waiting
florist hands
on the long green stems
by the corner of the road
by the cemetery
and the indian restaurant
and a worn out post-box
are both empty
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could it be that
'handle long green stems
by the corner of the road'
would be better to ease into the 'by' and 'and' repeat. win ?
liked this but not sure why?
Liked the by... by and the and...and I tink and the let down at the end. Win x
You didn't tell me enough about this story.
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<Deleted User> (5646)
Tue 4th Aug 2009 11:25
I like this too. It has so much variation in colour which adds a pleasing element to the emptiness.
Nice poem Emily.
Janet.x