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The Great Outdoors

Given the weather today this first poem seems utterly inappropriate. Never mind.

 

Spring.

 

The remnant cold white hush departs  

as another slow unfolding starts 

and a blush of virgin green imbues 

the sallow land with subtle hues.

 

 

Winter Yields.

 

A low, pallid sun scans a barcode of trees

acutely, through frosted and dormant degrees,

and ice appears molten, adorning a field

with crucible furrows the summer concealed.

 

 

Outdoor Pursuits.

 

I left a crowded Sheffield train

and bustled up the quiet lane

toward the stiles and stubborn sheep,

the muscle strain and measured leap.

Where once dry-stone wall builders went

I followed, breathlessly intent and swapped,

with well-shod, fell-bound fellows,

nods and waves and winded hellos.

High on tinder-heathered tops,

on risen bones of grit stone outcrops

cut by chisel wind and rain,

I trod on time’s uncouth terrain;

on aeons nested into peat

and canopies beneath my feet that

once threw shade on tracks and routes

when life was all outdoor pursuits.

Rising thermal drafts ensured

the dream of Icarus’ endured

as cloth-winged men and women leapt

off hills where hawks and falcons swept

on currents lapping looming pikes,

and fell like death in plummet strikes

on panting prey too slow to slip

a raptor’s eye and talon grip.

As shadows muted greens to black

the mountain sloughed me off its back

and I returned to valley roads;

to yellow lines and postal codes

where sodium and parallels and

narrow views and noxious smells

encouraged me to board a train

and travel to the hills again.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

◄ Mouthin' Off in May.

Solitude Gets Lonely ►

Comments

Travis Brow

Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:14

Thanks for the tip Ann.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 8th Apr 2012 11:49

Andy - I'm really enjoying your poems. As to where to comment back to comments made, the poet often writes the comment on the same page as the poem cos other people might like to see what they've said, but you could also cut and paste it to the profile page of the individual person who commented, otherwise they might miss it. Hope that helps!

Travis Brow

Thu 5th Apr 2012 07:04

Thank you John. I do carry a notebook but I often find my poems begin with a single line or phrase, or observation. I rarely use what I hear spoken by others although I do strive to write about things that one might call universal.

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Wed 4th Apr 2012 20:39

Three great poems Andy.

When on the train, do you carry a note pad? I do, I sit and listen to other talking, be it to others on the train or on their mobiles. I can gather some great stories and scenes from the snippets I hear.

Travis Brow

Wed 4th Apr 2012 18:14

Hello Yvonne and Stella. Thank you for your encouraging comments. Outdoor Pursuits has been around in various forms for years but only now do i dare consider it 'finished'. The other two are more recent and are consequently prone to editing.

Stella, was 'what really on last week'? The gig, or this post? The gig was, but the post is new.

Would it be more appropriate for me to reply to you individually via your profiles pages? I still don't know the etiquette. Please advise. Thanks again.

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Yvonne Brunton

Wed 4th Apr 2012 16:55

I love your poems. I go up round Hathersage regularly and it's just as you describe. Great work!

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Wed 4th Apr 2012 10:04

Was it really on last week Andy?..

You capture the need to be in the hills very well..Some great rhyme and those last four lines had me looking for my boots! Nice work sir :)

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