Youve got a good grasp of language... you should try rhyme a bit more...

Comment is about David Agnew (poet profile)

Original item by David Agnew

I love your poetry, but may I suggest varying the rhyming word ending?

Comment is about Dr T. Ashok Chakravarthy, Litt.D (poet profile)

Original item by Dr T. Ashok Chakravarthy, Litt.D

I have just lkearned his bar went bust, and he is sueing his business partner. Im hoping all works out for Vince Kearney.

Comment is about The Turn of Luck - An Irish Good Luck Story (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Thanks for coming it was brilliant to see you and the contributions from the Wolers were fantastic as ever.

Comment is about Earth to Earth (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

thanks for you comment! keep your poems coming Zuzanna!

take care

Comment is about Do you mind if I don't watch you die? (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

All the good photographs are by Pete Crompton! The rest by me.

Comment is about Len Rosso at Wirral Words, The Scouse House, Birkenhead April 2008 (photo)

Brilliant review Dave.
I nearly made it to this show, just finished work too late.

Lugosi, oh god, I melt then turn into jelly and an emotional wreck the second she speaks.

hypnotic and seductive
also something masterful, I think its the submissive thing ..........I'm off to worship the pvc clad legs of an oak table

be right back.

Comment is about Dropping the Mask by Dave Morgan (article)

Hi Daniel - i read your stuff and enjoy it.

Comment is about All words become me (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Good - I like this one too. Is it me or is Mr Crompton sailing through his mellow period? Great observations Pete, and nice to see a shift in style.

Comment is about my howling hollow (blog)

That's it my boy - give me death. Give me those subtle lines that stroke the hairs on our down of mortality. This is good. This is Peter Crompton doing wheelies on his poetic bicycle, waving at the crowds of fans who gathered to see him jump. They stand open mouthed as his imagery flies through the sky.
Welcome back Mr Crompton. I love this piece. It digs under the reality of funerals. I always think that people who grieve at funerals are usually grieving for themselves and the thought of having to sail through the murky waters of consequence. Nice to see and hear your stuff again.
Congratulations on your placing in the slam!

Comment is about missing (blog)

Hi Richard - I was a policeman in Salford throughout the 1990's. It's nice to see that the city is as intimidating now as it was then!
In my time there, I was threatened with knives and just about every utensil you can think of. The favourite reception gift would be tins of beans or peas thrown from the upper floors of the tower blocks. Some would hit the police van but thankfully none hit me. I would never have lived the news headline down. 'Police Officer killed by Spaghetti Hoops'. The shame of it.

Comment is about Salford (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Happy to help dear boy, you're one of the family!
Seriously, I hope it goes well what with the Liverpool match and the slam being the day before. Anyway Gordon Zola and I will attempt to battle through the traffic to get there.

Comment is about Earth to Earth (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Hello, Peter

I found your poem with an excellent flow. But there is a sadness in those lines.

Congratulations of your last win! ( I have read that on the front page)

GREAT JOB!!
Zuzanna

Comment is about missing (blog)

Richard

I see the chaos on the streets, and the madness where there are so many people, then the kid ready to do something wrong. So much reality expressed in your writing. It sounds like I was there watching the very scene at present time.

Great poem!

Zuzanna

Comment is about Salford (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Richard

Your poem touched my heart. There is so much to think about reading your words in this poem. Never had to watch anyone die but I must tell you that I am very scared to see someone dying.
Your poetic mind created such reality in the write that I am feeling if I was there with you by the bed of the person dying. You have poured so much of feelings to this poem.

EXCELLENT JOB!

Zuzanna

Comment is about Do you mind if I don't watch you die? (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Daniel

I am very impressed with your poems. All writes are wonderful! Keep penning on your talent shines! I need to tell you that I like the video you have done on your You Tube'

Great Job!
Zuzanna

Comment is about Daniel Hooks (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Hello Daniel,

Thank you my friend in poetry for the great comment on my "Failed Dreams"

Appreciated,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Daniel Hooks (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Congratulations to all Poets!

GREAT JOB!

Zuzanna Musial

Comment is about Write Out Loud Success In Liverpool Slam! (article)

HI Peter,
Its a very nice poem.

Comment is about missing (blog)

Thankyou very much Zuzanna!

Comment is about All words become me (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Nicely done.

And thanks for you comments on mine.

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison

Hello, Daniel

You have great use of metamorphosis in this poem. Very nice and well expressed. It gives the reader feeling of bursting from those words that are trying to come out of your imaginative mind.

Great write - Thank you!
Zuzanna

Comment is about All words become me (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Hello, Melissa

Your poem has depth of thoughts. It always amazes when there is so much said in a limited amount of words. Your poem is great!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Clouds Over Sky (blog)

Dear Alison

Thank you for commenting on my latest write, and the name comment!

I found your writing excellent! All the samples you have are presenting depth of your thinking and show your creative abilities. You are great Poetess. Keep up the great work!

Warm Regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Alison (poet profile)

Original item by Alison

Hello, Alison

I found your poem amusing, very well written with fabulous flow. Easy to follow and clear picture that can be painted out of this write. You are an excellent writer and a poet. Believe there are times in life that I was like that too.

GREAT POETRY!

Thank you,
Zuzanna

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison

Good to see this story up here on Write Out Loud. It's also very exciting to see that list of women editors, and I just thought of another name to add to it, which is Sophie Dunstan, editor of The Nail, an Oxford-based poetry magazine.

For those thinking of submitting work, the first issue of Horizon is due out in September, and I look forward to receiving some top quality work from poets, writers and reviewers over the next few months.

Those of you who know me will be aware that I have a strong web presence, with many active sites. However, to avoid lost submissions, please only send poems or article/review queries via the official Horizon Submissions email address on the Horizon page at Salt, which is still under construction but should be live within the next few days.

Best, Jane

Comment is about News From Salt Publishing (article)

"in the dim light of a sleepy sun" I'm traveling with you David, traveling with you.......!
thanks for leaving an comment 2.
Ally

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

This is So- So- Soooo - Good, Jeff. Welcome to our Boards.

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Afraid a gremlin crept in in the editing: the bit about Caroline England says in my original script 'Pozzian, sfumato type pieces', a reference to the late Italian poet Antonia Pozzi and to the sfumato painting technique. What appears in the review sounds more like an Italian footballer who's gone out for a quick fag. But it was close.

Comment is about Ugly Tree Reviewed by James Hartnell (article)

HI Melissa,
Nice poem!

Comment is about Clouds Over Sky (blog)

HI Melissa,
Loved the poem!

Comment is about Taste of Love (blog)

HI Richard,
Loved the poem!

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

HI Alison,
Very nice poem.

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison

HI Peter,
This is a very nice poem. take care

Comment is about my howling hollow (blog)

I agree with, Pete - canny use of verse, photography/light.

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison

'I am autumnal to the touch'

great line.

I like the draining coldness of this poem.
The ghost white of the image adds to the howling hollow of the image you paint.

I must write an antithesis for this

Comment is about The Ghost of Me (blog)

Original item by Alison

I enjoyed your two poems.I like the line about jumping off the bridges.

Also I really enjoy the sentiment of 'letting go' very clever the way you use the painted nails / paint pots idea to show the progression and ageing and the growing up.

the nails that wave goodbye, with the armour of the red gloss....but would they one day come back with tales to tell...................is there ever a true goodbye.?

great work
Look forward to more.

Comment is about Helen Shay (poet profile)

Original item by Helen Shay

How can I follow the wonderful words of Melissa, if only to say that you've moved me deeply with the hope that springs from your beautiful poetry.
Your soul glows with possibilities. Perhaps you saw it through the curtains...

Ally x

Comment is about Crack in the Curtains (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Frank your poems are quite out there. I checked out your site. I'm so impressed by your very bold creations. Shadows is powerful. I agree with Darren's comments, the ending is pretty brilliant.
thanks a lot for sharing.

Ally

Comment is about Frank Burton (poet profile)

Original item by Frank Burton

Richard, I loved you poem so much. Your words have taken me completely to those times 'quite often' when I have felt like this. It reminded me of walking home in the autumn rain at night. My bike had a puncture so all I could do was walk with it through a flooded tree lined street where countless leaves had fallen and traffic literally sped by and splashed the puddles on me.
I was in that moment and didn't give a damn. It was amazing. You're poem has all of this.

Please don't stop putting those thoughts down on that mobile!

Ally

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Jeff - us Bolton lads have to stick together. Welcome to WOL and I hope that you feel that your contributions are read. They usually are, but many people don't feel that it's their place to add comments to other people's work for many different reasons.
Anybody that mentions The Stranglers in their work gets my vote, I'm a big fan and have watched them recently (back stage no less) which is one gig closer to my 50 Stranglers gigs. (44 at present).
Whatever the reason for your writing, you'll find that if you have an audience, then it should develop with the right kind of feedback.
Regarding your poem, it was a trip down memory lane for me too. I was a keen Stranglers fan back in 1975 - but didn't consider myself a punk. I hated the 'Pistols' but loved The Ruts. I can't even begin to explain why?
keep writing and posting...

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Another intimate piece with an intensity that is obvious. You are asking lots of questions Melissa without touching upon how you would perhaps attempt to remedy the 'situation'. As the poem is so intimate, sometimes a critique is not taken too well and some take it as a personal attack - I hope not. I enjoy your poetry simply because it has an honesty to it that many fail to release in their work. Some poetic works have what is referred to as a 'turn' and I think that one could be used here to great effect. You ask lots of questions - why not try to answer them in the final stanza. This could reinforce your reason for questioning yourself or simply provide the answer as to just WHY you ask so many questions. (relationship breakdown of a intense love or a close family member whom you loved has died). By bringing in the reason, or at least having an inference to it can allow the reader to empathise with you that little bit more.
Your work is very, very readable.
Thanks for sharing.

Comment is about Taste of Love (blog)

Hi Richard, this is marvellous!! Night is a time I like and I felt like I was there.

Thanx for comment on my poem, Punk's not Dead, even if the Queen is!! Cheers Jeff

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hero's are few and far between, and perhaps one day our world leaders will make heroic choices.

Your verse has provoked much thought.

Thank you, and thank you for the compliments on my last blog.

Comment is about Clouds Over Sky (blog)

hope you like his poem everyone! I wrote it on my mobile while walking home from uni. Poetry should be written in second hand books with a fountain pen but all mine seem to originate on my mobile phone! lol

Comment is about I Love The Night (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

wicked poem! "Only the fakes survive" Johnny Rotten

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

Thanks for that great review Dave. I had hoped to get to this and didn't make it. I really wish I had.

Comment is about Dropping the Mask (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Hi Everyone, hope you like this, comments welcome!!!

Comment is about Punk's not Dead!! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

I love how this poem opens like a rose in bloom. Every word brings an image of running through a maze of thought with words etched within the labyrinth's walls. The eyes are windows to the soul, and your mind is a blueprint of discovery and beauty.

Comment is about Read my Mind.... (blog)

Original item by Alison

My heart goes out to you, and I drink in every word spoken and written by your hand. You call me brilliant, but I am but a small star next to your crescent moon. Time is endless when we write, and dreams keep hope in the future. We never know what the next chapter brings, but if we can see a crack in its facade, maybe it we will see something good, something great.

Comment is about Crack in the Curtains (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding