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Sitting On Me Dad's Shoulders (Re-write with Winston Plowes)

I remember sittin' on me dad's shoulders at the match.
Four years old

and seeing a sea of heads.


The roar of thousands.
The crash of feet on stands.


Just sitting on me dad's shoulders
chompin' on a meat pie

and slurpin' on a Bovril.


Shouting and learning the tribal roar
in me Red & White’s.
I learnt a lot, just sitting

on me dad's shoulders.

Twenty-three years later

and I’ve been a few times since,

but it’s not the same

sitting in plastic seats.

 

 

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Isobel

Thu 21st May 2009 23:43

Poignant - I thought so the first time I read it but couldn't be bothered to post a comment then! LOL Wish I could have a similar memory of my father but I just can't.

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Francine

Tue 19th May 2009 23:52

Nicely re-written...
Short and sweet, yet conveys a longing for the past...

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carol falaki

Tue 19th May 2009 23:06

This is really nice and says in a few short lines what many must feel about the reality of change and growing up.

<Deleted User> (6230)

Tue 19th May 2009 22:31

Ok, sorted :-)

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winston plowes

Tue 19th May 2009 22:21

Hi sebastian. I am glad you thought my little suggestions helped the poem. I thought it was good and that's why I took time to comment via email not because it was poor and thankyou for realising that. The font thing is a pain isnt it. Winston

<Deleted User> (6230)

Tue 19th May 2009 22:16

I've no idea why the font changed happened there, I just cust and pasted this from Microsoft Word.

Don't read anything into it, apart from my inability to use a laptop.

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