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Concrete

Wandering ghosts

walk along the streets

of my life,

catching glimpses

of the one

that I keep inside,

and haunting voices

whisper words of comfort

to keep moving

along the hard ground

beneath me.

Don’t fall no more,

and don’t shed my tears.

Life will continue on,

but love will always stay

by my side.

Memories sway

like living portraits

as ghostly figures

slowly pass by

along the streets

of my life,

watching me struggle

to chase whatever destiny

that waits for me

down the road.

Concrete

by, Melissa R. Mendelson

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 21st May 2009 06:37

Hi Melissa, welcome back and thanx for your comment, its nice to know I've been a small part of your comeback!! X

I really like this, good work, and like you I lst a good mate recently. He passed away at 46, makes you grateful for what you have really.

Life will continue on,

but love will always stay

by my side.

Ho true, lovely, keep in touch, Jeff X

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Noetic-fret!

Tue 12th May 2009 20:49

I like this poem Melissa, not only because i can identify with the character walking the concrete mile while all around seem oblivious to your pain, but also, it gives a hint of foreboding, an intuition that seeks its freedom from a future not altogether clear of pain. Nice touch, however, as win says, there are rainbows, and all is not lost while the sun shines when rain pours. Nice one melissa
be well
Mike
x

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winston plowes

Tue 12th May 2009 17:59

Welcome home. (You are allowed to have a bit of time off of course) A real sense af drifting seperation in this latest piece. A friend of mine on the phone just now said he was looking for rainbows. I think we all do that, its just that they need rain to make them happen. Win

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Tue 12th May 2009 17:51

I would like to apologize for disappearing here to all my friends. A lot has been going on at home, and I lost a good friend of mine. But writing is helping me to push forward, keep going, and I know my work finds home here. Hope you are all doing well.

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