lot shorter than i was expecting, but this is one to think about! interesting...

Comment is about After a Holiday Affair (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

i have a pal who has used internet dating for years.. i could write a series off poems about some of these dates, but wont as he'll know I am writing about him.. this is a nice piece thou!

Comment is about Internet Dating (blog)

i thought these may go on a bit longer than i originally expected - nice!!

Comment is about paperweight (blog)

i like this, Janet although I am not sure if you need the last line as it gives it a twist that is perhaps a bit too tellie for my liking... i like the feel off the piece a lot thou (Hasnt their being a film or book called that?)

Comment is about Who Pays the Ferryman? (blog)

Hi Janet
I needed something to take me away, and this may be it.
Very pictorial. I could almost be there.
But do I want to be?
Steve M. :-)))

Comment is about Who Pays the Ferryman? (blog)

Hi Emily
I think this is great.
Everyone needs a paperweight.
Steve M. :-)))

Comment is about paperweight (blog)

That degree finally pays off!

I love Richard, he has a very powerful presence, and is an excellent performer, and his poetry always comes from a well informed place.

And, there was a clip of him ranting at the crowds at The Fringe on Channel 4 News!

Comment is about Critical Switch (article)

Thanks Antonionioni for your kind comments.
Bernie

Comment is about Awaken. (blog)

Great stuff Dave, just missing some Gregorian Acid House Chanting, see you at salford!

Comment is about Big Chill August 2009 (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Hi Lydia

I liked this. It reminded me of the Abraham Lincoln quote "Every man over forty is responsible for his face". I'm sure he meant women too.

Some young women seem to aspire to be Barbie Doll lookalikes, as you say "bland, the same as any other". But when maturity and life experience come together with real individuality and femininity in a middle aged woman, Barbie eat your heart out.

Comment is about in celebration of older women (blog)

Original item by Lydia

Try this link
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lhpo-MqK9tk&feature=related
or
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F9OHIl5Fc3Y&feature=related

Comment is about Poem for Alvin (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I rarely buy flowers so don't be offended! X Great poem though, interesting idea Jeff X

Comment is about Sunflowers (blog)

Original item by Cate

Hi Cate, good fun, knew I had seen you somewhere before! Jeff xx

Comment is about A Cheeky Little Number (blog)

Original item by Cate

Quite beautiful Yolande, the poems not bad either, go on I will give you a second chance!!

Wonderful words and thoughts, really enjoyed it, and well read, hope to see ya soon Jeff X

Comment is about Second Chance (blog)

Original item by Yolande

Thank you Isobel. Sorry for for the delay in appreciation I have been away in the wilds of Shropshire attending a workshop to reconnect with my inner manliness and care of the beard. It was run by the spooky men's chorale- a fine body of men who everyone should see at least once in their lives
http://www.spookymen.com.au/

Comment is about Poem for Alvin (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I'm like Joan - no experience, but is happiness really no more than equilibrium.

'Subtract a little loyalty'
To whom?

Thanks for making me think, Cynthia

Comment is about After a Holiday Affair (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Cynthia
Thanks for the comment. I wrote this when helping at a local school, and saw the mothers dropping off their children on Day 1. Half elation; half tears.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Stephen, this is delightful, and oh! so true. My relationship antennae are vibrating vigourously. We are introducing a 3-year-old to Infants 1 this year.. Thank God, it's not all day.

Comment is about 1st Day Reflections (blog)

I should just add that in performance poetry, issues/language don't jump up and bite you on the bum, like my poem just has. Language is soon heard and soon forgotten. Anything written down is there to be read and reread forever and a day - that is why we all need to be very careful about what we commit to paper. Never argue by mail (as some of my family have) - not easy to forget words that can be refreshed.

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

I don't know David. Perhaps people just want to feel rebellious and naughty sometimes - I know I do. I just feel like venting all my frustrations in some way. Perhaps I should buy a cat, then I could go and kick it. Will probably never write another poem that contains so many swear words - it was just a phase I was going through - probably cos I knew someone at the time who swore a lot - it must have rubbed off.

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

But why is there so much swearing, and shock tactics, in "performance poetry"?

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

You cover very well the period of 0-5 and yes I've never struggled too hard parting myself from them at the school gates! This poem will speak to all with children cos it isn't an easy task raising them - a poem on ages 13 - 18 could be hellishly entertaining...

Comment is about 1st Day Reflections (blog)

Sorry if I've offended you with my recent poem David. I try never to swear in front of my children and only rarely in poetry. This was written primarily as a performance piece, not for page. I tend to perform only in pubs where the audience is largely inebriated and accepting of all forms of language. I do take your point.

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

while i demonstrate how to climb a hill - great take off Emily

would consider moving the comma - after of fun -
and place a semi colon instead after the word because

like your work

steve

Comment is about fun isn't always easy (blog)

Hi Emily,

read this a few times and like - the take off at the end is subtle and discreet dawring the poem to a close

would consider breaking the lines up - as i read the poem it lends itself to this possiblility -

these are the streets
of your neighbourhood
and i walk them
without you

steve

Comment is about circuits (blog)

Peter...............................................................
Envoie-moi le mp3 s'il te plaît : )
xxxxx

Comment is about Getting Old - A Poem (blog)

Beautiful Peter!
You have captured the art of giving which comes from a heart full of love...
xxxxx

Comment is about a picture of the day (blog)

So I'm guessing you are saying space and vacuum is bliss Steve. You have a novel way of expressing yourself. x

Comment is about Bliss (blog)

Hi Dave,
thanks for your comment on Chloe's poems.
I really do appreciate it.
You're a star!

