Yolande

Sun 16th Aug 2009 21:41

Very heartfelt . I would imagine this resonates with most people at sometime. I have observed that one can even feel alone in a crowded room. A very thought provoking poem Steven.

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winston plowes

Sun 16th Aug 2009 21:23

Hi Cate
Re Gramps - Not mistakes, just opoetunities to learn! I am terrible at spelling and punctuation but am learning (I think) sometimes others mistakes leap out when you would never see them yourself. Win x

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Isobel

Sun 16th Aug 2009 21:14

A sad one - you manage to say a lot looking through someone else's eyes and speaking with another voice - that quite a talent.

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Isobel

Sun 16th Aug 2009 20:59

You must have had some dreadful experiences - the scars run deep within your poetry.

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Isobel

Sun 16th Aug 2009 20:54

So glad to hear you wash your neck once a week LOL Your poem brings back memories of my childhood (not all good), The lovely coal fires people like to reminisce about entailed freezing cold mornings, ice on the inside of windows, damp towels, mottled thighs and freezing bottoms, icy cold beds and all the dirt and grime of cold dust. Modern life has a lot to recommend it but as you point out - we still leave our carbon footprint - the use of tumble driers that often could be avoided with a little effort. Sorry to ramble.

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Isobel

Sun 16th Aug 2009 20:39

Oh Steven - don't know if this is written from a personal perspective or not but it is ever so sad. I guess we all get those moments when we feel like this though - no matter how many people surround us. You express the feelings vey well and I find that last line particularly poignant and hard hitting.

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Steven Kenny

Sun 16th Aug 2009 20:35

Hello Louise!

Would just like to thank you for all the support you've given as I take my first few steps into the poetry world!

I do love The Commuters and Stuck Unsaid, they're great to read and great to watch you perform!

See you soon! ;-)

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Steven Kenny

Sun 16th Aug 2009 20:31

Hi guys! And thank-you all for the comments on my poems! I honestly didn't expect to get as good a reception as I did at the Tudor! I'm glad people enjoyed them!

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Sun 16th Aug 2009 20:04

Hi Cynthia the comments re "Fish" were about no way about you!!!!!
Bernie

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jane wilcock

Sun 16th Aug 2009 18:35

Hi, thanks for your comments, funny though as I almost commented on this poem on friday! Its just a brilliant story,very funny and I am sure has a happy ending!! I was transfixed. Jane

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Isobel

Sun 16th Aug 2009 18:33

Never knew him at all - he died before I was born.

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 18:18

Hi Janet, sounds like you have been badly let down, but I agree with Isobel....... sack him off gal and find someone better!
Cate xx

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Yolande

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:58

Hi Cate
Thankyou for your comment on Second Chance. You are right we all bring baggage with us which we carry forward when moving on.
Regards Yolande

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:57

I must admit to loving Blackpool. Its tacky, loud, money orientated, but I still love it. Yes I love the candy floss, the loud raucous music, the fun fair, the lights, the dirty sea which is always too rough to go in.... the merry makers, the hen and stag party goers dressed as ruptured cows....no no no.. there is no North of England without a Blackpool!
Cate xx

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Yolande

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:45

Hello Dave.
Thankyou for your comments about my poem. You are right we all bring baggage with us which affects our choices when moving on. It was lovely meeting you at The Tudor.
Regards Yolande.

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:44

Hi Yo, thanks for your comment on Our Gramps..... I am watching this space with great anticipation!!!!
Cate xx

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:36

Hi Winston, thanks for your comments on Our Gramps.... and for editing it for me! Luckily you were on line at the same time as me, so I dont think too many peeps saw my mistakes!!
Cate xx

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Yolande

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:33

What poignant memories. I am almost inspired to dredge up my own memories of my Grandad and follow your lead in commiting them to a poem. Loved it. Watch this space.
Yolande.

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Yolande

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:30

I so agree with this concept. It reminds me much of my Granny and her philosophy of casting her bread upon the waters.
Yolande

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:29

Hi Dave, thanks for you comment on Our Gramps. Hope your camping trip is going ok and you are not getting wet wet wet in this nasty weather!!
Cate xx

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:27

Hi Tommy, thanks for your comment on Our Gramps.... we were prob mucky little urchins playing mirps in the road and gutters , but like you say, our immune system must have been 100% higher than kids of today fixated on a computer game all day!!!!!
Cate xx

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:21

Hi Anthony, thanks for your comment on Our Gramps. I took you and Janet up on your suggestion to put it to music, and wrote a tune in the middle of last night for it! {Dont you just hate it when the muse strikes you at 4 in the morning} I might get round to singing it at the Tudor sometimes!
Cate xx

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Yolande

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:17

Hello David. Thankyou for commenting on my poem. I can see by your prolific output that poerty is an integral part of your life, reflecting your life's journey. Regards Yolande.

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 17:13

Hi Cynthia, thanks for your comment on Our Gramps.... glad you liked it and loved your archived one!!
Cate xx

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 16:51

Yes..... loved this Cynthia. So glad you dug it out of your archives!! Our dad played the piano, and our mother had a glorious voice, so we all grew up singing classics, war songs,opera, musicals or pop off the radio, whatever was the happening of the moment. An incredibly noisy household!!!
Cate xx

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Sun 16th Aug 2009 16:44

Thank you for your comment on my poem Andy - I like to hear genuine feedback. I enjoyed reading Perfect Place - that must have been a very special moment.

