Tommy, clearly and well said. Thanks. Keith
Comment is about What's in store (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 8th Nov 2017 20:47
Shrines are made so easily but not always.
Very moving.
Hannah
Comment is about No Flowers on the Bridge (blog)
Original item by Genevieve
<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 8th Nov 2017 20:45
<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 8th Nov 2017 20:43
Very powerful and true.
Hannah
Comment is about What's in store (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thanks Keith, glad you like it .
Suki, I was aiming at a sort of Betjeman touch; I'm glad you saw humour throughout - my intention. It's always nice to have your lines repeated in a comment; like someone holding a mirror up!
That's interesting David. Plenty of simple workers must have died around here - according to historical records vagabonds could be incarcerated being unacceptable to society. Unfortunately these included fortune tellers "street performers" and musicians. No chance of me ending up there obviously. I love your assessment of the kids!
Many thanks all.... Ray
Comment is about ST.ANDREW'S PARISH CHURCH (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Highly effective Keith. A lament in one sense and a celebration in another, co-existent. I live close to these thoughts, as my wife has rheumatoid arthritis and recognize the truth here.
Ray
Comment is about Ageing (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Love this Stu. It has something of a luminescence all of it's own. I am put in mind of the film Avatar for some reason for which I ma not really sure. But none the less it is beautiful
Comment is about something glows inside all of us (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I did think twice about posting this, MC. There won't be a man or woman, gay or straight, who hasn't said or done something inappropriate. Which of us should cast the first stone, I say.
Comment is about IT STARTED WITH A KISS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Play-out to a career that has careered out of sight.
A lament for the lamentable - timely: with the suicide of
that Welsh politician especially in mind.
Comment is about IT STARTED WITH A KISS (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Hello Lan!
I love the way you structure this poem, it physically reaches out as if in longing, and makes the reader lean in closer to the poem.
I, too, enjoy the illiteration in the last line, I love to play with repeating beginning sounds myself. Overall, great poem! Thank you for sharing!
Tia
Comment is about Exquisite Vision (blog)
Original item by Lan
Right on track! I think a certain JB - lover of railways -
would have nodded his appreciation.
Poetry tends to comment on the process of "in passing"
and these lines are entirely suited to that theme.
By the way, I am tempted to believe that a life in engineering would encourage a sense of rhythm - since no successful project of that sort could
be obtained using haphazard irregular beats.
Comment is about 'Early Train' by Trevor Alexander is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I wholeheartedly concur with this Cynthia and find it incredulous that still today that there are men that look at women and treat them in such a way. As to the woman you mention alas amongst allsorts of beliefs there would appear to be such lack of understanding regardless of race faith and gender.
As Laura says it should not still need to be said but sadly it is.
Well done
Comment is about Worthless Women (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
How true it is! Great poem.
Jennifer Malden
Comment is about Ageing (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thanks Colin Hill
Yes it may need to know the context to understand and appreciate a poem,special having a strange voice.
Comment is about What a lesson? (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
I am so impressed with your scope, your imagination and your writing ability to express such strong ideas so expertly, in the vernacular of common imagery. Your titles are masterful, punching the reader's mind to expand.
But it all starts with 'thinking', doesn't it? Analysing. Balancing. Bringing together seemingly disparate ideas. Associating. Everything is interesting. Nothing is irrelevant.
You are well-bitten by the 'poetry bug'.
Comment is about Split Pea Soup (blog)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
Great format, like an arrowhead shot on target. Brief and sizzling, and honest. And hard. All in 15 short lines. The title is superb in its 'black humour'. IMHO, you have real talent.
Comment is about Pinup Girl (blog)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
I'm laughing - LAUGHING! An iron fist in a velvet glove! With well-constructed reasoning. And a bottom line. Well done, Tia.
Comment is about "I" (blog)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
I KNEW you were 'cut from the same cloth!' Another Libran! With a great balance of 'hard-head' and 'soft-heart'. And a drive for creativity.
The photo so reminds me of sitting on the shoreline of Bermuda, just looking out to sea, and wave watching, marvelling at the 'connective energy' of our planet. I found such moments both peaceful and stimulating at the same time, awe-inspiring.
Comment is about Tia Lattanzio (poet profile)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
I want to read your 'Sample' with enough time to actually 'see' it. But, once again, not today. The 'Biography' is clever, and interesting.
Welcome to WOL.
Comment is about 220August (poet profile)
Original item by 220August
I gather so, Hannah. He was my son-in-law's mate. I merely wrote the poem for him. Thanks for your thoughts.
Comment is about HE WAS A FRIEND OF MINE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 8th Nov 2017 08:46
thank you for posting this poem and link Alem. It just goes to show what can be achieved despite debilitating illness and disability. And with the right tools too. I run a workshop from my home which is part of a charity which sends refurbished hand tools and sewing machines to training projects in Africa. These projects often work with young people with disabilities or who are HIV+ or have been orphaned or widowed. The training and tools they are given help them to become self-reliant, lifting them out of poverty and usually as a consequence enabling their children to continue their education beyond primary school level. Our small group of volunteers have recently completed four large tool kits of carpentry, building and bicycle repair tools which were passed on to our head office yesterday all ready for shipment. Unfortunately the charity doesn't work in Ethiopia but you can read about their projects on the following link and the group I run here in Wales. All the best, Colin.
https://www.tfsr.org/
https://www.facebook.com/Tools-For-Self-Reliance-Llanelli-Carmarthen-113734792073268/
Comment is about Psychological dome (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 8th Nov 2017 08:18
I always enjoy reading your poetry Alem - you are a much appreciated voice from another continent from where we often hear so little and understand even less. Thanks for posting. Colin.
Comment is about What a lesson? (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Wed 8th Nov 2017 06:51
A wonderful poem Sidra,well written and conveying lots of feeling.
All the best des
Comment is about The Subjects Don't Change, The Effects Do! (blog)
Original item by Sidra Shahid
Wow Ray,
How you must have suffered!
To be fair, this corporate gob-speak makes me laugh; I quite enjoy reading all that guff. Being a "creative" it all helps with my blue-sky poetry evolvement - and, moving forward, I am always open to any key learnings such "opportunites" provide!
Suki
Comment is about A Notice To All Interested Stakeholders Of This Blog (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
Hi there Ray,
Wonderful humour!
where ghosts and guides of old confessors
share the soil with dead professors
Last verse too:
in accusation of earthly souls
who regularly fall from celestial grace
though occupying this holy place.
Pithy and witty..
Suki
Comment is about ST.ANDREW'S PARISH CHURCH (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thank you very much for the comment Trevor.
Comment is about That kind of a day (blog)
Original item by Wardah
Now I think about it, I believe you're right. Perhaps it's just that there is a kind of ease and flow in an exercise that is essentially open to a roaming mind.
As I recall, all I did in writing it was conjure up this arrogant but insightful character and see where his ego lead me. His voice then took over from my own, and the rhymes seemed to appear from this conversational style.
Cheers,
Chris
Comment is about Tone Poem (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Ray, I just love this. Thanks. Keith
Comment is about ST.ANDREW'S PARISH CHURCH (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Alexandra Rockwell Lorenz
Tue 7th Nov 2017 22:38
Hey Tia,
I'm a college student (grad student now) in the States too!
Welcome ?
Comment is about Tia Lattanzio (poet profile)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
Hi Cynthia!
I also wrote a poem about the moon, years ago when I was a young child- my first poem in fact.
I love this, the flow of it and the subtle humour of it. It mad me think deeply and laugh at the way human minds work.
Thank you for a wonderful poem!
A fellow Libra,
Tia Lattanzio
Comment is about The Moon is a Thing (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Martin Elder,
Thank you so much! Your comments mean a lot to me!
Comment is about Pinup Girl (blog)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
Guitars particularly have been the embodiment of emotion for so long that they should come from a womb rather than the workshop. A lovely inspiring piece of writing 220August
Ray
Comment is about Missing you from me (blog)
Original item by 220August
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 7th Nov 2017 21:08
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 7th Nov 2017 21:05
Robin, my favourite bird.
Loved this.
Hannah
Comment is about Feeling Blessed (blog)
Original item by Mike Bartram
Congratulations on your poem of the week Trevor, and also on amply demonstrating that verse that is direct and easy to understand will always garner praise. I wish I could leave my cynicism behind when I muster a poem, but regrettably I find it impossible. So, well done!
Ray
Comment is about 'Early Train' by Trevor Alexander is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 7th Nov 2017 20:32
The terror in the dark. Brilliant.
Hannah
Comment is about A Criminal Mind (blog)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 7th Nov 2017 20:29
He sounds like a lovable character.
Hannah
Comment is about HE WAS A FRIEND OF MINE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks guys. ?
Comment is about 'Early Train' by Trevor Alexander is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Tue 7th Nov 2017 18:31
Hi Tony. I do like the mixture of paranoia and menace which sits so well with the neat borders. Your cat is a familiar, I think. Excellent poem.
Comment is about 'CCTV' by Tony Hill is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Lovely, I can relate to this - really well put.
Comment is about A Haunting Within (blog)
Original item by Toriana Williams
Trevor,
(Comment from N.H.S - land)
Nice rhymed poem with a very, very good choice of the right
words.
Comment is about 'Early Train' by Trevor Alexander is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Nice one Tia. I love the way this one bounces a long to its own beat
Fab
Comment is about Pinup Girl (blog)
Original item by Tia Lattanzio
As has already been mentioned we writers of poetry do seem to grab a good deal of inspiration from people watching, which I know is certainly true of me . The weird the wonderful, the beautiful and those who simply melt into the wallpaper.
congratulations on POTW
Martin
Comment is about 'Early Train' by Trevor Alexander is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
JC - we appear to be suffering a delayed action version of
human responses: as if waiting for an appropriate time to
make complaint. Why now? The reasons are open to conjecture but
the damage, especially to those in public life, is timeless.
Comment is about JULIA HARTLEY-BREWER (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
The lines leave us saddened for the loss experienced by
both and the infliction of hurtful honesty at a time
when ease of mind was deserved by both.
Comment is about 'You think you know them, these creatures robed in your parents' skins' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
You say you think it's funny, but I suspect that isn't really the case. In your place I think I would be pretty damned annoyed! I hope I'm not like these men you portray.
Not to trivialise it, but I couldn't view this poem without making a comment. I think it's a well written, but sad indictment on the male species.
Comment is about Objectify Me (blog)
Original item by mikaylamez
A timely reminder that sometimes we don't have to 'do', just 'be'. Nicely written.
Comment is about That kind of a day (blog)
Original item by Wardah
keith jeffries
Wed 8th Nov 2017 20:57
Rich,
words that are true with hope firmly in place. I like this poem because it ends with our only way out of a brutalised world. Thank you for this. Keith
Comment is about About our world (blog)
Original item by Rich