Impressive Tommy. Love the structure, the choppiness of the language, and the overall 'message'

Comment is about Arab spring (blog)

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Some lovely sonics in here Stella...love 'seroxat fix'. Can almost see you on the phone to him, tracing his picture :)

Comment is about Being Overly Dramatic (blog)

Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment, folks. I edited it slightly and put in a stronger ref to Ezekiel (thanks Bob!)

x

Comment is about Hasta Mañana (blog)

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Lenin! hurrah!!

Comment is about Animals (blog)

Ann, many thanks for leaving such a nice comment on being overly dramatic.. :)

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Hiya :)

mm playing about with emotions/moods at the moment..having a hot flush too!...jeeeeeeez...

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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I think to be able to write something like this takes a special person Laura..well done..it is lovely :)

Comment is about Hasta Mañana (blog)

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This brought a wry smile to my face..I used to be told I had ears like a baby elephant! (don't think it was the size though)

enjoyed this :)

Comment is about Out Of The Mouths ... (blog)

Catherine
So good to find a soul sister on WOL
J. Otis

Comment is about Catherine Smith (poet profile)

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Andreas,
Your poem "I have abandoned blood" reminded me of the following poem by Huey P. Newton so I thought I would share it with you:

One day I suddenly realized I had forgotten, name age sex address race, I had found myself
What is greater than love or hate, I will tell you then,
what is greater than love is the relationship I have with the tip of my finger.

Want me to break it down? I can break it down.
It's a simple concept.

If I define myself as my thumb, I deny myself my fingers.
If I define myself as my fingers, I deny myself my hand.
If I define myself as my hand, I deny myself my arm.
If I define myself as my arm, I deny myself my body.
If I define myself as my body, I deny myself my universe.
I diminish myself.

Peace after revolution,
J. Otis

Comment is about Andreas Grant (poet profile)

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Sophia,
The wisdom in your poems is so soft footed I hardly heard it coming.
Peace
J. Otis

Comment is about Sophia Dimmock (poet profile)

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haha- ta Win- :o)

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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.... and there's a pile of tectonic plates a-waiting in the sink :D

Comment is about In The Shadows Of Mountains (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

pretty damn good IMHO

Comment is about We'll meet again (blog)

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Hi Plowsey.

re alcedo atthis poem
I very much thank you sir.

also re a kingfisher in your porthole-
keep taking the tablets-lol!

seriously though Mr P,yes indeed
a fabulous bird that apparently
not many folk get to see.

there again not many people
are fast enough sighted to keep up!

cheers Winston.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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I'm not sure that the title implies hope - I'd say more of a playing down of the sadness - maybe a wry nod to the fact that us poets are prone to the dramatic and that this is, as the poem suggests, just a mood. I like the way you express yourself - the restlessness you convey - the idea of music being torn is a vivid one. You do carry the reader with you in that mood.

Comment is about Being Overly Dramatic (blog)

Yes - I'd agree with Steve here. The only way we can live on (as far as can be certain) is in the love and memory of others. I would love to be remembered in words like this - to have someone write me a poem. I found this moving.

Comment is about Hasta Mañana (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I too like your style of saying things!x

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A beautiful poem Laura.xx

Comment is about Hasta Mañana (blog)

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Yikes - thanks for the explanation Ray. It does make scary reading. You forgot to add 'care' in the community though...

Comment is about Voodoo (blog)

enjoyed the trip here Hazel

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enjoyed very much..especially the poular friction of time surging forward on all sides..lovely..

nice work :)

Comment is about In The Shadows Of Mountains (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

What a collection of curiosities Ray, a great resource for a poem. Win

Comment is about Voodoo (blog)

I did recognise some of the so called cures Ray..many I did not..that last line of yours finishes things off so well..

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Should I know her?..I have a feeling that perhaps I should but for the life of me..I dunno!

The poem is full and rich and rather lovely too.. ah the way to a mans heart is mash..mish-mash?..I shall shut up..

Comment is about Cooking for Infidels (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hello Isobel. Ta for commenting. They've all been used as cures or treatments for mental illness, even the lungs of a lamb on a shaven head.

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I don't really understand this one Ray - unless perchance it is about the torture and murder of an innocent patient by a voodoo doctor...

Hopefully you'll explain at some point. It's an intriguing one.

