think this type of poetry, often brushed aside and dismissed is highly relevant to communities (those few that still exist)
Keeping it alive in words like this is a credit to you.
David
Comment is about WRONG ROAD ROUN' (An Urban Villanelle) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Worlds within worlds Robert,
All of them diminishing.
Lovely work, thoughtful poetry, refreshing.
David
Comment is about miniatures (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
Thank you for the generous comment Bethany, and to those who sent flowers.
Writers such as Tolkien, Lucas and Shakespeare borrowed heavily from biblical imagery and story...with only a limited number of stories available almost everything is dilution.
That said this is straight "Bible"
Poetic license; my reference to Jericho is of its biblical incarnation, it is no longer a ruin..although after Friday Prayers it often burns.
The river course is verdant all the way to Galilee in contrast to the surrounding Desert.
David
Comment is about Beyond the Valley (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Great stuff, JC. And dialect, too. Thanks for responding to the villanelle challenge!
Comment is about WRONG ROAD ROUN' (An Urban Villanelle) (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you so much, Tim, I'm so glad that you liked it. I've been wanting to write this from a long time, feels good to have finally completed and posted it here.😊
Comment is about January (blog)
Original item by Manish
Wed 3rd Apr 2024 03:42
Thank you, David, I appreciate the comment! 😎
Comment is about Mulberry. (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
I love poems about nature, it's such a treat to read, always puts a smile on my face and heart.
Another beautiful poem, Hélène!
Thank you.
Comment is about Walking (blog)
Original item by Hélène
A superb poem as always, Keith.
Thank you.
Comment is about Andalucia (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
The short ones are often hard to write aren't they? Haha.
Thanks a lot, Graham.
Comment is about A Cold Goodbye (blog)
Original item by Manish
I just subscribed to your Youtube Channel.
Should be good 😊
Comment is about New music work (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
The beauty of romance & relationships.
Who wouldn't want that?
I've enjoyed it. And still looking for more of it *sigh*
Comment is about miniatures (blog)
Original item by Robert C Gaulke
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Wed 3rd Apr 2024 01:17
First rate poem Keith, thank you.
Beth
Comment is about Andalucia (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
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Wed 3rd Apr 2024 01:15
' remember you, only as daylight '
just one brilliant line of so many.
Absolutely lovely poem Mike, thank you.
Beth
Comment is about Hury Patience! (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
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Wed 3rd Apr 2024 01:07
Wonderfully overwhelming poem John, thank you.
Beth
Comment is about Biba — 1967 (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Until that time we crave, and our cravings we turn into poems
Comment is about Andalucia (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thanks for the Likes, Holden, Stephen A, Tim and Stephen G.
Comment is about ALFIE THE PROPERTY MAGNATE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks. You too!
Enjoy your journeys on Write Out Loud 😃
Comment is about Life's spirals (blog)
Original item by Brooksy
And the bullfights. Do they still have them?
Comment is about Andalucia (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
A poem of charateristic individuality. I loved it.
Thank you,
Keith
Comment is about Razor Blades (blog)
Original item by New Shoes
Great imagery and interesting piece.
Thanks for the brain food.
Comment is about Razor Blades (blog)
Original item by New Shoes
Wow! Loved the last two lines. A summation that seems to reveal itself to so many.
Excellent Stephen
Comment is about Mind Garden (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
I hope you’ll see through rear-view
Of the only man still standing.
My efforts are hard to forget,
In hindsight, you’ll remember,
Perhaps out of guilt or great regret,
That genuineness laid purely in December.
Very powerful lines Manish. Realization and regret can be very haunting or very humbling.
Comment is about January (blog)
Original item by Manish
A tragic but familiar story. Your words convey the lonely sorrow of an unknown person who cannot share her unfortunate end.
It evokes strong feelings of sadness while expressing the best in humanity who wish to do right for her.
Thank you.
Comment is about Sonnet 1 - Chorlton Water Park (blog)
Original item by Andy N
I'm sorry on behalf of all the ignorant and mean people you have encounter in life. Trust me those kinds of people you do not need. I am stunned someone hasn't recognized your courage and perseverance. The poem speaks of a top-notch individual with much to give and teach others. Keep up the good fight and some- day everything will fall into place. Excellent poem, thank you for sharing.
Comment is about Rejection (blog)
Original item by Brooksy
Thank you all so much for your kindness made Me cry it did I really really appreciate it can't express how much ❤ wishing you all love peace and creativity
Comment is about Life's spirals (blog)
Original item by Brooksy
Refreshingly pleasing. She’s not a bad old stick really is she?
G
Comment is about Walking (blog)
Original item by Hélène
We all remember the first one Manish!
I like the short lines, as if you are having to think hard what to say!
G
Comment is about A Cold Goodbye (blog)
Original item by Manish
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Tue 2nd Apr 2024 17:42
Teensy hints of Tolkiens ' rings ' David 👍, ( imho ) and this appraisal, has nothing to with with the fact that my name is mentioned, but has everything to do with the enjoyments of breathing in, pure poetic air, emanating from every line, bigtime!
Beth
p.s. did I also mention humungously inspiring?
Comment is about Beyond the Valley (blog)
Original item by David RL Moore
Hi, John!
It looks as if you are the only person on this site I can connect with. Some men tried to help me but they could do nothing. I enjoyed listening to your audio. Thank you so much.
Regards, Larisa
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you, my friend. I'm so grateful for your constant support and appreciation. It means a lot to me.
I'm glad but also not glad about you agreeing with it, haha! Take care my friend.
Comment is about A Cold Goodbye (blog)
Original item by Manish
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Tue 2nd Apr 2024 15:13
Long time, no Whiteley! looks very much like you may be on Glasto very soon Ian.
Somewhat of a cross between ' Under Milkwood ' and Houghton Weaver-ish ' lines/lyrics methinks, and why didn't you give us an audio sample one would like to know? Do remember us when you hit the bigtime of course, Ian 😁
Beth
Comment is about Citizens (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
The sunshine in Isabella's heart
proves simple acts of everyday life
brought on by strong family ties - - -
a more than a close warm friendship
that seems to be shining more and more
could Daniel be the one - - -😎
Comment is about Simple joys of life (blog)
Original item by Sunshine
Life could be like this.
You are a lucky person, Stephen Atkinson.
Wishing you the good in life.
Comment is about Her Last Dance (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
Really well thought out comment on the daily horrors we read about or see on the screen daily. Truth must survive, even if only whispered, but doesn't seem to be a strong enough sleeping draught to stop evil from always being wide awake, and ready to perform its horrors.
Comment is about Words from Bucha (April 2024) (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Thank Stephen for the kind comment, and for saying it brightend your Easter! Also thanks to Hugh and Hélène fpr the likes.
Comment is about A Family Easter (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Could even be a "trifle" I suppose, with a little added sponge.
A great story, so engaging in metaphor that even Shakespeare stole it.
An interesting idea Holden.
David
Comment is about Mulberry. (blog)
Original item by Holden Moncrieff
This is the first of a new selection of song lyrics I'm writing - which will be recorded as a folk album in June. They will all be based around the people, places, myths and legends of my city of birth - Wakefield in West Yorkshire
Comment is about Citizens (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Srebrenica, Račak, Sabra Shatila, Jallianwala Bagh massacre, Tiananmen Square, Rwandan Genocide, Katyn, Parwan, Shelling Hill Beach...the list is endless with plenty more room on the tombstone yet.
David
Comment is about Words from Bucha (April 2024) (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
It's interesting to me how pagan traditions transitioned into Christian ideas, not surprising or unusual but interesting.
Rebirth, resurrection, maybe the fool is making a more subtle point?
Who is the fool and who the fooled, who has the ear of The King?
A relevant question in today's world of alternate truths...and one often addressed on this site in recent times.
David
Comment is about ON APRIL FOOL'S DAY (blog)
Original item by ray pool
A very fine poem, Tim. Multi-layered yet clear and straightforward to read. Well done for this.
Comment is about World View (blog)
Original item by Tim Higbee
I'm grateful for this poem in ways that I can't describe. You've just helped me make a decision and I'm so thankful for that. The lines -
"I do a good job of hiding my sadness from mum and dad,
It can switch anytime,trouble free one can still get sad."
Speaks so much about myself and my mentality. We need to know that our parents have always got our back and we can always confide in them.
Thank you so much,
Manish.
Comment is about Teenage sadness needs parental aid (blog)
Original item by hugh
This poem is brilliant in many ways. Every line is so intelligently penned down. "Even the very substance of life is ours only by loan", speaks to me of the time borrowed, to be grateful of it, and to be returned with interest when the period ends.
"Twisted angles of truth are now within sight
I see it all clearly, yet so hard to define."
Sometimes hard to believe and sometimes hard to define. This is one of my favourite poems of yours, Tim!
Thank you.
Comment is about World View (blog)
Original item by Tim Higbee
Stephen Gospage
Wed 3rd Apr 2024 08:53
I tend to redraft poems quite a lot and will often agonise over a choice of one particular word (I suspect I'm not alone here).
Inspiration (or what passes for it in my case) can happen at night, in the early hours. Walking the dog is another occasion for ideas to come, although remembering them until we get back can be a struggle!
Comment is about Writing poetry is easy! But how do we know if it's any good? (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman