Love every other poem you wrote but would half agree with Pete on this one. Think you need to explore different ways of saying the same thing.

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hey yosh man, you aint lost, your poetry is finding its speed pitch rythm volume and, its readers. Your words speak volumes here and your prose is getting better. Be well blue.
Mike

Comment is about The astral hitchiker...(short poem) (blog)

oh leave the lad alone i think he is a sweetie !

Comment is about Fat Bird, Small Tits. (blog)

good one!

Comment is about Flirting (blog)

Seb
freedom of speech is important but sensitivity should override our private thoughts. The impetus of the poem could be better harnessed and addressed in a more subtle way. Its pointless alienating readers . The poem would work on a comedy night, frog and bucket style. I have heard worse from Bernard Manning and Chubby Brown, both sucessfull comedians in thier field. The poem does succeed in this genre but I reckon that its more important to be aware of its impact on sites such as WOL. Again its contradictory of me as I enjoy poetry especially in the raw performance style, but etiquette Seb, its needed in order to integrate. Waves are easy enough to make as it is. Harness the skill and energy you have and choose what not to say let the reder fill in the rude gaps, dance on the edge but dont tip over it. These are thoughts. Debate within the poem, offer a way out, or illustrate a reason for the outrage, mitigate yourself, leave the raw for the alcohol hours and the working mens club. Discuss? (not criticising , trying to guide) Pete.

Comment is about Fat Bird, Small Tits. (blog)

Such a contrast to your last poem. It seems inconceivable that the same poet could have penned the two. I like this one.

Comment is about Flirting (blog)

I'm not going to explain myself, I am just going to re-state that Chris was wrong in her assumptions.

Think for yourself, just don't be so lazy about it.

Comment is about Fat Bird, Small Tits. (blog)

Rare stuff!

Comment is about WHEN IM DOWN....I LISTEN TO MOTOWN... (blog)

Thanks Alain.

Comment is about Thames Variety Branch Meeting 20/05/2009 (blog)

Original item by Alain English

Indeed. What's the point?

Comment is about Fat Bird, Small Tits. (blog)

Well this is simple and to the point...
Lovely...

Comment is about You (blog)

C'est magnifique DG...
Felt as though I could almost hear it ; )

Comment is about Symphonetic (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

I like the emotions to evoke in this little ditty. Makes me think.

It has an energy and power which is good.
Well done.

Comment is about I Wish I Was Gay (blog)

Original item by Isobel

What do they taste like; rabbit, chicken?

Comment is about Cats (In the style of Karl Pilkington) (blog)

Thanks DG, they're in denial, they've got it coming to them.

Comment is about Dermot Glennon (poet profile)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

On my way out the door, but had to comment on this one...
Love it Sebastian... especially the first verse : )

Comment is about Flirting (blog)

Your output is as rich and glorious as ever, Mr Crompton.

For some reason, it makes me think of waiting outside the S&G for The Smiths/Morrissey DIsco to start... people getting the fags down them before going in. SIlly thought, really.

You are so very good at what you do, Peter. Keep it up and see you soon, BRRRUUVVVAA!

Comment is about stubbing out a cigarette (blog)

Hi Melissa, welcome back and thanx for your comment, its nice to know I've been a small part of your comeback!! X

I really like this, good work, and like you I lst a good mate recently. He passed away at 46, makes you grateful for what you have really.

Life will continue on,

but love will always stay

by my side.

Ho true, lovely, keep in touch, Jeff X

Comment is about Concrete (blog)

This is very spiritual and profound...
I am in constant awe of your ability to express such emotion, sensitivity, and imagery...

Je commence à voir de plus en plus...
et ça me plais énormément...

Comment is about upon the missing (blog)

J'adore ce poème... ça me fais fondre le coeur...


Il faut toujours espérer... : )

'then the Karmic prize
without asking, arrives'

Comment is about love after lost love (blog)

Awww... I never liked it either... always got someone else to do most of the work...

Fascinated by behaviour and emotions...

Comment is about Mr Salters Chemistry set (blog)

Thanks all you lot!

I dont smoke. Except if very drunk and at a social event, even then its not me, i spit for hours after.

but I do hang around smokers and watch what they do. maybe thats why i have the odd toke, dunno, its a social drunk thing.

never out of social circle
still i reckon i'm qualified to quit

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Hello yosh man, i been reading you for some time now, and i really think the poems are getting better. It seems as though the less you shout in your prose, the more you seem to say, the more it touches people, at least thats how i feel. Keep them coming blue.

Mike

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aye, i know all about the game of giving up the ciggie. Nice one pete, put a lot of sentiments into this that most can identify with. what pisses me off though, is that they were keen to take your tax on these ciggies, but, will penalize you for ailments contracted because of the addiction they allowed you to get into when you were young. Anyways, i do go on a bit. Great Poem pete.
Mike

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Great poem Peter
So much so I have written a reply in respect, knowing you to be a smoker and sadlyI have joined the ranks of Capt Sensible,s Army. The Post is Called Killer Queen and It's dedicated to you.

Gus

Comment is about stubbing out a cigarette (blog)

Hi there. Love the vitriol.

My favourite of many cunning wordplays is:

'If it does 0 to 60 in the blink of an eye
You’re an MD, an MP, a P that’s VI'

but then that's probably just my subliminal male car envy working in reverse :)

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Original item by Isobel

Brilliant rant. Laughed til I stopped

Baz

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Original item by Isobel

As ever, a very clever poem. As a non smoker I have to say that I do prefer you to be outsiders - otherwise you'd be inside, leading me astray...

Comment is about stubbing out a cigarette (blog)

Chris, I'm afraid that you suspect wrongly.

Comment is about Fat Bird, Small Tits. (blog)

Hi Mia
Sorry I didn't know about you're ocd...

I was writing a book about my formative years and the experienes associated with ocd... back in the days when it was regarded as pure nutter behaviour... must discuss sometime.. as far as beastiality is concerned we can discuss that ...right now...!!!!!
GusXXX

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Original item by Mia Darlone

You are such a charmer Gus - you can call me Mademoiselle any day.

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Original item by Gus Jonsson

Smoking inside bars used to be great, and it's an f***** outrage that the Liberal Fascist authorities have banned it ... on health grounds?!
It's not a health issue. It's a freedom issue!!
But as Pete indicates here, smoking outside, in each bar's smoke hole or even on the pavement, has its own culture too...

Above all, we should carry on smoking ... because it IS COOL, IT IS GLAMOROUS, and in some cases it is healthy (those who smoke are unlikely to binge on crips, nuts, cakes and other killers, for instasnce, and smoking is a great releiver of stress).

Also, when smoking was allowed in pubs, older people came to bars in considerable numbers. Now they don't cos they don't want to get wet or cold while smoking.
So they are forced into social isolation instead. How bloody healthy is that for 'em?! Oh, sorry Pete, didn't mean to use this space for a rant. Enjoyed the poem, natch.

Frankly, I would make The Benefits of Smoking a compulsory subject in schools.

Comment is about stubbing out a cigarette (blog)

nice poem.

Comment is about stubbing out a cigarette (blog)

I suspect the point of this is to get a rise out of the comments from outraged women - I did consider writing a riposte - Small man, no brain - but what's the point?
Chris

Comment is about Fat Bird, Small Tits. (blog)

Oh my gauloises - still miss you!
Cx

Comment is about stubbing out a cigarette (blog)

I love how you describe things to such depth...
Always full of energy and emotion : )

Not sure what you meant by these lines though...
'contorting the consulate'
'finding common ground in embassy, capstan'

Comment is about stubbing out a cigarette (blog)

this has made me laugh a few times now ,,

specially the 'end cat' :)

Comment is about CAT PROGRAMME (blog)

I know someone who could give this a good orchestral backing.
I'll message you the details on FB.

Comment is about Symphonetic (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Orchestra would be nice, but I'm a girl of simple pleasures - I'll settle for a quartet - as long as they're versatile. Otherwise - you'll do.
Cx

Comment is about Symphonetic (blog)

Original item by Dermot Glennon

Nicely re-written...
Short and sweet, yet conveys a longing for the past...

Comment is about Sitting On Me Dad's Shoulders (Re-write with Winston Plowes) (blog)

Beautiful and sensitive expressions that capture a different side of you...


So many wonderful lines in this that can allude to other things...

'She asked me never to grow up
For then she must face decline
So tightly held the palms of infants
But could not stop the clock this time
And that sun clock shadow hand
seemed stationary for a while
But like a creeping tide, cruel, stands
Gently passing,
sweeps even the most moistured brow
And through these magical things
I remember you.'

Comment is about mistress of the flowers (blog)

Hello againMaichelle. Good to chat briefly in the Moose! Winston

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Original item by michelle wright

This is really nice and says in a few short lines what many must feel about the reality of change and growing up.

Comment is about Sitting On Me Dad's Shoulders (Re-write with Winston Plowes) (blog)

So true... amazing...

Comment is about your ten minutes is up (blog)

Que tu sais raconter des histoires marrantes : )

Comment is about Confessions from a bad hotel (blog)

Tu sais t'exprimer si bien : )

Comment is about poem for the depraved (blog)

Ok, sorted :-)

Comment is about Sitting On Me Dad's Shoulders (Re-write with Winston Plowes) (blog)

You take me on a journey... the thoughts...
the emotions... the vivid descriptions...

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Hi sebastian. I am glad you thought my little suggestions helped the poem. I thought it was good and that's why I took time to comment via email not because it was poor and thankyou for realising that. The font thing is a pain isnt it. Winston

Comment is about Sitting On Me Dad's Shoulders (Re-write with Winston Plowes) (blog)

I've no idea why the font changed happened there, I just cust and pasted this from Microsoft Word.

Don't read anything into it, apart from my inability to use a laptop.

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