Interesting work, complete with photograph to complete the mental imagery!
Many, many years ago when I was a bus driver, no bus company toilet was complete without the logo
'here I sit broken hearted -missed a trip and only farted' which referred to how a driver could request his bus journey to be covered by another driver if he needed to use the toilet!
-Steve
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Loved the rhythm in this Marksy. I'm sitting in the window seat (facing forward, of course) when I read this.
Comment is about Speeding on through Somewhereshire (blog)
Original item by Marksy
Glad you enjoyed "I'm The Urbane Statesman", Marksy.
Comment is about Marksy (poet profile)
Original item by Marksy
Nice writing.
Gives one pause to think.
I often ponder is my life a dream, or is my dream life.
Enjoyed this
Shirley
Comment is about Waiting for the duster. (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson
I like it Ian - it's fascinating to think that we are all surrounded by particles of other people.
I like the flow you've got going in this non rhyming piece - and I love the catch at the end.
Comment is about dust (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
I enjoyed this very much and agree with Solar, a great poem.
Comment is about Speeding on through Somewhereshire (blog)
Original item by Marksy
Thank you for that xxx When I reach the end of my understanding of numbers I think- that's the key to life itself- that bit I don't understand!
Comment is about The Prime of Life (blog)
Original item by CathyLCrabb
Ah, trains now are so quiet I find there's a lot less of the clackety-clack than before - hence the "silent window frames" line.
Also means you can hear other people's banal conversations too, but that's another rant, another time...
Cheers anyway!
Comment is about Speeding on through Somewhereshire (blog)
Original item by Marksy
Thank you very much SW, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment is about From Beyond a Dream (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
Such people have no respect for the dignity of human life. Very sad individually and for all those involved.
The poem they have published in his honour is seriously good. It makes me want to read more, I guess it will have the same effect upon others.
Not sure if there could be a more fitting tribute.
Comment is about African poet Kofi Awoonor among Kenya massacre victims (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Ta for looking in on 'Some Love' Marksy. Been away for a month in France and thought I'd come back with a notebook full of poems. (I didn't) Actually wrote 'Some Love' during a lull at work!
All the best, Steve
Comment is about Marksy (poet profile)
Original item by Marksy
Beautifully straight to the point!
Comment is about louise (repost) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 22:20
very much enjoyed Larisa.Best wishes.x
Comment is about Don't Give Away Your Loved Ones! (blog)
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 22:13
Loved the poem Frederick.I have no fear of 'real' books disappearing,hence my basement library!x
Comment is about Would They Have Listened, Then? (blog)
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 22:08
enjoyed the poem.Will check out the link later.
Thank you.x
Comment is about Danger of Zealous Fervor (blog)
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 21:55
I couldnt quite get the clackety-clack rhythm,but a great poem nevertheless.x
Comment is about Speeding on through Somewhereshire (blog)
Original item by Marksy
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 21:44
very much enjoyed piece of social history.x
Comment is about A Cold Filthy Metropolis (blog)
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 21:41
fantasy in full and beautiful flow.x
Comment is about From Beyond a Dream (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 21:39
JC - this brings to mind the time - very late -
when I was on a "protection detail" and while
waiting for the return of my client from an
assignation with his lady friend, I found a
local urinal to relieve an insistent call of
nature on the "hurry up" in a north London public urinal. I was somewhat surprised to
find it as full of blokes as a strip club - but without the women. Exit...without checking
the graffiti!
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Gawd, took me back to a few less than pleasant places of my own youth, this one. In a nice way, though!
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
As Dave said, very thought-provoking and moving stuff.
Comment is about dust (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Tremendous rhythm and musicality to this that just keeps you there until the end. Superb stuff.
Comment is about Some Love (blog)
Original item by Steve Higgins
Poland was very different to Syria - it wanted to be rescued from its aggressors - as did most countries that Germany invaded.
In Syria you have a sizeable proportion of the resident population hostile to western intervention and non Muslim led action. In my opinion, any long term solutions there would have to include Arab involvement.
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
I'm rather flattered that my poem is thought so sensual. Cottages hold a special place in my heart. I was fondled when I was about 12 by a bloke in Hucknall Market toilets while he spunked up in the next urinal. It was rather thrilling.
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I phoned David Francis, who placed this ad, a couple of months ago; he said that this event was not running regularly, but in fact quite rarely. I've asked him to put an email contact on here but he hasn't. Also the address is slightly wrong, it's Newton Lane, not street. So if your reading this David, please sort it out.
Review is about Spoken Word & Music on 14 Sep 2013 (event)
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 12:18
What a tragic waste of such a talented individual's life, and of those of all affected by this.
Comment is about African poet Kofi Awoonor among Kenya massacre victims (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I can't listen to the audio right now, but yep, agree that to keep it authentic, the offensive slogans need to be kept in there. And this really IS realistic - as Greg says, you can smell this one!
