Yes indeed I agree with Michael, I felt the poem most keenly especially the 'pull and push' of past verses future, the urge to keep holding on to what has been but knowing that if you do there will be ...as you say "no room to grow".
Love the style of this one, personally I don't think it matters whether you keep to a particular way of writing ....you're good anyway and that shines through.
thanks for your comments re my piece, this was actually inspired by my daughter so it was interesting to read your interpretation.
Sian
Sian X

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Hi loved your "Perfect Place".....perfect in its combination of senstivity, intuitive warmth and intelligence. thanks for your comments on "Questions for the Barrister" the real subject was known as 'the rottweiler on speed' he was an absolute nightmare of a character with no conscience. Met him ....horrid man!
Sian X

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Very good - and good to hear them voiced too. I would like a quick word with you about your voice sometime - if that's all right with you - perhaps you could catch me online sometime & we could 'chat'?- either here or on facebook. But again, very well observed, good work.
Cx

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Original item by Malpoet

Thanks for your recent comments.
You're not so bad ya' self !

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I've done jury service before, so can remember this experience alright! In relation to the poem I thought it was a thoughtful and well judged poem! Well Done!

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I thought too it was a little bit different to some of the stuff I have heard you deliver before, but I like it.. I like particular the reference to Peter Pan in it and I think you have a particularly strong ending in it too!

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Dear Sian,

Thank you ever so much for your comments on 'Howling Hollow'

I have just read your poem 'one step behind' and Iike the way it deals with change, i like the arrangement and I like the way you put 'the gaining...the poise'

one step behind someone, as you say a shadow. The submissive quality leaves you wanted to get level, someone you admire(d) is ahead, as though they are superior

I like this whole concept

Peter.

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tis beautiful peter

Comment is about Concorde over St Catherine s Dock 1981 (blog)

Hi Mike, i can do quiet, if you browse around i have plenty of quiter poems recorded and posted on here.

I'm really happy you like this, I've read your poems and they are extremely intense and powerful, it is clear from your writing that you have a direct and vivid connection with your life changing experiences of the past. Haunting and poetic.

thank you for your comments on this poem, which I very cautiously posted as its a little off track for me.

Comment is about Concorde over St Catherine s Dock 1981 (blog)

Fantastic. The city a bit rough these days. Those that dwell within more than often is not long for the hints of better places. This one genius.
Mike

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Hello Peter, I am wondering how you would deliver this poem in a reading. I know your style of delivery, and I'm trying to imagine you reciting this one in more muted tones than you normally do. It works. I like it, even felt a personal message there about letting go of the past to let in the new. Hard to do when the past makes you what you are. This poem touched me, gave me moments in quiet reflection. Nice one.
Mike

Comment is about Concorde over St Catherine s Dock 1981 (blog)

Hi Deborah,
there's always so much depth in your words.
This is no exception. Very good.
Janet.x

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Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

Nice and concise poem.
I suppose they would say they are just doing their job. Once home, they can leave it behind.
Pity more of us can't do the same really as long as we can say in all honesty we did our best we should all be able to sleep at night.

Janet.x

Comment is about Appeal to the 'Bar' (blog)

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Nice one Sian. I hope your not leaving the site. There seems to be some angst in life atm. I think it is sometimes reflected in here too. I wish I could sleep too. Mike
x

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Hi Sian
For those who have been to this dreadful place your words will hit hard. Powerful poem.
Winston

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Well observed,
Cx

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Thank you both. When I read this at a recent Write Out Loud gig I introduced it as a poem for children because of the simplicity of the language. I had in mind the work of Hillaire Belloc or Spike Milligan.

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Sharp poem about commercialism!

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Thank You Sian ... You aren't just a pretty face.....if yiou thought my Haiku was brilliant ...you're a very naughty lady.
Love ya to bits
Gus x

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Thanks for the comment!

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thanks Gus, I posted 2 comments to myself last night instead of you, a wee bit tipsy hic again!

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thankyou for you comment on my poem 'broken'

i was thinking of changing it , but i am not good at that . will have to wait for another to come along i think

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Dear Simon,

I liked this poem, mostly because it reaches a wide audience, and as a writers' we can empathise with your plight. I ;live in Japan at the moment, and I see things that take me by surprise alot of the time, and I think, dam you woman where is your bloody pen when you need it!! But now I always take a pen and pad out with me, it more often than not, when a feeling arises or I see something, it's when I forgot :)

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funnily enough I was in Tescos earlier partaking of this very activity and feeling very 'drawn in' to the whole commercial idea to buy a card to say "I love you" concept. It's subtle blackmail really isn't it.
Loved your poem.
Sian

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Thanks for your comments Mia, would love to see you perform . I live in Somerset (where cider comes from ! ) Who knows, if it's not too far and baby sitting allows...I note you haven't posted recently, do you have any new stuff. Sian X

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you're right- aisle after aisle. they may be taking over the world but they'll never take my soul! although i have settled for their 'value' brand of love a couple of times.

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Thank you! II have been very lucky with the cast. It's back on again on 19th March at the Deaf Institute if you want to come and feel uncomfortable?!
Hot Chocolate is great by the way.

Mia

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You are right Deborah, love is madness; but what can you buy in Tesco -can you buy love ?Some people think you can, and look where that's got us -the worst depression in a hundred years- or so a (Labour) government spokesman tells us.

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Hi Pete

42 cathode ray tube televisions
all tuned to the same channel

excellent were the other tv's turned off ? Ha

Hope you can make that gig, let me know mate, cheers Jeff

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Myspace is simply beautiful, Anthony. we sleep through so much even while awake. you described the uglier aspects in our lives so well yet i felt protected as i was in the room where none of that mattered.
thank you for your comments, i have alot to learn about structure and rhythm yet.

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Hey mate,
thanks for your recent comments. It took me ages finding out which ones you'd posted a comment though.
Trust you're ok and hope to see you soon but no promises.
Love Janet.x

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Those little bursts of inspiration can come at the most awkward of times can't they?
I quite like the simplicity of this Simon.
Please forgive when i say it could speak volumes.

Love Janet.x

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Original item by Simon Rennie

That last stanza says it all.
Love Janet.x

Comment is about Hot Chocolate (blog)

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Hi Sian,
there's a lot of inner strength showing through in this poem. It strikes a nerve within me too.

Love Janet.x

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Hi Sian,
thanks for your comment on my profile page.
Welcome to wol and hope you enjoy it here.
I'll check out your poetry and you can be sure i'll comment.
I think all poets and writers include some of their own experiences into their work. It might not be intentional but it's always there. It's part of life.

Love Janet.x

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very good Mike...Stranger...was gripped by the first couple of lines..."head dipped in sorrow" , fantastic image I must say. Thanks for your comments by the way. Yes my work..if i can call it that, is sometimes mundane sometimes dark and I never seem to know what's coming next. To be honest I have no idea what style I have but I do know what I like to read and "Stranger" was particularly striking
Sian

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Original item by Noetic-fret!

Hi Sian, This poem really struck me. I feel it is a lot more in touch with your true feelings than perhaps Hot Chocolate. I really like it, and I know one or two people that this poem would strike a nerve with. Strike a nerve, there's a thought, always remember, YOU, are in control. But I really wonder, what would happen if you really did lose control. hmmmm! Nice one.

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Ha, nice one Jeff, reminds me of a time I was at the dentist, he numbed me up and I lost my bottle and ran off down the road, spittle flying everywhere in my wake. xx

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Original item by Jeffarama!

Hi Anthony Thanks for that ...bit partial to red heads myself!

Thanks again
gus

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what a clever and wonderful way with words you have ...the audio sample was simply brilliant and performed with such confidence and wit. I laughed so much. Sian

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The title is perfect for the poem and you have a way of putting across a tragic and poignant image all at once...thought it was very moving
Sian

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Original item by Steve O'Connor

Thanks for thecomments re 3 Stones and Jack and Jill... got to start taking more water with it... See you soon!
Once again many thanks.
Gus

Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)

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great poem Simon, and very clever...this made me smile in a semi-colon closed bracket kind of way. it's on a par with lol and other horrors (that i use too)

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Hey Jeff, thank you for your comments on 'words'. I really appreciate it of course! I just read and laughed at 'Appointment with Fear'. Especially at the end when it was apparent all the torment and fear was only the check-up. Like the picture too. Ally :o)

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Hi Win,
Thanks for your comments on 8 a.m.
How are you doing?
Cx

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Hi Jeff, thank you for your kind comments on my poems.It does sometimes feel like my wee worlds will come crashing down but they're tougher than I think..ice and glass.
Sorry to have missed the last WOL cos was snowed up int' Dales,did you get? Deb

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Hi Dan, hope you're well.

I enjoyed this, but if I might say, I thought it would have ended better with a question, 'Is that the only thing you really do well?'

Just a thought, cheers Jeff

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Brilliant mate, one of your best! cheers Jeff

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