Rodney, I'm a tad confused by your latest post on my site. You open with: 'I don't know' you don't know what Rod? And following: '...overshadowed...' would you explain please?
Thanx
Tommy
:o)

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hiya Andy
thanks for your comments and suggestions on 'perfect Line'
Happy 2011 X

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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blimey Dave! you have been through the wars! we will keep fingers crossed for your good recovery and improving health in the coming New Year-to which I raise glass for you and yours-thank you Sir-Stef.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

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It's a good one.

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I don't know. That you're such a sensitive writer aware of surrounding and personal feeling overshadow the poem.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (revised draft) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

simply beautiful poem...it captures the elusive nature of love and the fascination of its otherworldliness for me...i really like the image of mirroring fingerprints, like desperate effort to catch the truley beautiful, that in nature will always pass,impermanent, fragile and impossible to hold. gorgeous x

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

What a cozy and reflective poem Cynthia. Perfect for this time of year, I too would have liked childhood, Less clunky and having a broader appeal (but thats just me), some great expressions, Win X

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Results announced at 6pm!

Comment is about I need help in this online competition, voting closes at noon on NYE (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

Hi Dave, thanks for you comments on Seat '58A coach D' people forced together in a small space on a train from all backgrounds got to be a fascinating area for poety I think. glad you liked. Win x

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

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Gorgeous. I have always found that words can be as destructive as constructive; and if words don't come, they aren't needed.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (revised draft) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Great to see you posting again Pete. 'Shark's teeth' is a great simile and the last line is as enigmatic as it is...sinister?

Comment is about The Icicles (blog)

Ha - I once remember commenting on one of yours thinking it was about the end of a loving relationship. It was actually about a very 'actively engaged' menage a trois! LOL - I felt such a prat. Only in my wildest dreams could I have identified with that ;-)

It is good to see you back posting again Tommy. x

Comment is about Daughter: In the year 2020 (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I like the gentle reflective nature of this poem - so in keeping with the falling snow. Graham is right - charming is the word for it - almost like you are shaking up a snow globe with your younger self inside.
Happy New Year to you to Cynthia. x

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I like this one too - such an original way to describe the love game. I like the underpinning sadness about it - the impermanence, the transience.
A really lovely poem.

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

This appears to read like one would blink, then miss the event completely. How did you do that?

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

Cynthia hello. I haven't commented for a little while but thought that I would add my thoughts to this charming piece. Absolutely loved the idea of Lux flakes (well remembered) tumbling from an open box. I would have liked the ending to have said "the cellar of my childhood (to me girlhood doesn't sit right). Anyway, a lovely bit of work to end 2010 on. Look forward to your next year's offerings. Graham

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

really enjoyed this Rach, but am wondering shouldn't you consider splitting the piece up to something like

'We are all dots … just waiting
to be connected to each other.

We mirror fingerprints to find a match.
Planets align as ink lines draw freely.
For a while, on borrowed time.

We find formation in crimson skies.
In backlit flight we say goodbye
To a once engaging perfect line.


Just food for thought, but I particularly like the first two lines..

top stuff - Andy N x

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

lovely (if that is the right word), Georgina. I particularly the use of the sun 'here, gone, left, right'.. Perhaps the next line with the Moon should have 'And I am merely the Moon' in it... but enjoyed it either way xx

Comment is about The Sun and The Moon. (blog)

love the last line Cynthia here in particular, but enjoyed the full poem x

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

@Steve: I usually give some few hours before responding (in order to 'mull')but an interim is in order as a thanks for taking the time.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (revised draft) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I agree with the others. Lovely!

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Your paucity of words achieves much and hints strongly at the interconnectedness in all things - a poem of considerable depth

Comment is about Perfect line (blog)

You hinted at some hidden jewels - I see some glimmer leaking from Pandora's chest - beautiful

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks Steve!

Comment is about I need help in this online competition, voting closes at noon on NYE (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

Hi again Ann-like many animal lovers we all know what a difficult period it must be for you-I really am with you in your sorrow.You did her proud in the way you laid her to rest-a very kindly way of thanking her for all her lovely companionship-of course if and when you might think of getting another pet I,m sure you will consider one from a sanctuary-but as you mention it most certainly would be disrespectful to do so too soon.I will be thinking of you and return my best wishes and love wholeheartedly-thank you for all your wonderful poetry in 2010-Stefan.xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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nice to see you back young man! hope thou art coping-best to you Dave-Stef.