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Cheers Paul
This actually happened to me - the dream of the unknown poem that I was going to write. And I did dream it twice. It plagued me, so I had to get it out of my head, and then started thinking of the correlation between it and Kubla Khan - hence this... :)
Comment is about Fragment (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Philipos
Tue 24th Sep 2013 10:03
Apparently John Donne wrote loo poetry, so you are really up there with the top men (bottomly speaking of course). As Greg points out, this poem has an ammonia whiff to it. I take it you wrote it during your recent break in Sussex. Nothing bog standard about this etc, etc. But starkly enjoyable anyway.
Thank you for the kind comments on 'Pebble on Bournemouth Beach'.
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
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Tue 24th Sep 2013 09:31
Those who praise,
are great personalities!
Generous hearts,
creative mentalities!!
Those who are grateful
are wise and healthy,
thank you, the playful,
with heart so wealthy!
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Very witty, flows like water
Comment is about I'm The Urbane Statesman (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Many thanks for your comment Jane. Though I am an atheist at heart, I see some of the sage advice in religious text as important in attempting to create a moral society.Though religion is becoming increasingly irrelevent among brits today. I see that the consequences of that being a more immoral society with problems such as greed and corruption, and though I personally don't believe in god and some of the far flung stories included in the bible, I believe that it should be read on a theological level and garnering a moral framework with standards to live by.
Comment is about Religious Dogma (blog)
Hey Starfish, thanks for looking in on 'poem for a friend'
Like Jonnie I'd like to see more in your biography (not thats there's much in mine)but I am nosy ,do I do see a sort of American influence in your work . .?
Steve
Comment is about Starfish (poet profile)
Original item by Starfish
You don't have any photos of your feet, do you?
Comment is about Life's a Blast (blog)
Original item by Starfish
hello Starfish,
Many thanks for your kind comments on "The Masterly Strategy..."
Not my usual genre but I felt rather strongly about the lack of action which seemed to be the public mood.
(I have reverted to type in my latest offering!)
Comment is about Starfish (poet profile)
Original item by Starfish
An excellent piece of work Cynthia and one which reflects my own feelings about poetry so well. The title says it all . .
Comment is about 'Poetry can't exist without rhythm. Don't be academically bullied into dropping rhymes' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
what ho, Izzy,
Thankyou for commenting on "The Masterly Strategy ..."
I agree that consequences are unpredictable and possibly dire. They were when we declared war on Germany for invading Poland. But what would the consequences have been if we had not?
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Hello MC,
Thanks for your thoughts on "The Masterly Strategy..."
I agree the situation is complex, not least because aiding the rebels might bite us on the bum. And it is wise to consider consequences.
There are, though, in my opinion, some actions so vile that the right thing to do is to do the right thing and live with the consequences.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hello Jane,
Thanks for your thoughts on "Hugging Candles".
Yes, I too feel an enormous weight of history (as well as an enormous weight of timber!) when I open and close up each day. The West door of the Abbey doesn't have a lock; it's secured by an enormous wooden beam I have to lift in pace each night. Very medieval!
"Hugging" = trimming them with a knife so they fit the holders.
Comment is about jane wilcock (poet profile)
Original item by jane wilcock
Yes, I did wonder about the racist slogans. But authenticity got the better of me.
(The one about "Nigger's Out" I pinched from Lynne Truss's "Eats, Shoots and Leaves". She tells the story - it's all about misuse of the apostrophe - of a black garage owner in the States who had "Nigger's Out" scrawled on his workshop door. When he saw it he wrote underneath it something to the effect of, "but he'll be back after lunch". Very disarming!)
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Powerful Ian especially "I trace my finger through you, wishing you were here". Much sympathy if it's current.
You might be interested in another poem about dust (thought-provoking stuff)
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=16842
Comment is about dust (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Could have done without the racist slogans, John, but then I suppose you'd argue it wouldn't be authentic. You need every dodgy apostrophe, too. There aren't many poems that you can smell, but this one you can.
Comment is about Cottage Sleaze (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Harry O'Neill
Wed 25th Sep 2013 22:47
Cynthia wise words wisely said.
Your points about poetic creation and presentation could hardly be bettered.
Rhyme has indeed been academically bullied out of todays `serious` poetry and the only way back back for it will be along the lines of your insistence on the primacy of rhythm. (and serious pleasure in the sound of a serious poem). You are spot on that poetry is essentially oral, and that our eyes translate the `music` of it even from the page.
Poems are indeed a `placement of words along a pre-figured pattern of interpretation`. that pre-figuration is a coherence of chosen words which take additional strength from the poet`s choice of placement, and in doing so sometimes say more than even the poet himself realises. The poet`s intention, (choice or exclusion of the words) is what is deliberated -the result is what the poem does with those words.
The only thing I would add to the timely points you make about metaphor and simile is that it should be fairly and universally accessible (and not some private inaccessible private mind - world of an individual)
That our eyes translate music even from the page much needed saying – as did your words about structured poetry, and the available structures. I would have liked more on the relation of structure to the typographical shape of the poem on the page.
Your points about performance are very helpful I wonder – when the whole person is up there before the audience – what part the individual personality plays?
A very enjoyable, informed, and valuable essay
Comment is about 'Poetry can't exist without rhythm. Don't be academically bullied into dropping rhymes' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman