Hello Marianne. Some very powerful and vivid phrases, I loved "no longer a person but a country you evacuate".But "the fault of emotion bleeding monarchs of madness" maybe asks a bit too much of the reader?This reader, anyhow!
Comment is about Walk alone (blog)
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Rachel Bond
Sun 23rd May 2010 20:32
what writers work does this comment on? as it is without direct reference it reads bitter.for my sympathies youd have to explain yourself as these 'writers' may have good reason in their poetry. perhaps you dont understand it? its not a good idea to impose a solitary understanding of what a multi- interpretive word such as God is, upon a piece of work intended to reach a wide readership like poetry does.
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Sun 23rd May 2010 18:19
Hi Isobel - thanks for the comments. "grasping at straws" - about the nuances of words/phrases & the different ways in which they can be employed. & - the ampersand works for me on the page only because sometimes to repeat the word AND becomes a little tedious to the eye, and like it says in my bio, I much prefer the written word, so it needs to look "right" on the page for me. Each to their own though and I can well understand what you mean. You always have something interesting to say! all the best. B
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I think language has a lot to answer for; it can become so esoteric it is a hindrance to real communication rather than a help. In my opinion, it is especially useless when writers/speakers don't really think about what the words really mean, and just 'spout', using all kinds of rhetorical skill to influence other people, all the time being on very unsure ground themselves. 'God/gods' can be the epitome of good or evil. Funny that. I took the slant of 'god/good' (still a matter of opinion!)
Not to worry, I'm not positive I had a point! HAHA. Pandora's 'lesson' can take you anywhere.
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
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I understand where you are coming from on this ; )
Comment is about Rhyme of the Vegan (blog)
Thanks Cate - check out Every Day You Play!
Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)
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Hi Isobel, thanks for commenting on 'Dead End'. I haven't come across 'The Rapture' but a quick google gave me the jist - Climate change is an old interest of mine, I started a web magazine on the topic in '07. Best wishes, Dave
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Greetings.
Thank you so much for attending the lecture, "The Power of the Elder". It was truly inspirational.
OL.
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 23rd May 2010 12:25
Good afternoon Mrs Dye-just popped on to say hope you are well and enjoying the lovely weather(and ice cream! lol)best regards-Stefan.
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 23rd May 2010 12:23
Afternoon Dave and family.Re your comment on on lottery numbers-drat! foiled again!lol-hope your weekend goes just as great-cheers-Stefan.
Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)
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Anthony, Zeus was so devious,he knew just what would happen. After all he masterminded the plot.LOL
Comment is about Pandora`s Legacy (blog)
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I think the woman in the cave has the best deal! Enjoyed this, Ann, full of ideas, expansive
Comment is about women of the world (blog)
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Hi Isobel, Sorry, i wont be attending on tuesday, lack of babysitter. I'm sure we'll meet eventually! Thanks for asking though, it's quite a nice feeling to know i'm wanted lol x
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Cate, thanks for your comments on my poems.That's just the kind of criticism I like to hear.If I were more skilful I'd be able to blend poetry into the narrative seamlessly, but as you say, it's too prosaic in parts.
Comment is about Cate (poet profile)
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You aren't by any chance going to the Vanilla Lounge on Tuesday? It sounds like a few Wigan poets may be there. I'm determined to meet you one day! x
Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)
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I would say those are quite ominous musings - you haven't just read the Rapture by any chance?
I like your ideas - as you say, nothing lasts forever, not even our sun... man is just an insignificant grain of sand in the universe ... a cheery thought for a Sunday morning! xx
Comment is about Dead End (blog)
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Ta for your comments, Anthony. The Mad History thing is part of a spoof series on mental illness. Sometimes it's hard to overtrump the facts and I've had at least one person take the Egyptian story at face value!
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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I read this last night Cynthia, and couldnt get a take on it, but it lingered in my mind so Ive come back to have another look this morning. That must be a success story! Im still not sure but Im gonna take it that theres hope for all us aspriring poets!
Cate xx
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
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This is quite beautiful Nash. I shall go and research the poet you recommend... he must be worthwhile if hes inspired this piece of writing!
Cate cc
Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 23rd May 2010 00:53
A good early Sunday morning to you and family Dave-re the great minds-yours taking the lead without doubt!spooky though all the same thought eh!ok,another telepathic venture..er....think of six winning numbers,my email adress is.......lol! Stefan.
Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)
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Thanks for your comment Ann, much appreciated.
Cx
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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Quite brilliant! Im not sure how it stands as a poem though.... it seems to me to be prose broken up into lines. But this didnt matter as I found it quite riveting to read.
Cate xx
Comment is about Mad History: The Early Egyptians (blog)
Hi Winston, thanks for your comments on 'Dead End' - best wishes,
Dave
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
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Te he he....thats a poxy story!
Catexx
ps luv it!
Comment is about . . . of varts and tickers (blog)
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Yu did a good kon job on us there! Luved it1
Cate xx
Comment is about A Yukon Tale . . . (blog)
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I like this Nash. Simple but quite profound.
Cate xx
Comment is about Pandora’s Box (blog)
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I have to agree with everything said Marianne. A very powerful piece of work.
Cate xx
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
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A lovely reading of your interesting take on the title. I like your first four lines... they cleverly lead the way into the rest of the theme.
Cate xx
Comment is about pandora's jar (blog)
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<Deleted User> (4235)
Sat 22nd May 2010 21:48
Hi, Winston. My dreams are a definite source of inspiration, spiraling into a million thoughts.
Thank you. :)
Comment is about Exist (Based on last night's dream) (blog)
Loved this Melissa, good to see a recent one from you, and inspired by a dream too, fab. You could go anywhere from those first 3 lines which grabbed my attension briliantly. Win
Comment is about Exist (Based on last night's dream) (blog)
On the whole Dave, I agree. Nicely put. Win
Comment is about Dead End (blog)
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Liked this Pandora poem very much. as it has been said "Gentle / powerful / sad" Win :-)
Comment is about Pandora`s Box (blog)
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I enjoyed reading this Ansy... a modernistic and clever take on the theme.
Cate xx
Comment is about Pandora's lost Box (blog)
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Hum... its like saying we `re not responsible for our own actions cos its all in the genes! A clever take on it though.
Cate xx
Comment is about Pandora's Box Rap (blog)
<Deleted User> (7075)
Sat 22nd May 2010 20:37
Hi Josh, welcome to WOL. Enjoy.Maybe see you at Bolton WOL. Winston
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<Deleted User> (7075)
Sat 22nd May 2010 20:21
Hi cynthia welcome to WOL. I hope you enjoy the site and find something that interests you. Winston
Comment is about Cynthia Greenwood (poet profile)
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Found this today, made me laugh out loud...
"For those of us who cannot spell
I name this website ROL"
x Win
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 22nd May 2010 18:35
spooky comment for you Dave-I was in mind of doing poem on triassic period-'prehistoric memories in shifting sand caverns'-etc etc-just before you popped this good one on.Enjoyed nevertheless-Stefan.
Comment is about Dead End (blog)
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I have to agree with the powerful imagery at work here Marianne...
so many exquisite lines. Brilliant!
Francine x
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
LOL Anthony!
I love your comment on my poem 'Pandora's Affliction'...
It made my day - You have a wonderful sense of humour! I wrote the poem first, which in turn inspired my choice of photo.
Francine x
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
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Thanks Win, mine neither, I walked to school, but there was always THAT girl at school who was more grown up than everyone else, who was always otherworldly.
Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)
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Indeed, A.E., seems like we never learn. Those girls are always ahead of us every step. Cheers, Nash
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<Deleted User> (4235)
Sat 22nd May 2010 17:08
Thank you, Dave. I didn't realize it was a scientific fact. I wonder if remembering dreams from a long time ago is better in women than men too.
Comment is about Exist (Based on last night's dream) (blog)
.... but please don't feel you have to comment again.
Cx
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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Thank-you - removed it 'cos I thought it isn't much good ... but then again I'm not having the best of days. I shall put it back. :)
Cx
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Isobel
Sun 23rd May 2010 22:29
Fascinating chain of thought. For me the whole poem is a build up to the last four lines - a poke at mind numbing reality tv shows like Big Brother and its ilk...or so I interpreted it.
Comment is about Mad History: The Early Egyptians (blog)