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Stu Buck

Thu 1st Dec 2016 16:02

thanks both!

laura - you need to join the hubris club. we get a badge and everything!

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Laura Taylor

Thu 1st Dec 2016 13:43

Hurrah! And hurray! DOUBLE HURRAH! About bloody time 'n' all ? Beltin' poem this!

Aww, ta for the mention chuck. I never use the word 'hubris' though I did tell you to practise ? Do you mean that YOU went in cold? Tsk. Now you have learned much, grasshopper ?

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Thu 1st Dec 2016 08:28

if only and...

nice one Ray

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palak sharma

Thu 1st Dec 2016 08:00

Very nice..keep updating ur blog ?

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Dara Smith

Thu 1st Dec 2016 02:15

Thank you?

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Jake Vincent Belmont

Thu 1st Dec 2016 01:16

thanks! I really like quite quirkily quilled! ?

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Trevor Alexander

Wed 30th Nov 2016 23:56

Thanks guys. ?

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Trevor Alexander

Wed 30th Nov 2016 23:53

Couldn't be seen out playing with a GIRL in them days! I would've been drummed out of the gang! lol

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shivanshu sharma

Wed 30th Nov 2016 23:02

Great..!! Love to read your sample..really inspiring..plss KEEP posting.. :* ?

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Wed 30th Nov 2016 22:58

quite quirkily quilled!




quickly quitting-
quash,quorn and Quo!


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Wed 30th Nov 2016 22:47

childhood,definitely the best times of our lives,eh Trev?
great poem! Can you play out late tonight? see you under the street lamp,and I'll bring my skipping rope.


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Rose ?

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Joe Williams

Wed 30th Nov 2016 21:59

Thanks guys. I don't make any secret about the fact that I personally was, and continue to be, a committed Remain voter, but I tried not to make the poem too heavily or obviously about that position, and more about people and friendship, the international community, and of course peace, things that I hope will continue in a positive fashion when (if?) Brexit is eventually completed.

It's therefore pleasing to me that MC Newberry appreciates the sentiment of the poem even though it sounds like we're not in agreement about the politics behind it.

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Martin Elder

Wed 30th Nov 2016 21:18

I love this whole sense of you not wanting to come out through describing birth as an eviction and that final line
Blossom falls. Fabulous lines Stu

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 30th Nov 2016 21:17

Thanks everyone for your comments!

circumstances are compelling me to restrict my own comments at the moment...But I`m grateful.

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Harry O'Neill

Wed 30th Nov 2016 21:10

Joe,
I like the way this is open eyed combining the past and the present in our relations with our neighbors in Europe.

It is a very `grown up` example of what our relations with those on our very doorstep should be.

In so far as immigration was a factor in the recent Brexit thing, it should be noted that - -in a vote that was a record turn out on both sides - nearly half of us agreed with you.

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raypool

Wed 30th Nov 2016 19:28

Nicely constructed Harry , like a "whole" in one. A joy to read and the flow of it is right for the sensation of brushing hair, I reckon.

Ray

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raypool

Wed 30th Nov 2016 19:24

Thanks for your wise and counselling words Colin and Stu.
When one puts poems on one hopes for the eye of the astute and respected, or indeed anyone that might find a poem appealing.
Colin , I hold you part responsible for the urge to do the follow up and as you can see there is no actual demise, although I feel the threat is part of the lure of such material. He seems to be sleepwalking to no future. I don't want a third part that descends into comedy, though who knows?

Stu, well spotted, just a brush stroke to signify two powerful strands, sometimes horror can be an object imbued with thoughts, and you sir have alighted like a raven on these. Cheers. Congrats for POTW)

Maybe the third should be: Danvers makes a will!

Ray

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Emer Ni Chorra

Wed 30th Nov 2016 19:10

Wonderful poem Stu and well deserved poem of the week. Keep up the great work, I enjoy reading your pieces. ?

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Dorreh

Wed 30th Nov 2016 18:11

This is so beautiful! ?

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Stu Buck

Wed 30th Nov 2016 16:39

quite excellent, i shall go and read part one at once. loads of great lines here but for some reason i am particularly drawn to;

with thin anaemic liquid's glow

a screen behind his head.

