think back/pink black

i am idiot young and 

in the back of the car 

i close my eyes just so 

the light of the sun 

between the trees beats a tattoo 

behind my lids and lenses 

and that is all I want to be 

just then - isolation 

pink black pink black pink black 

a heartbeat from 8 minutes before 

◄ providence

click/clack ►

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Stu Buck

Tue 30th Apr 2019 12:52

i did that too! glad you liked the poem mate been reading your daily contributions with great gusto.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 30th Apr 2019 10:15

Only just seen this. Idiot young is a great expression. And I've done this kind of thing so many times. Closing each eye in turn to flip-flop perspective was a favourite of mine.

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Stu Buck

Mon 29th Apr 2019 23:03

cheers ray! hope you are well mate

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raypool

Mon 29th Apr 2019 22:29

wonderful concise writing the sense of movement of being in your head is exquisite Stu. A design classic of a poem.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Mon 29th Apr 2019 20:59

thanks trevor thats lovely of you to say!

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trevor homer

Mon 29th Apr 2019 20:24

The economy of words is impressive. The impact exceptional.

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Martin Elder

Wed 24th Apr 2019 22:28

Yep I am planning to be there in June. see you soon

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Stu Buck

Wed 24th Apr 2019 12:08

thanks martin. will i see you at Sale in June (might be there next month as well as i know the people guesting)

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Martin Elder

Mon 22nd Apr 2019 22:25

such fond memories so well summed up here Stu. I can remember doing such a thing myself at a certain idiot young age.


Nice one

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Stu Buck

Mon 22nd Apr 2019 18:09

thanks for all your kind words

i'm glad this resonated with you

its all i could ever ask!

(thats what i drink brian and i assumed i was the only one!)

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Brian Maryon

Mon 22nd Apr 2019 17:02

Just had this experience... though mine involved three pints of Bathams on an empty stomach. Enjoyed your piece Stu.

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keith jeffries

Mon 22nd Apr 2019 14:18

Stu,

This captures an inconsequential moment of time with the precision of a surgeon with a scalpel. I am entranced by its brevity and intensity.

Thank you
Keith

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john short

Mon 22nd Apr 2019 13:28

Hi Stu, it captures a moment intensely we're right there experiencing the moment but then there is the enigma of what's coming next.

John S

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 22nd Apr 2019 13:28

Once in a while someone defines a perfect moment with clinical brevity and the outcome should be framed and hung on a wall. Brilliant Stu.

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