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Hi There, just listened to 'face of a child' on youtube. great delivery and the music was perfect. Win

Comment is about J. Otis Powell‽ (with interrobang) (poet profile)

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Hi Anthony - hope you can make it (Poetry Mine) one day - and thanks for letting me know. At the moment it is such an unknown - will anyone turn up at all? But I am looking forward to it. I think . . . . :)

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

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Hi Ann,

I hope all is well with you. Just to let you know that I won't be able to make St. Agnes next Tuesday as I will be away in Cumbria. I was really looking forward to your event and to meeting you. Nevertheless I wish you great success with the evening and hope that there might be a repeat - which I will be free for!

Best regards and sincere apologies,

A.E. X

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Hi Margaret, Welcome to WOL. Like the way you describe your work here. Wouldn't it be great if our system were able to fully capture the esscence of your work. Maybe one day. Winston

Comment is about Margaret Gosley (poet profile)

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Hi Tommy, An odd one this. Nothing unusal then form you. lol. Great oblique observations. The 'shifteng of weight in time' and all of the opening stanza are great images. As to who it is in the picture... A mystery to me

Win

Comment is about Cooking for Infidels (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

hi again Jonboy.

not too sure about my own suggestion now-lol!
perhaps the complete last line,second verse-

'and his portrayal of a smiling peacock?

don,t go away-I might be back-haha!

cheers dude.
Stef.

Comment is about The Secret Place (blog)

Thanks for the comments Stef. I agree with the 'bursts'instead of burst. Poss the peacock line too. Always good to get feedback. Thanks for your comments!

Comment is about The Secret Place (blog)

I suggest with the upmost respect
that a little more thought given
to various lines
i.e. "his peacock painted face"

that to me reads
as though he has painted
the picture of a peacock on his face.

my suggestion-
facially portraying a peacock?

also suggest on the last line-
bursts not "burst"

nevertheless it is still a great poem.
hope you dont mind my 'umble opinion.

thanks for sharing.Stef Wilde.

Comment is about The Secret Place (blog)

I really love your use of capitals
in this lovely concise piece.

the title reminds me
of a bodily item
I/we (as in I/we sixties flower children)
wore during those sadly disappeared times-
boo-hoo!

thanks Ms.M.x

Comment is about Mojo (blog)

Hi Isobel. Thanks for your comment. I'd never read The Highwayman so I looked it up. It's amazing, certainly there's a surprisingly similar theme but I'm enormously flattered you'd make any comparisons between the writing in Noyes work and my own effort. Maybe I'm old fashioned but I feel I should get the hang of traditional structures before I would be confident to try something more contemparary, maybe it's a bit of a security blanket!

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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my thanks to you Lynn
for comments on 'forfeiting'

I hope you find the next poem
I do,a little more cheerful.

we both send you our best regards
as always.

thanks love.

Patricia and Stef.xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Peter.

appreciated your correctly
descriptive comments
of the feelings
put to the reader/s of my poem-
'forfeiting'

thank you so much.

Comment is about Peter Asher (poet profile)

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Thanks Winston..I have a bit of a fiddle with 'Days End,' (ha) think it works ok..anyways thanks for your comments :)

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

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'Dorty?' moi?...changed that line to within practiced passion..dunno if it works any better but I could always practice some more to find out eh?.. cheers for commenting Laura x

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

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I too have enjoyed your series Andy :)

Comment is about The End of Summer III (blog)

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Think you have a typo on verse 20?. man instead of mad?..

Very Sleepy Hollowish for me Neil..Bittersweet ending though! :)

Comment is about Danger Rides Abroad Tonight (blog)

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Very much liked the images this gave me Kealan..rich writing for me!.. :)

Comment is about The Plan Of Nature (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Ta for the comment on my last Isobel- appreciated.

I have left a comment on the poem.

My Best

Chris

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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Hey Banksy I had you figured for Asia and far east culture not Utah lol There is more culture in my fridge than in that entire state Haha.

Hi Isobel, I remember your poem about returning from Australia. The grass is always greener isn't always a true saying is it? I mean being somewhere, that not being home...that can greatly re-enforce everything that is good and wanted about 'home'.

Wigan looks like it hits all the right buttons. I tell you what though, I wouldn't be too keen on having a funeral parlour near me Hehe The rest yea :)

My Best

Chris

Comment is about A friend moves to Utah (blog)

Ta Harry - I already did ditch most of verse four! But you may well be right. Yes, I have changed - but I'm still struggling up all those hills!

Comment is about barefoot self (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Instinct sound...ditch verse four

`I`m lonely now` is all the weight it needs.

Nice childhood reminiscer.

The photo`s a stroke of genius (you`ve altered)

Lovely little poem Anne

Comment is about barefoot self (blog)

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I like this a lot Kealan.

Comment is about The Plan Of Nature (blog)

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lol. no but my unmade bed is looking rather interesting! Win x

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