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Stu Buck

Wed 30th Nov 2016 15:14

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Steven Waling

Wed 30th Nov 2016 15:08

He won't like it. He'll probably complain about the cold and the kids running about making a racket between the monuments. And as for all them foreigners wandering about clicking their cameras, he won't like it....

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elPintor

Wed 30th Nov 2016 12:40

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karen izod

Wed 30th Nov 2016 07:02

HI Ray

I feel so sad about this - my father went there, well for a couple of years before he went to Twickenham Tec - and I formed deep friendships there, some of which have lasted me all these years. It is a beautiful building, living in the actual and cultural memory of thousands - though not always with such fondness.

I am presuming the time for opposition and protest has gone - would you know that?

Your poem, by the way, brought back a lot of memories - I'm prompted to try and write something too, perhaps we could even construct a joint homage - I do a line, you do a line and so on....

anyway thanks for keeping me posted and if you do know of any political response, then happy to join in with that.

by the way - did you marry and Ashford girl?

Karen x

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Travis Brow

Wed 30th Nov 2016 06:59

This is brilliant Stu; forgive the pseudo bollocks, but there's a psychic weight to it that's palpable. My only issue is the last two lines; either more is required to round it out, or it could lose the last line. Quality writing nonetheless.

Travis.

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Jake Vincent Belmont

Wed 30th Nov 2016 02:34

thanks for reading

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elPintor

Wed 30th Nov 2016 00:21

The astral plane could be a scary place to get stranded, I would say. Reality can be strange enough without introducing such elements of boundlessness. Though, if escape is desired and can only be achieved with the mind, then I suppose its only a question of how far you'd like to go.

Personally, I like the idea behind this (I keep thinking, "a man without a country"), though I would like to better its expression. No doubt I'm not the only writer here who posts most things with a minimum of effort. But, I'll tell you, I realize that I'm unlikely to revisit most things later with as much enthusiasm as at the first sitting.

Good to hear from you, Ray. And thanks, David.

elP

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raypool

Tue 29th Nov 2016 23:04

Hi Karen

Sadly my brother who lives in Ashford informs me that the beautiful and life changing grammar school with all its ghosts of cloaks and daggers and polish and invigorating showers and bike sheds and cultural nuggets is to be razed to the ground on the basis that is now structurally unsafe. This is basically a matter of the tenant college who ran it doing nothing to maintain the building and with no help from Spelthorne Council who have a reputation for historical blindeye, and i'm sure can't wait to sell to a developer for house building, no doubt together with the immense field to the rear. Can you beat that?

Ray x

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Tue 29th Nov 2016 22:34

good'un H! reminds me of Betjamins 'Myfanwy' somewhat



Rose ?

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Tue 29th Nov 2016 22:22

This is an excellent follow up Ray - but did Danvers take the sedative? I eagerly await part 3. There is a good sense of light and dark running throughout this whole scene, very atmospheric - The sun seeped in to light the scene / a dawn and sunset tragically combined - great lines.

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 29th Nov 2016 20:32

Not sure if this is a repost.

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 29th Nov 2016 20:26

Nice to see you blogging again Ged.

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raypool

Tue 29th Nov 2016 14:43

It is quite rare to find unbroken links to the Conquest apparently in genealogical terms , families sometimes dying out altogether , and very often to continue the landed families there was an urgent desire to pass on the name preferably with marriage to those with good bloodlines in order to continue the property ownership. That's why the aristocracy still instinctively holds together and maintains its power base. That's my opinion anyway. Apparently my surname Pool has a reputation for attracting the butler class. So that's me up the swanee!

Ray

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Julian (Admin)

Tue 29th Nov 2016 13:06

The whole thing: the context is different, and they were particularly good because what they presented was the culmination of a huge amount of research and, in Tyehimba's case, some very clever ideas and a lot of skill. I suppose it is the equivalent to anyone who has something important to say, who is qualified - by background or experience - to say it, who has the capacity to write well, and the skill to make it work orally.
In fact, all Tyehimba did was to speak about his work on the book, and then read that letter. It was enough, although as I say above, the book cannot really be divorced from the reading. And, of course, the whole thing was read against the background of a very special series of paintings and in a particularly significant political context: Mein Trumpf.

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raypool

Tue 29th Nov 2016 12:20

Thanks Tom, you're a star !

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raypool

Tue 29th Nov 2016 12:04

The title gives whole essence to the poem and becomes plausible elP. Elements of this wandering searching spirit can invade us all but it has lots going for it - I was thinking about someone died and "trapped" on the astral plane - something I can conceive of.

Ray

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Tom Doolan

Tue 29th Nov 2016 11:04

I say - Good show Ray ?

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raypool

Tue 29th Nov 2016 11:03

Thanks elP. That's an interesting take, and I suppose one may pick up on certain aspects of a portrayal , and draw from it. It's worth adding to the mix that hinting at Bruce Forsyth there is the long life behind and the accolades. Nevertheless a sadness prevails i'm sure for the reasons you give. Mind you with a wife like that, what a way to go!

Cheers Colin for the full bodied response. I'm glad I managed to pull the strands together - I do enjoy this sort of analytical poetry. The VHS thing is a bit sad I feel - maybe he has a home cinema, but as you say it paints a picture. Again , it's the mechanics !! I love the Hove quote. Hove 1972 was where I took advantage of a married lady and that blowsy smug atmosphere fitted it perfectly. (confession time). I do know wigs have their own feel, cause I worked for a cross dressing performer once..... (i'll get my coat). Were those crates the old wooden ones or plastic ? please advise.

Ray

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m.harper(TKY)

Tue 29th Nov 2016 10:38

A unique, complex, deep, poet, song writer... love being different, but appreciated like ART

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Jimmy Andrex

Tue 29th Nov 2016 09:29

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Jimmy Andrex

Tue 29th Nov 2016 09:29

I really liked this. A marvellous image, really compact. If you're looking for crit, I have one small one, but I'd really rather say how much I liked this.

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John Coopey

Mon 28th Nov 2016 22:32

I'll try to find it, Harry.

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Luke Bloomfield

Mon 28th Nov 2016 21:28

"the muscle in my soul rattles" - the entire piece is vocal and excellent, but, that line repeats its self when I read it.

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Jimmy Andrex

Mon 28th Nov 2016 20:46

Thanks all of you for your comments. I've been writing lots of bleak stuff lately so I was trying to be less gloomy ha ha! I've also been tinkering with this a lot, so I'm updating it now.

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Dominic James

Mon 28th Nov 2016 20:40

Well done Stu, those first two lines open the book for me, a beautiful content settling in to thought. Where else is that easy, complete style... shall I compare thee to a summer's day? no, of course not. Keep them coming.
Dom.

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John F Keane

Mon 28th Nov 2016 20:09

Norman Conquest from Hastings? That's crazy!

Also, isn't 'Hill' an Anglo-Saxon 'place' name (such as Waters, Rivers, Field or Valley)? Norman names usually have a strong French flavour - like Villiers, Lacey, Venables, Montgomery or Beaumont (unless you are referring to your maternal ancestry, of course).

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 28th Nov 2016 19:45

John,
Your poem expresses very well the rictus of fear that came over everybody at that very dangerous time.

(Those first three lines Jolt us into attention.)

I found out that the poet was Liverpool`s Matt Simpson...
but I cant find the poem.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 28th Nov 2016 17:38

Worthy open-hearted sentiments.
But such things also include a ski-holiday to Austria
when I had a rude reminder from a local boor in a bar
that memories are not short as far as some over there
are concerned, plus some earlier jibes at unhappy
Brits when Harold Wilson's £50 travel allowance limit was in force & we were mocked in France as the poor neighbours; until North Sea oil kicked in - and then it
was a different matter. With a sister and nephew resident across the Channel, I am perfectly happy
to consider the nations of Europe as good neighbours but have no wish to dance to their tunes
as orchestrated and directed by the cunningly contrived arrogantly ambitious anti-nation state EU.

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