Janet.x

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Val, thanks for your recent comments, and the one for Chloe's poems.
You're a star!

Janet.x

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

I've never had a holiday affair - but I guess it might feel just as you describe. Coming down to earth after being on such a high would be a difficult balancing act, especially if loyalty has been compromised.

Comment is about After a Holiday Affair (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for your kind comments Lenford . While my current mission is to contribute rubbish and trivia to this fine site, I do it as a perverse tribute to awesome writers like yourself. Where did you learn to write or does it just happen? As Mr Jellyhead, who died five years ago this month, and who we will be commemorating at the Man and Scythe in Bolton Sunday 13th September, often said the only rules Dave, are that there are no rules". I think that's the kind of statement that encourages lengthy and healthy discussion on Write out Loud. Look forward to reading more of your work and seeing it get recognised in a wider arena.

Dave

Comment is about Lenford White (poet profile)

Original item by Lenford White

I like this Cynthia. You've managed in just 14 lines to give an impression of someone having 14 thousand thoughts and feeling, which all feed into a state of agonised tension, remembrance and longing. I liked your previous one too - sorry I didn't comment. Thanks for yours on mine (not autobiographical)

Comment is about After a Holiday Affair (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Isobel, you are priceless. Love the style! and vocab!

Comment is about Poem for Alvin (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Welcome Mike. Enjoyed reading your poem again.

Comment is about Internet Dating (blog)

Enjoyed reading your thoughts in trad metre-and-rhyme, Mike.

Comment is about That selfish lover (blog)

Absolutely beautiful Peter...

So much heartfelt emotion in these last lines:
'I made your name the last time
We finger traced it together
Like a running raindrop game
On a window
this pain of leaving

her voice distant
that laughter of motherhood
a melancholic memory
our childhood in the garden'

Comment is about Childhood in the garden (blog)

Funny that I should happen across this as I was leaving you a comment on your profile page. Today I was reading and reflecting on writings by Lao Tzu from the Tao Te Ching, and one in particular was about not looking to others for your fulfillment etc...

Your poem essentially has the same message with the added consequences of surrendering that power to another.

Very thought provoking...

Comment is about Do Not Lay the Burden (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hello Cynthia,
I love that you asked those questions about my poem 'I Thought...'
Definitely both... more about the first, because I love them so... and a little of the second, because when you are let down, doubt creeps in.

Merci : )

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for the encouraging comments, maipenrai and Janet; and to that end I have one more before I take a break from posting and just read more. It is a long one as befits the last for a while.

Comment is about Hope Square (blog)

Original item by Beulah

very light of what could be treated dark. therefore very real. glad you didn't go for 'poignant' or wistful as some would have done.
to steve black & you..the three line before those three are priceless. so that makes 6 lines that hit the mark. Did I say 6? How about:"as you cast me out beyond hope"!!!

Comment is about circuits (blog)

Good write, but slavery goes onto today and very little is written about it, it is ignored by most, think, Niger, Mauritania, Chad, Sudan, and thats just the start, think India, Uzbekistan.
Forgotten , think slavery in the Gulf States, KSA, whoaaaaaaa cant talk about that folks.
Bernie

Comment is about 200 years on (blog)

Original item by Lenford White

Thanks Janet.
Bernie

Comment is about For I Have Sinned. (blog)

Sweetness, I love his dress
I really love the things that he sez
Tra la la la la la la la la
I really love my Cooca.Choo

Comment is about Poem for Alvin (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Cate - thank you for your recent comment. Unfortunately, my camping days have only just begun.

D

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Thanks for your comments, Dave.
You had it easy! If my memory serves me well, Saturday was by far the best day with the region's weather. Still, I've earned my camping stripes and, rather surprisingly, it hasn't put me off doing it all again. Without the kids.
Thanks again.

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

But does he sing and wear one black glove, thats what I want to know??
Cate xx

Comment is about Poem for Alvin (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Dave, love your poems, especially the one about Mr Jellyhead, clearly a much missed man. In answer to your question some months ago. We are all very good at getting things very wrong - probably becuase we are mere mortals. Just just thought that Una, being a god and all, just might be able to help us.

Regards

Comment is about Big Chill August 2009 (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

I wish I'd had an Auntie Janet. Well done Chloe - poetry is wonderful way to express yourself. It is a game that can be played anywhere, any time and will take you through ups and downs of life. Enjoy. x

Comment is about 3 poems by Chloe Ramsden (Janet's niece) (blog)

By example do we lead Janet. Very good Chloe you have made your first leap into poetry so keep on writing. You show great promise.

Comment is about 3 poems by Chloe Ramsden (Janet's niece) (blog)