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Taste of Love

How I would wish to feel

the taste of love

on my lips,

dripping down to my heart

and feel the bitterness wash out,

and all I would feel

is alive again.

I would know that I was alive again,

and the warmth flowing through me

is what you call love,

a myth to me

but water

for my parched lips

in this desert

that I call home.

Time is sand flowing through my fingers

as I watch shadow after shadow

fall over me,

and my lips are dry.

When was the last time

I tasted love?

When was the last moment

I felt alive?

How long have I become this sand,

hard and cold to the touch of life?

Will the water flow down

from someone's heart one day?

Will someone come save me,

or do I forever stay

in shadow?


Taste of Love

by, Melissa R. Mendelson

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clarissa mckone

Sun 20th Apr 2008 04:58

HI Melissa,
Loved the poem!

darren thomas

Sat 19th Apr 2008 09:46

Another intimate piece with an intensity that is obvious. You are asking lots of questions Melissa without touching upon how you would perhaps attempt to remedy the 'situation'. As the poem is so intimate, sometimes a critique is not taken too well and some take it as a personal attack - I hope not. I enjoy your poetry simply because it has an honesty to it that many fail to release in their work. Some poetic works have what is referred to as a 'turn' and I think that one could be used here to great effect. You ask lots of questions - why not try to answer them in the final stanza. This could reinforce your reason for questioning yourself or simply provide the answer as to just WHY you ask so many questions. (relationship breakdown of a intense love or a close family member whom you loved has died). By bringing in the reason, or at least having an inference to it can allow the reader to empathise with you that little bit more.
Your work is very, very readable.
Thanks for sharing.

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