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Sun 16th Aug 2009 16:41

Thanks for your comment on Imagination. Your observations are correct.

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Sun 16th Aug 2009 16:36

Thank you for your comment Cynthia. I have read very many of your poems and consider you to be a talented and clever lady - I am therefore touched that you should like my poem. Much of my poetry comes direct from the heart and therefore I don't give much thought to structure. I am not that well educated in poetry so don't know the difference between a cinquain and a tanka - but I will research them for future reference.
Thank you.

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Cate Greenlees

Sun 16th Aug 2009 16:34

Most people will relate to this Yolande. Letting go of previous hurts and pains, and moving on is hard for all of us.It`s a leap of faith, and sometimes we dont get it right, but we have to try.
Cate xx

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Dave Bradley

Sun 16th Aug 2009 16:28

Hi Jane

Just discovered your stuff, which I like, especially Duck-House Parliament. What a fascinating character Cromwell is. It isn't fashionable to speak well of him, but he had remarkable qualities didn't he.

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 13:38

Hiya Emma again, thanx for comment on Darker Skies, it is so tragic and things like that help me put things into perspective as they do you by the sounds of it. You might want to read this that I did last year after a visit to Lithuania, its called 'Genocide' - see ya soon Jeff X http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=1487

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Anthony Emmerson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 12:58

"I'd like to see a positive LSD story. Wouldn't that be newsworthy? Just once? Hear what it's all about?

"Today a young man on acid realized that all matter is merely energy condensed to a slow vibration, that we are all one consciousness experiencing itself subjectively. There's no such thing as death, life is only a dream, and we're the imagination of ourselves.
Here's Tom . . . ""

A fierce and brutally honest intelligence.

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A.E.



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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 16th Aug 2009 12:40

I knew that ... perhaps the analogy needed more thought. Or am I one of your 'pretentious people' by your definition?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 16th Aug 2009 12:34

A winner here, Joan. A wise, succinct and well-expressed idea. Have you ever considered putting ideas like this into 'form' poetry, like tanka or cinquain?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 16th Aug 2009 12:12

Stephen, this is where commentators get 'presumptuous', as I am going to be. I take this liberty because we have begun to connect as friends. I think this idea is really good, and very worth sharing. But I also think it needs more work to tighten it up. Half the number of words would probably suffice, and make the impact of your memories more powerful. I recommend that you delete to bare bones, and then see what a great 'picture' you have. This suggestion is a compliment, not a negative criticism.

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shoeless

Sun 16th Aug 2009 11:40

re visited this , to share with a freind who is trying to help her son out .

its a good piece pete

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Steve Smith

Sun 16th Aug 2009 11:06

This is a very fine piece, a picture, a tune and the puzzles of regret.
Steve Smith

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Tim Ellis

Sun 16th Aug 2009 10:11

Thanks for your comment on my Carbon Footprint poem Christine. I was just enjoying your pole dancing job interview poem - it looks like something that could work really well in a live reading. If you're interested, I'm doing a free show at the Ilkley Literature Festival Fringe this year. The date's not definite yet, but probably on October 6th.

Keep those poems coming!

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David Franks

Sun 16th Aug 2009 10:04

Enjoyed your trad metre and ryhme, Yolande.

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Deborah Jordan Bailey

Sun 16th Aug 2009 09:10

ok, you love him, but why this title i wonder?

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:58

Hi Jeff, reminded me a bit of 'Noise of the night' I did recently, nice work keep it up mate! Jeff

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garside

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:57

Hi Cynthia

thanks for taking the time to read and make comment on my poem

steve

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garside

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:55

not ninjas then? ; )

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:55

Hi Janet, sounds like you're up to no good Ha! Love this it says so much in a few well chosen and lovely words, Jeff xx

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carol falaki

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:52

Atilla, I have never read Swells, now I will.
Your poem made me smile, your thoughtful tribute made me sad, but also brought home the vital role poetry plays in connecting people.
I hope your brave mum finds the peace she desires. x Carol

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:49

Very poignant, some lovely sentiment Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:39

Well thats cleared that up! Ha, nice one Jeff, welcome to WOL good to see you writing, cheers Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:22

hi Emma, yeah be lovely to meet you, will be at Freed Up this thursday. Yes most of my poems do rhyme, the rhythm (all the hard words lol) helps when I'm performing live to remember them, well sometimes anyway!

I'll keep an eye out for any work you do, the feedback does help, just be careful with the spelling, it can make a massive difference and if its wrong it stands out mile and can ruin an otherwise good poem!

I even wrote a poem last year 'Queens English RIP' because of number of people who get you're and your mixed up, drives me mad! JeffX

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Dave Bradley

Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:14

Hi Yolande

Welcome to WOL. A good start. This works just as well on the page as it did at the Tudor. You make the reader feel the dilemma of choice - the complexity of possible outcomes, history, emotional hunger and more. Do keep posting

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Chris Dawson

Sun 16th Aug 2009 07:49

Hi Michelle,
Thanks for reading and commenting on Shhh - glad you liked it.
I do like 'We would be' - it's rather mournful. Look forward to reading more of your work.
Cx

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