Hi Dave... A very warm welcom to Write out Loud. Hope you enjoy exploring the site. Winston (New Members)

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Tee hee - yes there are a few people who write like that - an interesting analogy David.

I like the build up you achieve in the poem - the use of repetition and incrementation - it almost feels like something is being punished...

Comment is about Ejaculation Is King (blog)

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Hi Cynthia - Thanks for your comment. My husband's a builder - so perhaps I should just get him to whistle at me on a daily basis! Or just start tossing my hair again with a bit more panache...! Kate

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Thanks for yours! Kids a bit older now ... so harder to get away with. Your poem has made me want to go and eat .... some cake! K x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

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It's a poking poem, gets you right in the eye or belly or butt. It is so sad. IMO, the true 'sexual flag' does not diminish with age, and even the labourers of the world recognize this. All that really goes is deliberate bum-wiggling or tossing hair with an 'I dare you' panache. It's a great social comment, Kate. Well done.

I thought your prior one was really good too. I expected my comment to be blasted into outer space.

Comment is about Invisible Woman (blog)

Original item by Kate Tym

Josh, this is a very interesting metaphor (you really don't need the last bit; your point is well-made.) The poem has thought-provoking lines which cover many scenarios, judgment and punishment on a very varied scale. It's a bold, imaginative exercise worth pruning to a finer degree for greater strength.

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Original item by Josh Coates

This is a very clever poem, Dave, and ironically funny. I like the way you have taken old 'folk sayings' and intertwined them, making fresh relationships. IMO,the piece requires more than one reading to fully appreciate your wit.

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Yeah, Cynthia, clever people do my head in! Glad I ain't on of 'em.

Comment is about Clever People (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I found this totally entrancing - for some reason! Really enjoyed it - despite the slightly anti-fox tone! ;-)

Comment is about NEW CUT UP POEM: 20 News-G - Episode Thirty Eight Squared - Brave, Stupid Religion fox (blog)

No - but there's one in Perth, Australia that keeps getting advertised on here. It's probably in someone's back yard somewhere...
Enjoy your travels - it all sounds very exciting.

Comment is about International gigging? (blog)

Original item by Emma Decent

There's a article in the discussion board about German concerts.. Perhaps the person who wrote that maybe able to help (Do have a friend however in Berlin who is due over here soon - When are you in Berlin?)

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I think it is a highly unusual theme Ray - not one that could be guessed easily. If I was going to write a poem about stalking, I think I might have added more detail about the watching and the waiting and the following. I think you did get the power struggle over though and the fact that it was her needs that were uppermost, rather than the stalked man.

Comment is about Heavy Make-Up (blog)

This is a fascinating one Dave. Like the way you've looked at old sayings and made a poem out of it. You have given all of them a sinister or negative twist though which perhaps goes with the theme. My favourite line is the one Francine highlighted - I like the combination of the 2 senses. Also like the use of the nursery rhyme at the end. It is whimsical but serious also... x

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Hi Kate, just love your Sunday Morning TV - brings back memories of when my kids were young, lol. x

Comment is about Kate Tym (poet profile)

Original item by Kate Tym

Interesting and whimsical...

My favourite lines:
'Read my mind with a fat Braille finger
Love the song but not the singer'

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

A very dramatic one Steve - you seem to be strong on this kind of impact poetry. Have never contemplated it myself - though a few may wish I had...
Pulling something other than a trigger normally helps the spirits immensely. Great take on the theme! x

Comment is about Bite The Bullet (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Thanks for your warm comments Ann. That sounds mega what you've been through too. Yes, we all find our creative and exploratative ways through these things! Good luck with yours too. Emma x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Thanks Andy.. well one of the up things of this type of situation is sometimes getting a bita money from those gone... His gift, spent as I reckon he'd see fit. Ta.

Comment is about Beginning of a journey (blog)

Original item by Emma Decent

Ooooh you cheeky monkey - let's see a photo of you first!
- I dont think you'd want to see me in suspenders & stockings :)

Comment is about Kate Tym (poet profile)

Original item by Kate Tym

Hi Cate, yep, I realised you realised (this is sounding funny, isn't it?) it was Middle English but I did a bad explanation of why I used it! There are connections and connotations that seem to have been weakened over the years but the power of the original (aided by the spelling) seems somehow as vivid. Thank you again xx

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

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Yep - and you seemed to be getting plenty of attention on that particular boat! The problem is that most of the fish out there are contaminated - you'd have to chuck em back anyway...

You have managed to say a lot with a little - I'd agree with the comments already made. x

Comment is about Plenty More Fish In The Sea. (blog)

I agree with the other comments Georgina. There is such a feel of sadness about this.
However I do know for a fact that the wooden boat was not on the canal going from Wigan Pier to Standish a couple of months ago, cos we all arrived back safely!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Plenty More Fish In The Sea. (blog)

Yum yum.... such is the stuff that dreams are made of!!!Cate xx

Comment is about Cake Shop (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hello Cate, thank you so very much for your comment and for staying with the poem. I decided to use Middle English phrases with contemporary English in an attempt to capture the connection the language used to have with mystery, otherness. And I really like your Biting the Bullet piece, too -- it is powerfully musical and haunting. Moxy xx

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

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Thankyou, Andy. Isobel, Cynthia. How do you explain a poem? Well, it is a power-struggle of sorts. The female can be said to suffer from abrupt mood swings, heavy make-up indicating elation etc.And I guess it's about infatuation bordering on stalkerdom (is that a word?). The part that misleads, perhaps, is when it speaks of poorly and blue - it's meant in the psychological sense.Is it an unusual subject? Depends where you've been hanging out, I suppose!

Comment is about Heavy Make-Up (blog)

Another clever way of interpreting the title. You get the idea of impending doom over well here Steven. Contemplating suicide is a dark and terrible place to be in.
Cate xx

Comment is about Bite The Bullet (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Another clever one Cynthia. The format is unusual with a clever rhyming pattern, and delivers a good punching ending.
Cate xx

Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks 4 commenting "My body". Yes, i wanted to write something different, especially after all these things about socks and vodka :-). Will correct commas - as usually, I was not proofreading X

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Dear Madam
please be informed-I found'Sunday morning tv' funnily disgusting-do you need a camera man? aythankyor! Mr SW.

Comment is about Kate Tym (poet profile)

Original item by Kate Tym

It seems cyber wolf-whistles are quite good too! K

Comment is about Invisible Woman (blog)

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Hi Andy, thanks for yours... I'll be contacting the Guardian forthwith! Lots of yours brought a nice Monday morning smile. Kate

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Old birds rock! Love Daisy Chain summer... reminded me of when I was nought but a fledgling! Kate

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Comment is about Louise Fazackerley (poet profile)

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nothing else to add to the comments here as I agree with it, but just wanted to add - top stuff!

Comment is about Heavy Make-Up (blog)

Perhaps more prose than poetry for me, Kate this but I like the message in it... Could almost a article for a newspaper too (in poem form).. x

Comment is about Invisible Woman (blog)

Original item by Kate Tym

I like this Georgina - it has a nursery rhyme qualitiy but is about real heartbreak and abandonment. Simple but says a lot.

Comment is about Plenty More Fish In The Sea. (blog)

proper lump in throat piece, Georgina... Hope it isn't based on fact..

technical wise - I may consider if I was you breaking it into two stanzas just to give it a better sense of pacing, but I do like it..

Hope you are alright! x

Comment is about Plenty More Fish In The Sea. (blog)

That's really really sad. :'(

Comment is about Plenty More Fish In The Sea. (blog)

its not Greggs is it-if it is,can I have a rats tail pasty please? without the ARSE! gerrnite Dye-O..# D-y-y-y-e-O...# Cadburys make em and Dye cover them with choclate! kip well cock-or is it tuther way round...? shhh! until the dawn oh red haired one-Stef-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about Cake Shop (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Bank! Love the descriptions, the tenor and tone.... Mxxx

Comment is about manhug (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Marvellous, eloquent poem.
Can you belive that my friend and I were eyeing up the girls on a beach in Spain & glimpsed the front page of the Mirror that a guy nearby was reading - we just couldn't believe it - and it's still so shocking - unbelievable.

Comment is about 9/11 (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Jesus Christ on a bike - Wimmin! you cant have it both ways you know? Moaning for getting whistled at & moaning for NOT getting whistled at. Jeez.
No wonder us men are confused.
Mind, you still look pretty fit in that photo... I think maybe we'll need a photo in high heels, stockings & suspenders in order to decide properly though ;)

Comment is about Invisible Woman (blog)

Original item by Kate Tym

i like this- on my way to being an old bird meself x

Comment is about Invisible Woman (blog)

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night night Herbydacious! kip well chuck-best regards ter yew n yours-Stef-xxx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

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Go on! take one home...
(or even two if you're feeling adventuruss ! )
Great poem BTW

Comment is about manhug (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Oh, Anne I'm so pleased that you have noticed ...I change them every Sunday whether I need to or not.

Cleanliness is next to Godliness and my knickers are next to goodness knows what.

Thank you for commenting on my poem you are very kind.

Augusta xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Good Evening Isobel

Thank you so much for your well meant Mmmmm...and implied 'Bang'

yes I must admit to owning succulent lips... however the image is sadly not mine but having said that they are not my first choice of colour...it would play havoc with my high lights.

Once again so many thanks for your comments.
Augusta xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Coo Stef- another ten years hanging from the monkey bars and you might be . . . a MONKEY!! Good job I like animals! xx

Comment is about manhug (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Lol, you can't beat a bit of daftness, Ann! I love it, and come to think of it, I think I must have the hugbug too! xxx

Comment is about manhug (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Just a bit of daftness!

Comment is about manhug (blog)

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