This is really atmospheric.May you find your spark though. Janex

Comment is about Failure (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

wow...love this and i loved this and i loved it. proper good x

Comment is about doxy (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

hi kealan i have just listed 'Id rather fuck my dog....'its such a shame i dont have the audio version.

Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Louise, I was going to!Save me a place pretty please...I'll email you right now!
Cheers
x

Comment is about Louise Fazackerley (poet profile)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

hey! just noticed you online. don't know if you're interested but i've set up a performance poetry workshop with ben mellor on sunday afternoon 1pm til 3pm. we've got 2 places left. i'm going and so is isobel. fancy it? wigan town centre. £3. if you do- email me at thewigantalentfactory@live.co.uk

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Amazing poem.
x

Comment is about Failure (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Awwww, I feel like I want to let you both sit in my back garden (we'd draw the curtains) This is a lovely poem
x

Comment is about No Secret Place (blog)

Original item by Tom

See, I read this before the other version and I really think this is more instant (for me) I saw her in this version whereas the other felt too prosey. I really enjoyed it so from me, yes, this does have merit lots of it.
x

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus II (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Rollicking and rumbustious...bloody hell I sound like that chap off The Good Old Days.Also very torchy. Loved it!
x

Comment is about doxy (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

G - I liked this. It has, what is for me, the essential quality of poetry - rhythm
I also enjoyed the repetition, almost a circularity.

Comment is about So Lay Me Down. (blog)

yeah, dzien dobre, Bohdan. Witam z Write Out Loud. I love this piece, the whole idea of <in the midst of life, bang!>. Do you fancy getting involved in our cross-cultural work? If so, contact me offline: julian@writeoutloud.net

Comment is about Bohdan Piasecki (poet profile)

Original item by Bohdan Piasecki

no sonnet here. Or is it just a <sod it>?

Comment is about Addendum di dum di dum di dum di dum to my First Sonnet. Yeah, sodit who cares! (blog)

Gentle bucolic imagery, with a hint of menace. Nice one.

Comment is about Going to the Country (blog)

Oh! That is sad but there's forbearance, too. And stoicism, resignation...

Comment is about Anniversary (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

This event was held at the Man and Scythe Bolton to remember, and celebrate, the life of John Jelly. John was the Godfather of Write Out Loud and ran chaotic but brilliant nights of poetry, music and fun at this venue.

Photographs by John Togher.

Comment is about John Jelly Tribute night, Bolton September 2009 (photo)

Everyone has such different views. I like those last two lines - they are what make it for me. I wouldn't feel the same way reading what Jane suggested. It is those bald thoughts of the observer that take you by surprise.

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hello Again to you too

Yes this poem is very raw but takes a look at the dishonesty of pleasure taken... or does it??

Gusxx

Comment is about Lisa Milligan (poet profile)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

Hi lisa 'My Father's Belt

Came to me in a dream... really wierd...yes I do have many of his ways... mostly kindly .... I was trying to write from the side of the aggressor for a change...

Once again thanks for the comments.

Gus xx

Comment is about Lisa Milligan (poet profile)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

Hello Again to you too

Yes this poem is very raw but takes a look at the dishonesty of pleasure taken... or does it??

Gusxx

Comment is about A Thousand Oceans (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Hello Lisa
Thank you so much for taking the time to read A Soldier's Letter...

Most encouraging comments
once again many thanks

Gus x

Comment is about Lisa Milligan (poet profile)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

I love it. The bit in brackets made me smile - gave a much more vivid picture of the person who might be speaking it. If I listed all the bits I loved my comment would be longer than the poem.

Comment is about For As I Draw You (blog)

Original item by Max Wallis

Hi Lisa,Thanktyou for your heart rendering comments about my work,..this is a fabulous site to get feedback,and also read other poets transcripts...I have read some of your work and find it a great inspiration,as I do of many writers herein.be safe.Marc

Comment is about Cassie (blog)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

This is the version I enjoy the most as it gives me an immediate visual of the old lady. The second one doesn't for me, I lack the empathy. However, i found the " and I thought" line disrupting as I came out of my picture into me/you and so personally I would replace the last two lines with " denying symbols diffidence" which for me would have kept the image but made me think.
I have really enjoyed these though, thanks very much, great reasoning and poetry again. Best,Jane

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I'm not sure how to comment on the samples or if you've blogged 'Dad' but I bloody love it. Max xx

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Thanks for the comment Cynthia; I was wondering what to do with that couplet -I think you are right- will amend.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Great strong brew of words in this one of yours which shouted at me. Sustained its strength an imagery till the end. Win

Comment is about The Great Refrain. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

I prefer the previous version Cynthia. You probably want to know why... it's hard to put my finger on it. I prefer things said in more concrete terms. Also a number of word combinations don't sit easily with me. I don't like the first line for instance - it just doesn't sound poetic to me. I hope that doesn't sound harsh - you seemed to be asking for feed back. I did like the last version and found that objective and enigmatic enough.

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus II (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Alison-this is a wonderful poem-can,t fault it in any way-brilliant! thanks-Stefan.

Comment is about Failure (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Dziendobre - I like your profile poem. It is all the more powerful for its objectivity and odd detachment - and sad - very, very sad.

Comment is about Bohdan Piasecki (poet profile)

Original item by Bohdan Piasecki

Hi Winston! Thanks for you welcome message. I've now uploaded a sample poem (and the audio file was there all along). Enjoy!

Comment is about Bohdan Piasecki (poet profile)

Original item by Bohdan Piasecki

You have a strong poetic style. My favorite was dated 11/4/10. I liked the whole thing but my favorite lines were:

Feelings to emotions

Cant stop devotions.

Love the way you captured that - been there. Great job.

Lisa

Comment is about Marc Anthony (poet profile)

Original item by Marc Anthony

It takes real talent to describe something without coming right out and saying it and that is your strong point. The last two lines are brilliant. Loved it!

Lisa

Comment is about Becoming Real (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

These points you wanted to get across...you really nailed it. You really kept my interest and it had great flow. Very well written.

Lisa

Comment is about The Great Refrain. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Well, here I am again. This one really caught my eye. I was going to say something every much like what Francine did! Enjoyed it very much.

Lisa

Comment is about A Thousand Oceans (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

I like your style very much. You've conveyed your reality with your father poetically and clearly. I can really relate to this one. The end is genius. Loved it!

Lisa

Comment is about Claw and Bloody Nail (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

I loved reading this - between the rhythm of it and the story, it's just great. Just the right amount of honesty, anger and humor. Good format too. Nice job!

Lisa

Comment is about An Innocent Abroad ( A Soldier’s Letter to his Chaplain) (blog)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

I loved this! 'Soaked to the skin I'm pulled under'!

Comment is about His love for me is like the sea, As deep as it is wide (blog)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Yes - the ending is very wry. I smiled even though I knew I possibly shouldn't. Does that constitute black humour or are we not allowed to call it that anymore?If I were to look at the poem in a more serious light, I would say that it could be about the right of every individual to determine their own life. Or it could be a reflection on how certain of us switch off to external tragedy - the fear of getting involved and connecting. Or maybe it isn't about the ending of a life at all - just the dangerous things people do when stressed and waiting for a bus...
I love the way you leave it open to interpretation and are able to handle a potentially serious poem with such a light hand.

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Good afternoon,young Hewitt! lovely poem Kath.Reminds me of an old one of mine.

'upon the face of night
dreams of baby glide
upon clouds they softly billow
she sleeps.
slow unfolding
this nurtured Rose
upon the womb,s
most perfect pillow.

enjoy your day Kath-Stef.-x

Comment is about lullaby (blog)

A rather wonderful analogy Ann - patina does seem to encompass a growing value and tenderness. :)

Comment is about patina (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Kealan, how did you use the word 'solice' as in 'a disgrace to solice' in your comment about Thomas' latest poem? I looked it up, and found nothing; yet 'solace' didn't seem quite right either. I know you love language; so I'm interested.

Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)

Original item by Kealan Coady

The ideas here are the magnificent ones of all true thinkers from 'forever'. Perhaps the poem could be a bit 'tighter' in its development of relationships, but, in my opinion, the last two lines 'And revolution is an old folk song' is the poem's most vital thought and a superb ending.

Comment is about The Great Refrain. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Cynthia, thank you for your kind comments on "Otis cries". The poem almost wrote itself and was a singularly defining moment for me as the deceased was a beloved next door neighbour. Thank you once again. Graham

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

enjoyed this piece, kealan... very well wrote i felt and i think very reflective off you...

not sure if the last line about is an old folk song is needed.. i think finishing with the previous line could be better x

Comment is about The Great Refrain. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

good stuff, lucy... i showed it to a pal too - i'll give you full feedback when i speak to you next. considering in your own words - you are a newbie, it's a cracking start! (I'll show you some of the stuff I wrote at your age - yours is hundreds and hundreds times better) x

Comment is about Peat's Silent Secret (Guy's - I'm a newbie, feel free to comment and let me know what you think) (blog)

love the ending Cynthia.. bit of a change for you i felt.. i will ask you a few questions next time i see you however.

one quick thing too - shouldn't 'I spotted the old woman at the bus stop' be 'i spotted a old woman at the bus stop'????

Comment is about Old Woman Waiting for a Bus (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks guys, am glad you got my gist! Not that it was a hard one. Even I'm slightly proud of that one..even though I'm a newbie!

Comment is about Peat's Silent Secret (Guy's - I'm a newbie, feel free to comment and let me know what you think) (blog)

You is like well top-bombing wiv dis.

Comment is about Gibberish (blog)

Original item by Ian Nenna

Very well observed, and a great surprise ending!

Comment is about pinny (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

They didn't let ye down tonight!

Comment is about You Spurs! (blog)

Original item by John Coopey