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John Darwin

Thu 29th Oct 2009 08:24

Astonishing. Love it.

John

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Mia Darlone

Wed 28th Oct 2009 23:21

Thank you for your praise of my ode to the king of all dairy products, I love performing this one. (John I'll get round to transferring photos and sending - sorry for delay I'm manic prior to holiday - bring on the Fijian tree house!)

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Armando Halpern

Wed 28th Oct 2009 21:42

Thanks for your comments on Sense of Silence. Your comment is a constructive comment that denotes careful and attentive reading, but, even so, I don't agree.It made me read it again and think, but, to me, that line has a place and iis a fundamental part of the whole.

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Deborah Jordan Bailey

Wed 28th Oct 2009 21:28

thank you Armando. I think you more than suceed in breathing this language. I wish I could breathe your language as succesfully. debzx

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 28th Oct 2009 20:44

[from September 28th 2009] ''Anthony: You have re-claimed from my universe a hundred million brain cells from oblivion.'' incase you failed to notice.
ta
Tommy

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Memoir

Wed 28th Oct 2009 20:24

Thanks for the kind words...
Glad you enjoyed my writing.

Daniel.

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Isobel

Wed 28th Oct 2009 19:55

Would like to come again Steve. I find that journey quite scary on my own though and my sisters don't like Mondays... Perhaps Janet would join me. Will discuss it with her.

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John Aikman

Wed 28th Oct 2009 19:19

As a 'humanist' and committed atheist myself, I have always found it a struggle to 'respect' the ludicrous belief systems of any religion...I like a bit of Buddhism...like the best of 'em...but 'reincarnation'? I don't think so...this admirably sends up the pious obliquity of the religious...without denigrating the obvious sensibility of humanist atheism. I applaud you!

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Jx

PS, To you 'person's of faith' out there....gaaargh! But I respect your right to be misguided.

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Wed 28th Oct 2009 18:32

Steve, Spencer, Cynthia thank you all for your comments.
Bernie

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 17:58

Hi Chris, I must agree with Isobel that is a very nice bottom, wish that mine was still like that!

I really do think that 'Your Label' is good, not just good but interesting which is even better than good.

You've been around on here longer than me -
How do you find the site?x

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 17:50

Wonderfully said Christopher, but ( niggling question ) do you want a small select group of readers, who can extricate the multiple messages, or would you like to appeal to a larger group of readers? Many would feel overwhelmed at having to dissect a poem to find out what it means - a common gripe sometimes on here. I suppose it again boils down to the subjectivity of the reader, and the readership that you want. If it was me ( and you are not me which is part of the beauty of individuality and ability to express, and the sheer diversity of the medium of the poetic form of expression ), I maybe would have developed one message whilst hinting at another, and then develop it into a series of poems.

You can delete this comment by the way if you like - and continue discussion through profile, - again if you like.

None of this is to detract from the fact that I think it's a good poem by the way, and everyone has a certain agenda within their writing that they want to convey at different points in time.

Nicky x

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Christopher Dawson

Wed 28th Oct 2009 17:28

If I had done that then they would have merely pandered and not provoked, however the essence is in the confliction, the point being the issue is, if you'll forgive me, not as black and white as most would have it be.

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Isobel

Wed 28th Oct 2009 17:25

Thank you muchly David - would rather be responsible for that than a new Ice Age....
Isobel x

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Steve Regan

Wed 28th Oct 2009 16:33

I think a need for God is written into the DNA of every human. Many people in the modern age, deny this, of course, as they strive to be gods themselves.

There is nothing new under the sun.

Nice to see the Methodists get a mention in your poem. They were founded by an heroic, romantic man who literally got on his horse and took hope to the confused, the poor and the marginalised of our country.

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 16:30

Hey, if I can organise some transportation, will be there, a week on Monday? Already sweettalked my better half to taxi me to Wigan, sounds like a good night.
Nicky x

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Steve Regan

Wed 28th Oct 2009 16:16

TOMMY, ta for your Roman alusions left as a comment on my poem about the Bra. As a toper myself, I chertainly appreshiate them.

Tommy I seem to remember that you live in Liverpool. I'd like you to come over over to the next Bards in New Brighton and perform. We meet at the Magazine pub on the second Monday of every month from 8pm to 11 pm. It's a pretty lively night. Cheers.

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Steve Regan

Wed 28th Oct 2009 16:12

ISOBEL, I wish I'd scooped up the bra and taken it back home to New Brighton with me. Then I'd be able to produce it for performance purposes, smears and all. When are you coming back to perform at the BARDS, me dear?

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Steve Regan

Wed 28th Oct 2009 16:07

NICKY, as a Wiganer, I can quite believe Bolton is littered with discarded nether-garments! Ta for your comments on my brassiere poem. Come to the BARDS and perform your stuff.

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Wed 28th Oct 2009 15:20

Thanks for comment about my poem.V. interesting.Not sure what you mean about equation of emptiness although it was written at a time when I was experiencing joy and woe in my life. But I can't see that in my poem.

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 15:00

Neil, you are really a romantic at heart aren't you?
What happened to the languish and anguage?!:-)))))x

You need to put music to this and develop it into a song, very bluesy feel to it.x

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 14:38

Hey, Steve, thanks for the great comment on 'Siren', really appreciated. Had a bit of a panic when I blogged it and toned it down a little, save the rest for a colourful performance. lol x

Getting a bit of a regular here on your profile. thanks again, nicky.x

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 14:34

Thanks everyone so much for the great comments. Feel quite overwhelmed......really glad you all enjoyed it. ( Have you cooled down yet guys, I've been told there were a few cold baths and heads in the fridge yesterday!!) lol.......wonder if 'Siren' can have another outing at some point?..........haha.....get the ice buckets at the ready, she may pounce on a performance night!:-))))

Seriously, great encouragement, didn't know how a female would be received writing about mindblowing orgasms and using the word 'pricktease' etc. Thanks guys and gals for reading and commenting.

Nicky.......(or minx, to Gus) xx

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 14:18

Hi Steve, I have read this several times this morning and the picture it paints is very vivid and powerful, even though I'm not sure what it is about - on one reading I think I do and then I change my mind. I'm curious - what was your original title?

Great piece, nicky x

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 28th Oct 2009 14:10

Very difficult Christopher to get multiple messages across in a poem, mainly down to the fact that the reader will probably tune in to the one that they associate with most, or the one that is foremost in their mind at that present time. Which is good in that it may appeal to a wider range of readers. However, if you think logically about it, you could have developed each message into another poem. What do you think? I'm no expert. Just an idea.

Enjoyed it.x

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Deborah Jordan Bailey

Wed 28th Oct 2009 13:46

"loneliness is falling backwards
through the darkness of a void"
i lack skills to make constuctive comments but i know that i want to keep this poem and your words linger in my mind and flow together beautifully like the meeting of the waters.deb

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David Franks

Wed 28th Oct 2009 13:23

My only worry is, Isobel, they could well be adding to global warming - from under-the-collar!

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 28th Oct 2009 13:02

I think Stephen knows what he's writing about here: Not racism but ironical working class sufference.

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Isobel

Wed 28th Oct 2009 12:56

Yes - I see. Hope you are enjoying the half term - though you don't have little ones. The weather has been so changeable - sunny one minute, grey and overcast the next - hard to keep them happy. Look forward to seeing you around. xx

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Steve Smith

Wed 28th Oct 2009 12:27

An equation poem.Images of warmth over emptiness equals..? poignant.
Steve Smith

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Steve Smith

Wed 28th Oct 2009 12:22

well crafted, rolls like a wheel.,spins like a coin and comes up 'tails' when you call 'heads'.
Steve Smith

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Gus Jonsson

Wed 28th Oct 2009 11:55

Many thanks re Shirley's Bedroom... enjoyed seeing and hearing last night at Sale.... Keep in touch re The Alex Humphrey night.

Many Thanks
Gus

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Wed 28th Oct 2009 11:54

Hi everybody we are very enjoyed the poetry night. We appreciate the kind welcome we will never forget that .We hope to enjoy seeing you again.thank from brass poetry.

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Gus Jonsson

Wed 28th Oct 2009 11:52

incongruous?... Well Shirley is Australian... and it sort of sounds right because of the closeness of truth... but was it her only name??...just read the Auntie Norma item between the lines ...clue.?

Thank you so much for reading.as always
Gusxx

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Gus Jonsson

Wed 28th Oct 2009 11:48

Thank you Nicky ... Not quite a siren but yes I believe she had an agenda... but hey ho!...whataway2go!

Gus xx

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Isobel

Wed 28th Oct 2009 11:41

No need to apologise John. I seem to remember you saying that red shoes frightened you... Other rhyming words spring to my mind - pity, great great pity...

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John Darwin

Wed 28th Oct 2009 11:20

something else rhymes with pretty.

I am now ashamed :-O

sorry

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Isobel

Wed 28th Oct 2009 11:12

Stop press - I must confess
I never thought my shoes were less
Important than a climate treaty
So pretty are my little feety...

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David Franks

Wed 28th Oct 2009 10:44

What news -
New shoes!

;-)>

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Wed 28th Oct 2009 09:58

I love the pace of this poem Neil x

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John Darwin

Wed 28th Oct 2009 09:00

Haven't had the pleasure of reading this before. Brilliant in its brevity.

thanks
John

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darren thomas

Wed 28th Oct 2009 07:12

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Tue 27th Oct 2009 20:22

really like this!

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John Aikman

Tue 27th Oct 2009 20:19

Truly lovely. Thank you.Jx

PS. Is there an extra 'f' in the second line? I once won a prize for spotting all the 'f's in a sentence...there's an extra one in the second last verse too...but it's still extremely lovely.

: )

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Tue 27th Oct 2009 19:58

sad and beautiful... and wonderfully written as always

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Rachel Bond

Tue 27th Oct 2009 19:30

For some reason I wanted spiderman to break the bed in 'Brief Encounters.'.Nice poem.
Rachel

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Neil West

Tue 27th Oct 2009 19:29

Hi Jeff, thanks for the comments, I can see there is a lot of honesty in your writing too and I can hear the punk influence in your samples! I enjoyed 'cemetery gates' - lots of vivid images and plenty to reflect on. I was put in mind of a sign described on the radio recently in a cemetery 'placing flowers on the graves in no way benefits the dead'. I'm curious to know what they are lining up for in your poem? Is this a suggestion that there may be an afterlife?

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Christopher Dawson

Tue 27th Oct 2009 19:08

Thank you Nicky, though I tried to get other messages over in this too, a mixture, that conflicted but contained validity...just like the subject matter ;)

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

Tue 27th Oct 2009 18:34

Hi Nicky - many thanks for your kind comments on 'After' :)

I can readily identify with the thinking behind 'stuff' - we have so many reminders daily of how essential 'stuff' is - not so many reminders of how vast numbers of folk around the world have no stuff at all.....

Best wishes, Dave

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Rachel Bond

Tue 27th Oct 2009 18:32

thanks for this poem. It fits in perfectly with my day photographing homeless people .
Watching trees become twigs
carefully constructing coffins
Love these two lines and relates to my poem Cradle also.
Melting like hot matches.
The sulphurs of hell?

My dad had damaged cartilidge due to too many parachute jumps with the regiment. So you hooked me from the start.

Ill have to look up Tartarus now as im sure theres a different reading to this than one that includes a fish condiment! (only in my ignorant mind - not a criticism;)

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Rachel Bond

Tue 27th Oct 2009 18:15

I like this Nicky. How did you know me?

thanks for kind words on my poem Cradle,

Rachel

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