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hehe. Thanks guys. No comment re nympho... I just know what I like :)

Comment is about Fire (blog)

Original item by Penny Pepper

I agree with Banksy. This is a truly lovely poem! Happy New Year and thank you so much for all your lovely words of encouragement to me in 2010. It was lovely to meet you too! xx

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Yes, I was imagining some great big equine wooden beastie - an unwanted chrissie present! For the woman who has everything! Sorry about the horsething! Sounds scary! Happy New Year if I don't get round to it! xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

@Cynthia: Thank you for your comment on 'Nearly Moon'. The grammar IS the very thing at issue here. Words encroach, words displace and they do so awkwardly. As you read it the flow of the poem IS jarred as is my 'thinking'. My 'thinking' interferes with my emotions. I'm glad you have noted this Cynthia. :o)
PS a revision.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

@Winston: Thank you for your comment on 'Daughter...'. :o)

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

@Isobel: Thank you for your comment on 'Daughter...'. You have the poem summed up. Please do not feel unsure re ANY of my poems nor any comment of mine. :o)

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@Cynthia: Thank you for your comment on 'Nearly Moon'. The grammar IS the very thing at issue here. Words encroach, words displace and they do so awkwardly. As you read it the flow of the poem IS jarred as is my 'thinking'. My 'thinking' interferes with my emotions. I'm glad you have noted this Cynthia. :o) PS I will do a version just for you.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

@Isobel: Thank you for your comment. You have the poem summed up. Please do not feel unsure re ANY of my poems nor any comment of mine. :o)

@Philipos: Thank you for your comment.'silencing' is the effect upon my 'want' to retort not something within. More outward than inward.

@Winston: Thank you for your comment. :o)

Comment is about Daughter: In the year 2020 (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Love it - you're a Star :)

Comment is about The Sun and The Moon. (blog)

Wow, Cynthia - you might be trying to be shmaltzy, but for me this is the best of yours I've read by a long way... you've put some feeling & love & depth into this one. Yours are always clever, erudite & well-crafted, but (for me) often a little too-well thought-out or knowing, but this one feels like it comes straight from the heart - and is all the better for it.
5 Gold Stars!
(BTW - can I put this on my website under Faves by other authors?)

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Of course, poetry of a religious leaning fits on this site! Why wouldn't it? Poets are thinking creatures, mostly. Just ignore those who aren't. The duck-billed platypus reminds us that God didn't always make perfection. Although, God knows :) that creature may be perfection after all, and we are the uncompleted version. I said once to a friend that homosexuals may be the refining form of human life and he nearly fainted.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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I like this more every time I read it. IMO, I would revisit 'it's those words .... etc.. duster'. The grammar doesn't fit and is therefore a distracting hiccup in a good work.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Last year was a cheeky final poem. Something lyrical for 2010, gentle and non-confrontational. Happy New Year to Everyone. I do enjoy you all.

Comment is about Winter Walk (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

PS. Love the description of your grandfather's hands too... Prompts me to write about one of my earliest childhood memories, also a visit to a grandparent, thanks for the inspiration.

Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)

Original item by David Cooke

I think it must have been poem of the month then as I have read it before. Thanks for helping me remember :)

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Original item by David Cooke

What an interesting take on the life / death of birds, enjoyed reading this Moira. Winston

Comment is about Buried Birds (blog)

Original item by Moira Eribenne

Powerful, this one Penny. Not sure about 'Giddy up down' but liked 'The thread is my blood' and the fire and fetish chain themes. Great stuff, Winston

Comment is about Fire (blog)

Original item by Penny Pepper

So there's two nympho's on WOL?
Great Poem - "A sword to stroke" = you saucy bitch :)

Comment is about Fire (blog)

Original item by Penny Pepper

LOL
Tu es fou !

xxxxx

Comment is about self scan (blog)

@Cynthia: The 'nearly' is a representation of both the partial physical obliteration by cloud and the diminution by reflection and the feelings that are encroached with the need to formulate a representation -literally-.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

@Cynthia: The 'nearly' is a representation of the partial physical obliteration by cloud and the diminution by reflection and the feelings that are encroached with the need to formulate a representation -literally-.

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

@Steve: Thank you for your comment. 'I think therefore I disconnect' You have touched upon this and upon: 'I think, therefore I connect' The difference between 'feeling' and 'thought', sometimes the concious mind elbows out or over the feeling sub-brain. Tommy

Comment is about The Nearly Moon (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

ah and heres me thinking someone had dumped a bloody great wooden mare on yer doorstep!-I.T?..wotsat then-lol! Stef.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I love this and I love rhyme! Good on ya.

Comment is about A less formal (peformance based) approach to analysing my lyricism (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson