Very true to the myth Val - unusually so - it is good to have someone keep us grounded - as Cynthia says.
Did you take that photo - it doesn't look like a google pic - I'm so loving the variety of ideas!
Comment is about Pandora`s Legacy (blog)
Original item by Valerie Cook
Another interesting take. Are you ranting against man/woman's frailty within the universe vis a vis the Gods/God?
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
You're back with a bang Anthony - and a great sense of fun about your work! Keep 'em coming...
Comment is about . . . of varts and tickers (blog)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
I like the thinking behind this - similar to mine in some ways, but we apply the blame differently.
Comment is about Pandora's Box Rap (blog)
oooo - this is a dark one! Most people home in on the hope - you've done the opposite - LOL!
As Cynthia says, an interesting take.
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
Original item by Steven Kenny
An interesting 'take' on the theme, Kenny. Perhaps it could be tighter and therefore 'stronger'. Sometimes repetition weakens great points; it's a dicey tool.
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
Original item by Steven Kenny
Your language is a joy as it dresses your interesting ideas, your varied poetical devices effective. Check 'the little green men........wander' no 's'.
Comment is about Alient (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
I'm in complete fog. What I finally decided is too ridiculous, but - based on "'her' box" - maybe the female body opening to sexual intercourse and the resultant birth of a baby which personifies all things new/begun again? Do help me out here.
Comment is about Pandora haiku (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Andy, this is really good. I enjoyed it a lot. Your ideas and imagery are developing an 'Andy bite' that is becoming your 'style'. Lucky you! Ray's comments are always worth considering.
Comment is about Pandora's lost Box (blog)
Original item by Andy N
This myth influenced my dreams when I was a child, not pleasantly; I didn't believe in Hope. I also like this straightforward retelling to keep us focussed.
Comment is about Pandora`s Legacy (blog)
Original item by Valerie Cook
I think this is great. It highlights a profound idea, with calculated brevity and a pointed wrap-around repetition for superb emphasis on 'hope forever' or 'sheer idiocy', whichever the reader chooses.
Comment is about Delusions. (blog)
I would hate to get on the wrong side of your tongue. This is some kind of clever,viciously observational with ideas brilliantly transferred, and hewn with stilettos.Terrific title, a real hook.
Comment is about Mad History: The Early Egyptians (blog)
Really good, Ray, pithy in particulars. I like the writer to reader direct connection. First line is intriguing; last line is a corker in 'classical' summation.
Comment is about Pandora's Box Rap (blog)
<Deleted User> (7212)
Fri 21st May 2010 14:57
Hi Nash - a great poem -
"a peardrop smile" = priceless. B
Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)
Original item by Nash
<Deleted User> (7212)
Fri 21st May 2010 14:46
Hi - (the beautiful game) - thanks for you comments - I can do nicey nicey as well, but do you see how many comments it got? I've also noticed that rhyming poetry still gets far more interest than other types (mine + others). A lot of people do still like rhyme - I do as well, if it's good. all the best. B
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (7212)
Fri 21st May 2010 14:35
Hi Ann - "later than you think"
thanks for the kind coments. B
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Thanks again Chris, though Pablo is really the architect. I just took his and turned it around to being about the beginning of love rather than the end. I recommend hunting down the original version if you don't know it...it's stunning. Nash
Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)
Original item by Nash
Thanks Isobel. In my school, they were always older, untouchable, and way out of my league...until the skiing trip to italy that is!
Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)
Original item by Nash
An enjoyable read. Lots of innuendo and great lines. I liked the vision of her fellating a cigarette - you can just imagine... my school was full of Brenda's, mostly wearing black bras under white blouses - I was totally out-classed!
Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)
Original item by Nash
<Deleted User> (7073)
Fri 21st May 2010 11:54
Ha ha both your comments made me smile ;-) I removed the Bio as it seemed so contrived. Of course I am a Billionaire Astrophysicist waiting for science to catch up with my imagination lol ...... Have a great day XX
PS Material for your developing skills lol ;-)
Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)
Original item by Alison Smiles
Definitely try Neruda's twenty love poems - they are simply breathtaking.
I need to get myself kitted out with recording facilities this weekend, I think!
Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)
Original item by Nash
also no conks- good work!
Comment is about The girl and the lake (blog)
Original item by Steven Kenny
I love it! And I did think it was about a suicuide, i enjoyed the slow verbs you've used which give the impression of her gradually sinking in which is why I thought it was suicide I think, ace and sad and i'll send you a link to another poem by Gillian Clarke which this reminds me of. :)
Comment is about The girl and the lake (blog)
Original item by Steven Kenny
Don't know the poet but I love the sounds and I like to read the occasional love poem. You should try recording it.
Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)
Original item by Nash
Hi Andy - thanks for your comment, glad you enjoyed it. I am trying not to comment too much on any of the other Pandora poems, as I want to include my thoughts in the end summary. I also didn't want to be influenced by other's thoughts whilst writing. I have enjoyed yours though and am so glad that you took part. What has been great about this competition is the community spirit I feel in the air. Great poets getting together to have some fun. It's not every day things like that happen...
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
I dreamt of delusions sometimes myself still and I am older than I will admit... I think we all do to some degree when we are 15..
I loved this.. nicely structured, chuck.. x
Comment is about Delusions. (blog)
Thanks Greg - ah, the good old days of being terrified of girls. If I could go back - I'd tell myself to hang onto that fear!
Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)
Original item by Nash
i write about silence too sometimes and look into the gaps inbetween it... the things you may miss if you don't look carefully..
i could really relate to this - your best one on here yet, I felt..
Comment is about Silence (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
nice one Cynthia. good stuff! x
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Love these lines ...
"Concealing my growing admiration
For that High-school crest
Displayed magnanimously on her heaving chest"
Brought back memories of the school bus, after all these years ...
Comment is about BACK-SEAT BRENDA (blog)
Original item by Nash
Pete Crompton
Thu 20th May 2010 23:44
Hi Andy - sorry I couldn't chat. Was in middle of trying to sort out audio on my poem. I hate rushing poetry - too many loose ends, things I don't really like. Ended up changing it and then it didn't tie up to the recording. It won't seem to take the new recording though. Blast and double blast - that will teach me to rush things...
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
I like this one! Esp. those first three lines - and the last bit (after "Then suddenly; Light") is particularly lovely too.
Comment is about Stargiver (blog)
Original item by Nash
Liked these lines very much:Spinning made me
and I spin still.
Smoothed thumb and finger
and wet earth
from honest mud.
That was my birth.
The gods made me to carry the can.
Poor womankind, to get the blame from man.
Though you could probably omit "from honest mud" same as wet earth, really!
Comment is about pandora's jar (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Thanks Lynn! that one is ooold!
Comment is about THE TOAD THE HEART AND THE VALENTINE GIFT (blog)
Original item by Nash
Enjoyed this, Nash. Made me smile.
Comment is about THE TOAD THE HEART AND THE VALENTINE GIFT (blog)
Original item by Nash
Thank you, dear Lynn for your comments.
With warmest wishes, Larisa
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Another nod (ok, ok it's a total rip off!) to the greatest poet that ever lived - Pablo Neruda
Comment is about Puedo Escribir (tonight I can write) (blog)
Original item by Nash
J'ai voté pour toi : )
Bonne chance !
Comment is about VOTE FOR ME!!!! (PRETTY PLEASE) (blog)
Original item by Gemma Lees
A lovely poem, Larissa, with a lot of truth in there.
Comment is about Silence (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
One always needs a good duvet, Ann. Always!
Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)
Original item by Nash
Thank you Francine - I haven't performed in 8 years and am weaning my way back slowly. An audio may be a good place to start. I'll try to figure out the technicalities as I'm all too new to this. Glad you found it funny though! Always a good thing. Nash
Comment is about Online Love (for Jen Lewis) (blog)
Original item by Nash
Isobel
Fri 21st May 2010 17:33
Modern day Pandoras! A lot different to the myth Andy but I bet they reek a lot of damage on the male populace - a very different take!
Comment is about Pandora's lost Box (blog)
Original item by Andy N