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Rose Casserley

Sat 10th Jun 2017 11:24

thanks Rosine-very much.Catch you later.



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Rose Casserley

Sat 10th Jun 2017 11:21

very useful advice indeed our guardian angel Wendy!
lot's and lot's of love to you dear Lady.




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Rose Casserley

Sat 10th Jun 2017 11:17

such a poetical advisory comment Mr. Ferds! love it!


along with the thanked for liking by 'likers' Kim and LCPTB.




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keith jeffries

Sat 10th Jun 2017 09:55

Kevin & Colin, Thank you for comments and points which have been taken. This is why I became a member of WoL. Prunes are good too. Thanks. Keith

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Kim Whysall-Hammond

Sat 10th Jun 2017 09:39

Yup, I'm now caught imagining too............

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Colin Hill

Sat 10th Jun 2017 09:32

perhaps try writing it without so many 'Welcome to a place where' - the repetition of which is hard going for the reader. Something like this:

Welcome to a place so secret and scarce,
where love dwells and people swear.
A place where allusion is key to misleading love
and people all around hide from the truth.

Welcome to a place where tennis shoes have thrones
and your own shoes carry pillows.
where boys and girls portray men and women,
but the parents don’t know they started the trend.

etc. Hope that helps Sameeha πŸ˜ƒ

Colin

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Colin Hill

Sat 10th Jun 2017 09:18

me too - hot and sultry

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Colin Hill

Sat 10th Jun 2017 09:16

to expand on Kevin's suggestion, maybe dividing this into 3 or 4 verses each beginning with those first two lines. Your poems Keith often take this one block pattern but would perhaps be enhanced by a bit of verse division.

good idea for a poem and no, I don't know - but beans and cabbage tend to help! πŸ˜‰

all the best
Col

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Colin Hill

Sat 10th Jun 2017 09:07

I am imagining

thanks

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Colin Hill

Sat 10th Jun 2017 09:03

very well thought out Rik - the image of the church altar triptych (check spelling) sits well with the three haikus, each with three lines.

I think the whole could be neatened up by shortening those long 'date' lines. Firstly the year is somewhat irrelevant to the reader as in the third you state 'It's a year later' - so personally I would ditch that. Secondly, possibly shorten the month as follows to bring the line length nearer to that of the haikus:

Aug 16 (the voice of sorrow) or
Aug 16 - the voice of sorrow

Church has just ended.
I return home, emptiness.
Summer is ending.

Just a thought. Hope you don't mind me saying.

I don't know why but I have always been fascinated by triptych art so it's interesting to see it used here in a literary way. I messed around with the format a couple of years back myself. Here are some links if you would like to take a look:

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/06/skiptych-by-colsibabes.html

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/06/skiptych-2-by-colsibabes.html

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/06/october-trilogy-by-colsibabes_4.html

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/06/palleteyesed-twixelated-gagged-2-by.html

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/06/three-colours-trilogy-by-colsibabes.html

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/06/blah-bored-bang-by-colsibabes.html

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/07/johnny-by-colsibabes.html

https://colinhillphotopoems.blogspot.co.uk/2015/08/deep-blue-by-colsibabes.html

all the best and thanks for posting,
Colin

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kJ Walker

Sat 10th Jun 2017 08:03

Mums are always right, but how are you to know that if you don't push the boundaries.
This tale reminds me of the time that I sailed down the river Don on a block of polystyrene. It's the daft things that you do that make you who you are.
This poem made an enjoyable read.
Thank you Kevin

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kJ Walker

Sat 10th Jun 2017 07:37

I really did like this one.
If you don't mind a suggestion from a total novice- you repeated the first two lines at the end. It MAY have worked it you also repeated them throughout. Maybe not, just an idea.
Cheers Kevin

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Louise Hogg

Fri 9th Jun 2017 22:20

Refreshing poem with some lovely structural features. I loved it.

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 9th Jun 2017 20:50

Thanks all for your reading and comments.

I tried to keep this as broad as I could but unfortunately it seemed to naturally come to the end it did.

I didn't want to be too specific about grooming as there are many kinds, some far more sinister than others, and some which have been with us since we dragged ourselves from the primordial soup. There is a tendency today to think only of online grooming, when really the history of grooming long predates that technology.

Thanks all,

David.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 9th Jun 2017 20:47

M.C.
Getting all the unpleasant stuff about triple locks and selling homes for care costs into the mix must have sounded like a cunning plan (when it looked like a walkover)...but the `best laid plans...etc`.

I usually give the benefit of the doubt to the hard-pressed police...But that a guy who had already been reported, and then appeared on the television with that black flag making himself so ominously clear was somehow `un-watched` to the extent that he was able to stab people later makes me wonder what use was made of the intelligence. How did it get as far as it did? I think many people are wandering.

It certainly contributed to May`s defeat.

Listening to them all wanting to rescue the `very best` of what we can save of Europe, makes one want to sit down vacantly sucking one`s thumb and murmur ` If we`ve already got all this stuff, then why on earth are we leaving it`?

Parliamentary sovereignty was ceded to `the people` in a
referendum So if - at the end - either side feels it is losing, why not another appeal to the people?

That`s what Farage is thinking about now (but only if he thinks he might lose again)

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Louise Hogg

Fri 9th Jun 2017 20:45

I really like this. A great poem.

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Kim Whysall-Hammond

Fri 9th Jun 2017 20:36

Great idea!

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 9th Jun 2017 19:57

Nicely Rhymed David,
I like that second stanza, it makes you feel actually sorry for them.

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rseed

Fri 9th Jun 2017 17:22

Cheers and I'm glad it resonates with y'all :)

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 9th Jun 2017 17:16

Her range of talent deserved more time to flower and
flourish. The photograph accompanying this news shows
a caring thoughtful person looking out at a world that
was to fade all too soon from her gentle gaze.

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steve pottinger

Fri 9th Jun 2017 17:04

I keep getting drawn back to this poem, Connor. There's some lovely lines in here....

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steve pottinger

Fri 9th Jun 2017 17:00

Tightly constructed, and packing a punch! Nice work, Neil. πŸ˜€

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Sameeha Ali

Fri 9th Jun 2017 16:53

Sameeha Ali

Fri 9th Jun 2017 16:44

Please Give me some feedback, this is something recent

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 9th Jun 2017 16:35

Politics today is never less than interesting! Well done, Harry, for a considered eminently readable view of the
situation. I see that Paul Nuttall has resigned as leader
of Ukip and returned to his duties as an MEP in the
north. As for Farage, I think he mentioned the possibility
of another referendum rather than suggested it when I
watched him being interviewed overnight (I was up through the night to see the drama unfold).

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Wendy

Fri 9th Jun 2017 16:26

Thankyou Rose for your comments still fighting still trying love Wendy .

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Wendy

Fri 9th Jun 2017 16:20

Every word is the truth to be left how girls are being left no one believes that it is happening no one can believe how cloudy these waters are . Wendy

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Candi

Fri 9th Jun 2017 16:11

Thanks both 😊

I noticed the tired mistake when I was editing and just left it. Perhaps that's why. It was painful enough to watch them try.

It feels weird to read this back now after the result.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 9th Jun 2017 16:08

Tommy,
What a magnificently `muxed ip` situation we have all managed to get ourselves into!

Before Corbyn celebrates too much, we should remember that Atlee`s landslide in `45 was followed - after `51 - by three successive Tory victories. (and Atlee had actually won his election...not come second).

The Tory`s manifesto error in revealing their intention to
recover some taxation from the `Never had it so good` pensioners (plus the police cuts set against the terror attacks) had a lot more to do with Labour`s lift in
the polls than any return to `the old true socialist values`.

The problem is that all those voters who were pro or con on the Brexit issue are inextricably mixed up, all over the place in all of the parties....so where do we go on that one now?

I know that Farron`s idea of having a second `brexit` referendum went down like a lead balloon in the election...
But guess who is suggesting the same thing now?...none
other than Nigel Farage!

Given the feelings on that subject and the narrowness of the referendum (and the election vote) we are in for a right hotch potch when Parliament starts again.

What price a second referendum?

You couldn`t invent this kind of stuff...it`s straight from never never land!






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Michaela Sheldon

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:59

well, sometimes its about chicken soup!πŸ˜‹

All very true indeed. Listening skills are such an important trait in relationships.

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Michaela Sheldon

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:57

Love the imagery in this!🌷

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Lancashire County Palatine Tourist Bard

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:53

Very familiar memories of my dad too!

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Lancashire County Palatine Tourist Bard

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:50

I voted Corbyn...and they kept trotting out the mantra "but he's unelectable"....as if repeating it would make it true.

Now thanks to the complicity of the DUP, May can carry on ripping up our Human Rights, selling off the NHS and all our public services.

We need to get the Torags out...and Corbyn in.
General election anyone?

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Lancashire County Palatine Tourist Bard

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:37

Eee...I remember when I wur a lad...eatin' ar butties on Blackpool beach!
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Lancashire County Palatine Tourist Bard

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:28

I wonder how the DUP supporters feel now that they have given May the ability to carry on ripping up our Human Rights...
whilst at the same time she carries on Britain's "special relationship" with the corrupt Saudi regime, which has exported terror to the streets of Britain.

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Raj Ferds

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:25

Nice one John.
I think they will grudgingly bend backwards and be DUPed (UP).

Raj


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Lancashire County Palatine Tourist Bard

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:15

You don't know what you've got til it's gone!πŸ’—

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Lancashire County Palatine Tourist Bard

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:08

Well said Jeff...this fellow Boltonian ran the Great Manchester 10k with thousands of others of all races colours and creeds.
My knees are still complaining, but it was worth it, celebrating our humanity in the face of evil and stupidity.
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Raj Ferds

Fri 9th Jun 2017 12:02

A victory for darkness is mostly temporary my dear Rose.

Do I see moonlight dance across your face ?
Do you feel the constellations enlightening your new awareness of life as it is, a fresh acceptance of the present moment.

Star-struck you’re not.But you know there’s a star shining from within you, no? It’s that sense of brilliance that will dictate what happens next.

The countdown to finality need not be a fatality.
Embrace love.
Raj xxx

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Louise Hogg

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:44

Your personal experience shines through with such power. It moved me to see mental health from a family's perspective rather than the sufferer's perspective; the harsh realisation is every one suffers.
Thank you Patricia for such a moving piece.

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Louise Hogg

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:34

Really beautiful. Well crafted and uses some powerful imagery. X

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Neill Barnard

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:29

Thank you Andres

Appreciate the kind words

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Rose Casserley

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:17

mmmm what shenanigans has Steffeatures been up to then Patricia?

whatever it was,I forgive him having read this beaut.



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Rose Casserley

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:14

sad/beautiful P.W.






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Rose Casserley

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:11

Jemster,do you happen to have the blower numbers of your convenient lovers?

I just happen to have a year or twenty spare 😈


fabufuckinglous!


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Rose Casserley

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:07

cooler than cool W.M.






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Rose Casserley

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:05

ta Mrs Jones's kid!




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Rose Casserley

Fri 9th Jun 2017 09:04

Raj (Teach') my improved way of thinking about the world as I see it,has doubtlessly been enhanced with your help.


old chums P&S and Jems,to you guys and Mr Ferds I give heaps of thanx!



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Jake Vincent Belmont

Fri 9th Jun 2017 06:48

Thank you, Michaela. I really appreciate that. You are very welcome.

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Fri 9th Jun 2017 03:05

Thanks for the likes Colin and Tom, also for the comments Tom and Raj. Glad you appreciate fine wine! πŸ˜ƒ

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