This one is perceptive... could you explain though these last few lines as I am having trouble with them... maybe too it's cause I am so sleep deprived that I can't think anymore...

'In death a man said escape
In death a woman said release
And I wondered what they meant
Until the day arrived at my door
Cloaked in a black shawl.'

merci... bonne nuit... je ne peux plus lire ce soir...

Comment is about not 100% happy (blog)

Do not look forward to going back DG...
You must look to the future...
and you must listen to reason...
your female readers know... and we like this style : )

Comment is about Hopefully, this is Terminal (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Yes - I like this one too. Not as obvious as I first thought. Is this someone who has already passed through that you would like to welcome back or is it someone new? If the latter, you just need to grab her bags and weigh them in Dermot - faint heart never won fair lady! So good to see a man in touch with his emotions. Don't be in too much of a hurry to return to your darker ones. Enjoyed your compering at the Tudor - such a gift - I could never do that.
Isobel x

Comment is about Hopefully, this is Terminal (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Merci Francine, tu es trop gentil.

Er, yeah... seriously looking forward to the end of this bout of messed-up love poems and to getting back into writing dark sociopathic narcissistic disordered poems, but these things take time.

Comment is about Hopefully, this is Terminal (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

J'aime beaucoup ce poème DG...
To me it speaks of torment yet yearning for the love of a special someone...

Love the analogies used... very creative... magnifique!

Comment is about Hopefully, this is Terminal (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Great, I love these poems!

Comment is about Mandy Coe (poet profile)

Original item by Mandy Coe

I'm not sure that "strength" is the right word, as strength is something that can hold a peace in place. Like a strong descision or will against oppression. I'm just not sure it conveys the sentiment that you wish it to, though I like the idea.

Maybe "force" is more accurate, though it may not fit your poem. Anyway, I'll leave you alone now.

Comment is about Strength and Peace (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Thank You so much for your praise and comment..
You are very kind
Gus x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Joshua,

thanks for taking the time to read and make and make comment on 'where rivers flow'

steve

Comment is about Joshua Van-Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Nice poem mate i really enjoyed reading this....its got something......

Comment is about beyond human (ascension) (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Well, that was interesting. I could see an alternative ridiculous lending where the game is reduced to only a hanful of cards. Win

Comment is about Card Playing, outside in Manchester (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

I know exacly what you mean, while some things in the Bible are relevant to living a good life, they do coincide with common sense a little too much to be borne of vast wisdom and other things I find are completely irrelevant to today. Not to mention, I'm a little skeptical, in general, of books that have gone through many different translations since their ancient origin. I don't have a problem with people who practice their religion in a way that doesn't harm anyone, directly or indirectly.

Comment is about Religious War (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Thanks, I intended this as a kind of satirical/ comedic fable. I did indeed give it a go, and that is what sired this poem.

Comment is about Card Playing, outside in Manchester (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Thanks, it was actually suposed to be set in the 18th century so you weren't that far off. I'm glad you enjoyed it nonetheless.

Comment is about The Bandits (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Hi Winston,


thanks for taking the time to read and make comment on where rivers flow

steve

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hey I had to log in and make comment as this really caught my eye. Very well constructed and thoughtful


love 'lemon custard frisbee ' and tissuepaper landscape. Nice links

did you mean 'water muscle's shake'

and

'Bluebells' stomach ache'?


Thanks for sharing - delightful poem

Comment is about Melting Ice-Cream (blog)

Original item by George Stanworth

Thanks for commenting Graham - I am glad for people to get whatever they can from my work and this was meant to work on different levels. Without the emotional content this would have been a bit 'dry bones' for me, which is possibly why it hasn't attracted a lot of comment. The title and the body of the poem don't really give too much away. I did think very hard about every choice of word though. The Japanese tourists look at the bridge and talk about tomorrow. In life we all do that - ignoring what we have just under our nose - today. Wouldn't want to rubbish Australia too much - if you can find a true Ozzie amongst the cultural melting pot - they are diamonds. It is also a wonderful lifestyle - had I gone there younger and in different circumstances maybe it would have worked.

Comment is about Sydney Opera House (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Yes, very good poem and questions. I wonder aswell.

Comment is about public awareness/ ignorance (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Ah Yosh!! Very good poem

Comment is about RAISE THE VIBRATION... (blog)

Very interesting poem, I had no idea men were so fasinated by our underware. Id say the poor girl in the pic looks like shes been locked up tight. But that could be the fasination of it all. I never gave much thought to one hand or two.Cant imagine being hard on a guy over that kinda thing.Interesting poem.

Comment is about unfastening a bra strap and other strange clips and devices (blog)

wonderful poem!

Comment is about You're Well Nice. (blog)

Wonderful!

Comment is about It's just so frustrating. (blog)

HI Mike. There is nothing, I guess that anyone could say, to change, what you went through.I did however enjoy reading your poem, a little bit of life as you lived it.NIce poem! The way you write this one, I could see it all.

Comment is about Banff Grove (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

NIce poem. Are you talking about the 17th century? I can guess a few things, but would just rather be told. Still however, I must say I enjoyed the little poem.

Comment is about The Bandits (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

HI Daniel, very nice poem, I like the content, its all very real, and all negatives can be looked at as positives, if we try.We all have the ability to be more like God, then we think.To rise above all that brings us down. good poem!

