<Deleted User> (6315)
Wed 4th Apr 2012 10:04
Was it really on last week Andy?..
You capture the need to be in the hills very well..Some great rhyme and those last four lines had me looking for my boots! Nice work sir :)
Comment is about The Great Outdoors (blog)
Thanks guys - it was just an off the cuff little song I admit. I haven't written anything much all year - lost the knack a bit - so it's good to get something out there. I'm surprised it's struck you both as jolly and rollicking - it's supposed to be a bit sad! :)
Comment is about song - nova scotia (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
"He's Off To Nova Scotia In The Morning"! Just the right title for a rollicking (thanks,Freda) full-blown shanty.
"Heave-ho, me hearties,
We'll sing it at Foxglove's parties!"
(Oh - it's "icebergs").
On a technical note...I go along with the comments from Freda. The material can surely adapt to a little tinkering that leaves the enjoyable exuberance intact.
Comment is about song - nova scotia (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
A delightful evocation of summers long gone -
as comfortably familiar as the distant cry of
a cuckoo in the woods...or the shouting from a
farm hand ploughing a haze-warm distant field.
Comment is about The Plum Tree (blog)
Original item by Gareth Mathias
because Cynthia that's where Bjork comes from : ) A response to your question 'where was she from?' The poem references 'Icelandic poems (1+2)in the voice of Bjork'
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
'Hill Speak' the poem in third place for me everytime. I prefer the accessible.
Comment is about Allison McVety wins National Poetry Competition (article)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 22:33
Nay thar knaws lass
from Luton th'airport.
As long as uz stairz clear
'o'that theeur Rossendiddle
eeeee now theeurs a carnty
thats a big load'o'nothin!:(
Comment is about TWO 'AULD 'UNS SAT ON A BENCH (blog)
Original item by jean lucy thompson
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 22:04
%^%^%%^5
thats to remind you
that Roald is rolling round fnurk heaven
at present gawd bless his giant peachy soul.xx
Comment is about "KRUNF!" Says The Fnurk (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hi MC, Thanks for your comment on Compassion.
Scales, ails.
Hazel
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Of course! Now how come I couldn't see that? Lol xx
Comment is about "KRUNF!" Says The Fnurk (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 21:47
ee ba eck jean
thars dunna gudden 'ere m'dear.
It were reet nice,th'endin bit wu'champion.
duz thi think it'll be awreet
if uzduz a tracin of it ont'tisher pairper?
or better'un that,al light
thi gas powered printer up
and mairk wonna them theeur' copies
thar knows.xx
Comment is about TWO 'AULD 'UNS SAT ON A BENCH (blog)
Original item by jean lucy thompson
Thanks very much everyone :)
Comment is about Magic Fields (blog)
Original item by jean lucy thompson
Excellent ballad Ann,
a few quibbles. If you leave out 'the' in the last line it scans better. The line before that has some extra syllables too, that interrupt the rhythm. Most of the stanzas work very well. I am puzzled by 'high's Truro's Cathedral Spire' because the awkwardness with the rhythm is in the three syllables of Cathedral, and is not changed by contracting 'high as' to 'high's'.
They are just quibbles though. This is fun and bouncy, and rollicks along nicely.
Comment is about song - nova scotia (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Hi Stef, congratulations to Evie for her poem, bless her, that's not at all bad for 6! And a chocolate ad, now you're talking my favourite food, haha.
Sounds like your Jakey did really well too. Yes, definitely thank heaven for our kids! xxxx
Comment is about World War II by Hannah (My 9 year old granddaughter is published!) (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 19:59
ps-Our Evie once won second place 1st grade
in the Laguna Beach California(where she used to live but now lives in San Francisco) Coastline newspaper Friday May 25th 2001 with this little ditty aged 6.
Bird Travelling
Bird travelling,bird travelling
it was fun to see you
when I saw your face
I liked it,when I saw you
It was a shame that you died
I wish you would come back to me
how I wish I could see you again
love you,bye.
mmmmm...don't give up your day job Evie-lol!
aww cute though.
another one for the braggon train Lynn-
Our Jakey aged three did a little better and became the Ray Mears lookalike in the July/Aug 2009 edition of Bushcraft and survival skills.
Nothing to do with poetry that is until we think one up for him with his pikky from the the mag that is soooo cute!
But Evie was'nt to be outdone
she went on to star in
the'Thorntons is choclate Heaven'add
Her line was-'you have to be good to get in'-
no Oscar's though I,m afraid-grrrr!
We will have to do a poem for her as well.
Thank heaven-choclate or not
for all kids eh Lynn.xx
Comment is about World War II by Hannah (My 9 year old granddaughter is published!) (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 19:33
Hannah is a lovely name
twas my Grandmothers name.xx
Comment is about World War II by Hannah (My 9 year old granddaughter is published!) (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
<Deleted User> (6315)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 18:20
Really like this cept as Yvonne says you don't need your punctuation so I ignored it and it reads so well..think that last verse is wonderful. :)
Comment is about we run (blog)
Original item by Brutus Paulinus
<Deleted User> (6315)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 18:18
enjoyed this..clever use of your words :)
Comment is about Sell (blog)
Original item by Gareth Mathias
<Deleted User> (6315)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 18:15
An interesting on MC and I just KNOW I am missing the plot here..but it made me go hmmmmmm... :) I really enjoy your rhyming scheme..
Comment is about FREEHOLD OR VACANT (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Winston you have every right to do as you suggest, what is more you have 'my' support in so doing- ;o)
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
If I could only remember...
Like the parody.
Comment is about Advice for Poetry Slammers (blog)
Original item by Mark Niel
I liked the first two verses - felt the pulse of youthful exuberance but the punctuation of the last verse rather flummoxed me and left me deflated.
Comment is about we run (blog)
Original item by Brutus Paulinus
steve mellor
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 17:00
look here bugger-lugs (but I love you)
i'm sure you'll get it
'allowed'
people that live in a controlled environment (a cocoon - favourite word?) have to be allowed to learn.
are all russians/chinese/north koreans allowed to learn? is someone in the foothills of the himalayas allowed to learn that not everyone outside their little part of the world is a complete shit
etc
i may have to come over the hills and then you'll 'learn' something
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Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
steve mellor
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 16:52
Hi Rachel
I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on my 'Superfacial'
It's not really linked to anything. I wrote it about 3 years ago, and was something of a balance to the poem I posted on Sunday - 'Out'
Comment is about Rachel Bond (poet profile)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Where are ya?
Comment is about Mouthin' Off in May. (blog)
steve mellor
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 16:15
Hey'up M.C.
Superfacial
I'm not really asking anyone to be like me (god forbid), nor do I want to be like others, just that there should more of an understanding between people of different cultures, and even upbringings
thanks for the thought though
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thank you Isobel :o)
Ah, but you and your mum have even more reason for pride. Why hasn't she rung the local newspapers yet then? ;o)
Thank you Stefan and Patricia for kind comment :o)
(p.s. I wouldn't like her surname, meself, lol)
Comment is about World War II by Hannah (My 9 year old granddaughter is published!) (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hurrah for the bug basher! I'm with you.
Comment is about inFLUence (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
A welcome chuckle in all seriousness...! Ogden
Nash lives!
Comment is about Suspicions confirmed (blog)
Original item by Christopher Dawson
“To my mind, the life of a lamb is no less precious than that of a human being.”
― Mahatma Gandhi
Comment is about CARRION SPRING (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
This should be hung on the wall above the chair
at the United Nations.
Not sure about "ails" (thinking in context of
"what ails you?"). Isn't this "ailments"?
Comment is about COMPASSION (blog)
I was walking along the river side at Tadcaster when I was faced with this reality.At sixty-eight any death ( even that of a lamb ) brings to home some certain pain and my best thought was to write down what I was feeling and do so within the hour. IG
Comment is about CARRION SPRING (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
This deserves "a nod" to R.K. Apologies are hardly necessary for wit and imagination.
Even though I've never attended a poetry slam,
I enjoyed this.
Comment is about Advice for Poetry Slammers (blog)
Original item by Mark Niel
Thanks folks.
Harry - I wonder about the "advantages" of not
being acquainted with the certainty of death -
or is humanity presumptious and animals are just unable to tell us?
But animals aren't saddled wth making wills and paying for funeral plans, lucky devils!
Comment is about HAWK (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Haha, I'd love a laptop. Maybe then I could get some paragraphs in there instead of the ........'s.
Comment is about Sell (blog)
Original item by Gareth Mathias
great that. dyou wanna buy a laptop? i have some pens and paper going cheap.
Comment is about Sell (blog)
Original item by Gareth Mathias
steve mellor
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 14:55
Hi Kid
Superfacial
I did this about 3 years ago, and only popped it on WOL as a sort of rebuttal to the sentiment in 'Out' i.e. that I hope to learn, rather than having the closed mind of a bigot.
I think the 'allowed' in the last verse was to cover those who live in an environment where they have only limited information of the world that I live in, whether that be in other countries or other religions.
When I lived in S.A., there was virtually no free press; the radio was controlled by the Government, and there was no television service whatsoever, and we thought that we were relatively well informed. At least we had inter-country travel, which gave us a modicum of information
Explanation any good?
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
great poem.
i havent read a book since the implementation of the computer for every household gvnmt scheme. scanning internet poetry is easy. i swear ill read again. once i was so ill and drugged that i had to relearn even the abc of reading. i did that and now its wasted. im glad you wrote that to remind me. and now ill read the instruction manual for how to pick up a book ;)
Comment is about Attention (blog)
Original item by Marnanel Thurman
<Deleted User> (6895)
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 11:15
And so you should brag Lynn
that's what Grandparents are meant to do
about their 'Grandy little bandies'
She should brag about her name too.xx
Comment is about World War II by Hannah (My 9 year old granddaughter is published!) (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Really like this - doesn't always 'flow' very smoothly, but some lovely images in there. Catkins! Not heard people use that word since I was a kid!
Comment is about Weeds (blog)
Original item by Andrew Barnes
steve mellor
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 08:32
Hi Graham
Many thanks for the comment on 'Out'
When I put it on the site, I had already decided that it was more of a paper poem than one to recite. I have no time for bigotry, but the telling is a hard path to follow
Comment is about Graham Robinson (poet profile)
Original item by Graham Robinson
steve mellor
Tue 3rd Apr 2012 08:29
Hi Chris
Ta for the comment on 'Out'
You're dead right, in that I'm attacking bigotry. But I'm old enough and honest enough to admit that there have been times in my life where thoughts have crept through my head that I would rather weren't there, and I believe anyone who says otherwise isn't being totally honest.
I shall continue to battle the demons
Comment is about Chris Co (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (6315)
Wed 4th Apr 2012 10:10
So enjoyed reading this Jean..brought back memories for me.. :)
Comment is about TWO 'AULD 'UNS SAT ON A BENCH (blog)
Original item by jean lucy thompson