Crucify
Welcome to New York, the city that never weeps.
The man leaps and crucifies the sky
then he drops
then he stops
and doesn't rise.
Comments
I told him not to do it, nice one Scott!
very neat Scott but you do go on a bit, a little too loquacious for my liking daddyo
Hi Scott - to the point certainly. As these men (and women I guess) fell they to be part of a disaster movie (non human, maybe a CG effect). It couldn't really be happening could it? like the finality of human frailty contrasting the religeous phrases. his is not risen. Winston
was expecting more then certainly, I must admit.. Nice stuff still..
<Deleted User> (5646)
Fri 31st Jul 2009 12:36
Hi Scott,
yes it is strong with a powerful image.
It reminded me immediately of the song by Joan Armatrading- Drop the Pilot.
Janet.x
Short... and to the point : )
Big bad apple in every barrel Scott... great poem loved it!!!
Gus
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<Deleted User> (3292)
Mon 17th Aug 2009 12:06
I love short punchy poems like these where every word counts.