Comment is about beyond human (ascension) (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

LOL, well you gave it a try! nice poem!

Comment is about Card Playing, outside in Manchester (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

This is nice. To quote the bible "all fall short of the glory of God". Made in the image, but have much to over come For many years I blamed God for everything.But then I had not much knowledge of God at that time.Must remember many fail to understand that freedom from the world, is what we must try and have. There are those taught to kill in their Gods name, but it is only that they lack wisdom, and understanding, of the purpose of their own lives.I can find the dogma of religions, very offencive.I guess thats why I belong to no church. I enjoyed your poem.

Comment is about Religious War (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Thi is very nice.

Comment is about 'Matrix' (blog)

very nice poem!

Comment is about Hope Does Pay Eternally (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

very nice!

Comment is about Forgotten Hero (blog)

Original item by Andy N

this is very nice

Comment is about 'Sunday On My Mind' (blog)

Je crois que la chanson était 'Running up that hill' : )

Comment is about wow (blog)

Hi Pete

Not going to comment on content but on structure for a change. Started out like a Cayn White poem! And then after the word "clout" it changed to your usual rhyme half way through the next line mode. Liked the change in gear. Win x

Comment is about clouds of happiness (blog)

There is one Kate Bush song that I absolutely love...
memories of Paris... but cannot remember the title...
Now I shall have to go figure it out, otherwise it will make me crazy...

Comment is about wow (blog)

I love the idea of 'clouds of happiness'...
Do it within reason... one must indulge occasionally though ; )

Comment is about clouds of happiness (blog)

This last part is so poignant because sometimes people get to a point where they look back on their life or circumstance, and sadly feel this way...

'this: this is all he will ever be
this: it is all he is ; all he ever will be
unless he wakes up
from what is slowly becoming
a disaster.'

Comment is about slowly becoming a disaster (blog)

It's because I get impatient...
and don't like waiting around for answers ; )

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Ah ha... found it on your blog...
See... I can be resourceful when need be ; )

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Isobel, I read it in a very different way.I was there in Sydney for two months during December and January and have very different opinions as my son lives there. What is quite correct about your piece is that this iconic structure, immediately identifiable the world over is really just a clever shell with very little inside it. I read it as an Australian stereotype "all up front with little to back up when the surface is scratched" Another thing I felt about your piece was the feeling of being so far away from home when down under. It is a bloody long way away.

Comment is about Sydney Opera House (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Andy... Brilliant. I think this is one of the best I have heard of yours. Can picture (Hear) you saying the lines and would like a voice recording on here. It seems like one of those poems that just came out straight onto the page, is that true? There are many bits I love bit the end left me hanging... great. Win .

most of my recent poems have been comforting or comedic butas you may know I prefer the dark side. see you soon

Comment is about Forgotten Hero (blog)

Original item by Andy N

I really like this Andy... so many powerful, creatively written lines...
However, you need to be careful with typos and misspellings ; )

Comment is about Forgotten Hero (blog)

Original item by Andy N

This is just so... well... nice : )

Comment is about You're Well Nice. (blog)

Some days, i dont have the strength to make comments to all the poetry i read in here. some days i am just so mentally knackered with fatigue of mental stress because of my condition, and i know on days like this editing my own poetry into something spectacular is just too tiring. So i sit back in lerk mode and let the day expand. Today was one of those days where i thought, goddammit, im tired again. Then i read your poem, and as knackered as i am, it invoked in me a need to log on and tell you, its a fantastic poem. I can really empathise with all thats said in the verse. Fantastic, its neither pretentious or indeed tries too hard, its just there with all its blatant, honest, truth. Nice one man, really touched me.
Mike

Comment is about Forgotten Hero (blog)

Original item by Andy N

thanks for your comment Joshua spelling and grammar are not my strong point!

Comment is about Joshua Van-Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Hiya ! how's it going? ...sadly I have blogged everything new and the muse has gone on holiday : ) Had a lot of stuff on here but I tend to remove after week or so.

Busy writing up MA project which has been neglected a lot.


Do you go to identity at Commonword - I love it there (it's my extended family!) Might see ya there sometime

Comment is about Chris Jam (poet profile)

Original item by Chris Jam

J'aime votre poème 'UN-CHIC IN PARIS'...
c'est ce qu'on fait parfois à Paris... : )

Comment is about Danni Antagonist (poet profile)

Original item by Danni Antagonist

Hello George,
I've just been reading through your poetry and love your writing style. It is a little surreal at times but that is what makes it so appealing. I particularly like Frank, stop it. How did you come up with that title?!
Carrie

Comment is about George Stanworth (poet profile)

Original item by George Stanworth

Hi Danni
thanks for the invite.
I have a gig Sat night so will prob be too hungover for Sunday, would love to do it though!!!!!!!!!!!! anything else going? can you recommend an open mic near you?

ps I have no contact details for you

Comment is about Danni Antagonist (poet profile)

Original item by Danni Antagonist

Nice work, Daniel, but you may wish to check your spelling and grammar.

"It will be you ascension" that's the most obvious typo. However I like both the content and the form very much. :)

Comment is about beyond human (ascension) (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Well Peter? They told me...Go and look at Peter Crompton's new photo him and his pussy they said,... well I was never ready for this... don't ya look pretty.

Great poem U knew I'd love this one!!

Gus

Comment is about unfastening a bra strap and other strange clips and devices (blog)