Beautifully written. Loved every bit of it.
Comment is about The Door (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Great set of vocabulary, imagery and depth of emotions.
Thank you.
Comment is about The Agony of Separation (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Told with both imagination and an honest assessment of how it must be. Thanks for this fine poem, Keith.
Comment is about The Agony of Separation (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Your poems brings so much serenity and good vibes to me Helena. This speaks about balance of sorrows and happiness of life, and how every morning light brings in new hope to begin with.
Thank you.
Comment is about Morning Adulation (blog)
Original item by Hélène
I don’t know why but this piece reminded me of a track on YouTube by Massive Attack ‘ the spoils’ featuring Hope Sandoval. Give it a couple of listens.
Comment is about I thank you for not being good enough (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
Beautiful, tender, touching. Brought tears to my eyes. Thank you!
Comment is about My brother (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Brilliant, Clare. Says so much in a direct, no nonsense way, as you do. Bullseye! Great!
Comment is about Self Portrait. (blog)
Original item by Clare
A poem of invitation and one gratefully received.
Thank you for this
Keith
Comment is about The Door (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Thanks Adam.
There's a spot on one of our favourite walks we call "Robin City"...often fearless little birds.
Comment is about Dirt Path (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
Thanks for that interesting piece Isabel.
Were you aware of the history of Guano "mining"?
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guano
Comment is about Beauty in Bass Rock (blog)
Original item by Isabel Hope
This touched my heart, as Keith has mentioned, it will touch many others.
Thank you for this.
Comment is about My brother (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
A belated eulogy for a brother loved and missed but with a promise that all will be well. This touches my heart as it will many others. Wreathed in sadness and tenderly composed.
Thank you John.
Keith
Comment is about My brother (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
To the point with no holes barred. Excellent. Well done.
Thanks
Keith
Comment is about Self Portrait. (blog)
Original item by Clare
It's fine to speak ill of the dead. We must live with them. Must we not? Ar scáth a chéile a mhaireann na daoine.
Comment is about Through a Child’s Eyes. (blog)
Original item by Clare
You are only ever responsible for your own words & actions. Is it a reprieve or a respite. Neither, I'd say, just another day.
Comment is about Mirror to my Soul. (blog)
Original item by Clare
Raw and tender in equal measure. Bullies are scum in any language. The title is a tour de force. So brilliant Clare.
Comment is about Tenter hooks and Telling Looks. (blog)
Original item by Clare
So many levels of complicity here. Is it Dolly or yourself you fear?
The poem made me think.
Comment is about Dolly Told Me. (blog)
Original item by Clare
Bravo! Fecking brillant! And so honest...takes my breath away. Not a word wasted.
Comment is about Self Portrait. (blog)
Original item by Clare
Thank you so very much Leon. He was my friend.
Comment is about Sketches in a minor key (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Thank you MC., John B., Stephen G and W3sko for commenting on this poem. Also for Clare and Manish who sent likes. The victim in the poem was yours truly in 1984. The consequences of this dismissal made me quite ill for some time. A cruel act after years of loyal service.
Thank you all,
Keith
Comment is about A Gay Dismissal (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
A well judged view of your father, really heartfelt. Love the phrase “as you persevere through the hardest seasons of your life”
Comment is about Dad. (blog)
Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth
Grace Meadows
Fri 28th Apr 2023 20:59
I totally agree with the two previous comments Helene.
Comment is about Weaving the Threads (blog)
Original item by Hélène
“Hot Spur” indeed, MC. But for how much longer?
Comment is about WE'RE ON THE UP ! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
"Comfort zones" could be an alternative title for this theme.
Or maybe "Fitting in"? Always worth bringing to attention.
Comment is about A Gay Dismissal (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Indeed, we should, each in our own way and within our own
ability, make a contribution towards freedom. Evil and embryo-
tyranny emerges with every generation - a dismal fact of
human existence - and we should never ignore it. I note a book
that lists those marked for "attention" by Hitler had he
prevailed here in the UK. And his kind exist today in varying
degrees and it is essential that we understand that reality and
combat it at every turn.
Comment is about The Voices of Freedom (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
This took me back to my errands as a boy of about the same age
at that time in a ration-book English village with one shop, a
garage and a church. Thank you for this gentle evocative
reminder of a time long gone.
Comment is about Le Petit Parisien, 1952 (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Thanks for the info. JC. It all seems a long way from "Roy of the Rovers"! 😃 Indeed, the only contemporary comparison might
be with Harry Kane. an almost Shakespearean hero for England.
Perhaps more so, if you think of him as "Harry Hot Spur"!!
Comment is about WE'RE ON THE UP ! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Home as a state of mind is an interesting concept Jordyn. Sometimes the journey is more important than the destination.
Comment is about Vagabond. (blog)
Original item by Jordyn Elizabeth
A poem well present as a call for inclusivity.
Thank you,
Keith
Comment is about Weaving the Threads (blog)
Original item by Hélène
<Deleted User> (35565)
Fri 28th Apr 2023 15:35
<Deleted User> (35565)
Fri 28th Apr 2023 15:32
Nothing less than fabulous John! A great package.
LS
Comment is about Sketches in a minor key (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
<Deleted User> (35565)
Fri 28th Apr 2023 15:29
Hi Adam-clever reference to the Dale Trumbore poem-
' Where go the boats ' ( love it and yours too )
cheers A.W.
LS
Comment is about Thoughts Drifting from A Cove (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
A lovely poem Hélèna. This poem has a message that needs to be widespread. Especially, the first four powerful lines.
Thank you for this.
Comment is about Weaving the Threads (blog)
Original item by Hélène
Harry,
Welcome to Write our Loud. The Site is full of interest, with good poets and equally good poems. I look forward to seeing some of your work in the future.
Keith
Comment is about Harry Lopez (poet profile)
Original item by Harry Lopez
Thanks Ed.
I agree with Manish- a cracking last line.
I've told my children, who were concerned about what they perceived as their impotence - concerned as they are with keeping a roof over their heads - that as long as they do whatever they are able, their consciences are clear.
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
Keith/Manish,
Thanks for comments , very much appreciated, I know it’s a subject on which much has been written, and I feel kind of helpless to do anything , but hopefully a few lines will somehow help us all along the way
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
I am very grateful for your interesting comments, Keith and John.
This was based on an incident that I observed on my way to Bangkok Airport in a taxi and it occured to me that no matter how much we try to understand the country we visit (history, customs etc), there is bound to be a huge gulf between us on so many levels.
And thanks to Steve, Jed, RG, Nigel, Leon and Manish for the likes.
Comment is about Leaving Bangkok (blog)
Original item by Stephen Gospage
Ed,
This poem took the air from my lungs as I was held in suspense as the poem unfolded. You have summed up my feelings in their entirety. On those occasions when I vent my feelings about the world and all that ails us, I know from this poem that I am not alone. A tirade which should not be spoken but shouted from the hilltops.
Thank you for this.
Keith
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
Powerfully written Ed, every single line is evocative! It lures in any reader from the very beginning and ends with an uplifting message of acting towards a good change now, for a better and greener tomorrow!
The last line is concisely said - "For one Green Man is stronger than all".
Thank you.
Comment is about Hate Billion (blog)
Original item by Edbreathe
Thank you Keith (best keep your 'findings' in your mind, eh? 😄)
Manish, much appreciated. Stephen, probably a good idea!
& Jed, you're probably right!
And thanks for the like Leon! 🌈
Comment is about Sinister Psychologist... (blog)
Original item by Stephen W Atkinson
<Deleted User> (35565)
Thu 27th Apr 2023 21:56
You always make the readers work for their money Tommy but that suits me fine because I love having a choice of angles to come from-keeps me out of mischief!
LS
Comment is about The Madness of the Sheltered Sun (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thank you Layla, Manish and Grace for
your likings 🙂
Comment is about The Madness of the Sheltered Sun (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thu 27th Apr 2023 19:07
Here is GPT4's interpretation:
This poem appears to be an exploration of the interplay between life, death, and the human psyche. It employs vivid imagery and evocative language to create an unsettling atmosphere, inviting the reader to delve into the chaotic and often dark realm of the mind.
Structure: The poem is divided into six stanzas, each containing three lines. This triadic structure could symbolize the balance and tension between life, death, and the human experience. The poem does not follow a specific rhyme scheme or meter, which contributes to the sense of instability and chaos.
1st Stanza:
"Holes in the net between,
My mind gone between the two,
Not trying to be heard be seen."
The opening stanza introduces the concept of "holes in the net," which could represent the gaps in our understanding or the ways in which we may fail to fully grasp the complexity of life and death. The speaker's mind is caught "between the two," suggesting a struggle to navigate the space between these opposing forces. The last line implies a desire for anonymity or invisibility, possibly indicating feelings of powerlessness or insignificance.
2nd Stanza:
"I care for the trumpet siren,
A bloody wind of mind not dying,
The vivacious ashes in piles crying."
The second stanza introduces a trumpet siren, possibly symbolizing a call to action or a harbinger of change. The "bloody wind of mind not dying" may represent the resilience and persistence of human consciousness, even in the face of adversity. The "vivacious ashes" evoke the idea of life emerging from destruction or decay, reinforcing the theme of rebirth and transformation.
3rd Stanza:
"Dead bed worms in thighs,
The agony of a bed sick child,
The fallen grace of Deathly hallow."
The imagery in the third stanza is unsettling, as it juxtaposes "dead bed worms" with "the agony of a bed sick child," conveying the notion of decay and suffering. The "fallen grace of Deathly hallow" alludes to a loss of innocence or purity, further emphasizing the darkness and despair that pervades the poem.
4th Stanza:
"Vernacular and sentence past,
He free in me the pastor garden,
Buried deep silent pouring."
The fourth stanza hints at the transformative power of language, with "vernacular and sentence past" perhaps referring to the capacity of words to shape and influence our experiences. The "pastor garden" may symbolize a place of sanctuary or spiritual nourishment, while the phrase "buried deep silent pouring" suggests hidden emotions or secrets that may be gradually revealed.
5th Stanza:
"The mind is but the sweet embrace,
The second before death and grace,
Vicious toddler drowning miles."
In the fifth stanza, the mind is described as a "sweet embrace" that exists just before the boundary between life and death. This could be interpreted as an acknowledgment of the mind's capacity for beauty and solace, even in the darkest of times. The image of a "vicious toddler drowning miles" is jarring and disconcerting, highlighting the brutal and unpredictable nature of existence.
6th Stanza:
"And blind to the sea."
The poem concludes with a reference to blindness and the sea, which could represent the vastness of the unknown or the infinite possibilities that lie beyond our comprehension. This final line underscores the limitations of human perception and understanding, leaving the reader to contemplate the mysteries of life, death, and the human experience.
Overall, this poem offers a haunting and evocative exploration of the complexities of the human psyche, as well as the interplay between life and death. Its vivid imagery and striking language create a powerful and thought-provoking experience for the reader, encouraging a deeper examination of the mysteries and challenges that define our existence. The poem's unconventional structure and lack of a clear narrative contribute to the sense of chaos and unpredictability, reflecting the complexities of the human condition. Ultimately, the poem invites the reader to confront the darkness within themselves and the world around them, while also acknowledging the potential for beauty, resilience, and transformation.
Comment is about Good Mourning (blog)
Original item by Alita Moore
Very, very interesting piece of work Mike! Loved how science and the scientist made a mathematical and poetic remark of the empty spaces being filled by emotions for the ones around us. An exquisite story and perspective.
Thank you.
Comment is about Theories from the Micro-Verse (thank you Ann Napolitano) (blog)
Original item by Mike McPeek
Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh
Sat 29th Apr 2023 20:54
Telboy - yes.
Daffodils and trees and................oh yes I forgot, whiskers on kittens😊
Comment is about ST GEORGE'S DAY 2023 (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry