Sun 13th Mar 2016 11:37
RE: re: moist air-Hi Cynthia.Firstly,let me put your mind at ease by assuring you that I would never consider you to be a rude person,in fact quite the opposite,kindly and helpful.With regards to the poem in question,it is fortunate that I didn't actually mention 'drops' had I done so,then I would certainly have agreed with your views.My intention was to induce an image of 'bedewing mist' building up on the window until it could no longer cling to the glass,and consequently started 'crying' down the pane.If you live/have lived in old property,I'm sure you would have 'experienced' seeing pools of condensation on the sill.Those gatherings of 'tears.' Hope this explanation is sufficient.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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A nice picture of dystopia, and a grand use of imagery.
I picture for some reason a roll of wallpaper being unfolded before pasting! Or a proclamation oyez!.
Thanks for your comment on Hypochondria. K.W. was a bleak character and self obsessed. Cheers! You're right though it has all those ingredients.
Ray
Comment is about the world state (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I don't know if "enjoy" is quite the right word but I did!
A darkly humorous awareness of a common human
condition.
"Recommend whatever treatment you will
Why can't you allow me the right to feel ill?"
:-)
Comment is about HYPOCHONDRIA (blog)
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:)
Thanks. What would life be, without fruit, chickens and whimsy?!
Comment is about Fruitless (blog)
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thanks graham, kind words indeed. this may be one that i go back to later and tinker with (the format not the content).
Comment is about the world state (blog)
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i spend my
days waiting
for night
and
my nights in
a daze.................how clever these words are!
poundland prayers.................genius!
I know you like to just get it down quickly sometimes but every now and then you just hit a spot, gold dust.
On the matter of the format, I only like to use one word lines when I want emphasis or the reader to linger for a second on its meaning.
Brevity is the fiercest weapon a poet has!
Comment is about the world state (blog)
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thanks cynthia. i spent ages tinkering with the format, im still not sure it works as a spindly snake but im loathe to change it now. glad you liked it.
Comment is about the world state (blog)
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It's a very strong poem, Tanna, on a very universal subject. Tuck an apostrophe into 'it's' for 'it is' - probably a typo. I look forward to more of your work.
Comment is about Its really something (blog)
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It's superb, Tommy. 'her fingered arguments' and 'we crawled into each other's wet laughs' are, IMO, outstanding. And the title itself.
Comment is about She pushed (blog)
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A moment captured with compelling imagery.
Comment is about Driving in a Snowstorm (blog)
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Well done. 'daze' is terrific. For the style you've chosen I appreciate its brevity.
Comment is about the world state (blog)
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great stuff ray, especially the last verse. for some reason im hearing this in the voice of kenneth williams. if i figure out why i'll get back to you.
Comment is about HYPOCHONDRIA (blog)
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Yup got it in one, however whom is the one? re ' Moving closer' Tommy
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Katy I'll try to recall the point in question :-) Tommy
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steve mellor
Fri 11th Mar 2016 11:21
Hi Cynthia
Your appreciation is much appreciated.
Whether I will have the mental energy to update 'Referendum' on a regular basis, but who knows
Thanks again
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Fri 11th Mar 2016 10:00
clever lead up to popping clogs/dying/jossing/mortal coil exiting/snuffing it/reaper rendezvous/the end of oxygen stealing/the stopping of being a waste of fucking space...
;o)
P&S
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Fri 11th Mar 2016 09:53
Tanna-you're never alone-not HERE you're not! we say in trying to give you a smile.
tis true indeed that one can be in an actually crowded room and still feel as though you are invisible
if thou gettest our drift?
Thought provoking poem-cheers!
P&S
Comment is about Its really something (blog)
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Martin- Shadows, thank you. Tommy
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
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Thanks for your appreciation Stu and Jemima.
Ray x
Comment is about THE CYCLIST (blog)
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I suspect there are relationships that bear similarity to the mischievous content of these lines and some uncomfortable
recognition going on.
Comment is about Belief and Knowledge (blog)
Original item by Leo
In a few lines, this writer defines the difference (all too
often misinterpreted) between "lonely" and "solitary".
The latter (see also "alone") is as much a choice as a
predicament that elicits pity/sympathy.
Comment is about Its really something (blog)
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Ah Heathcliff. Actually he does look naturally a bit scary now so perhaps a reprise.....
He must rank with the thick skinned surely!
Ray
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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thanks both. little baby buck is taking up a lot of my writing time at the moment but still managing the odd one. glad you enjoyed.
Comment is about when i love you next (blog)
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I heartily endorse the comment from CBT.
"We should fall upon our knees
And thank our lucky stars for trees!"
Comment is about Charred (blog)
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I note the reactions to my comments.
The content of this blog describes a tragedy that history
appears to have passed-by. One of the reasons may be
that it occurred in a very different era to that known
to those living in a modern "global" world when almost
any event is given news time . I used the term "perhaps inured to suffering" - and stand by this
observation. My family have a military history, losing
kinfolk in the course of their lives, and know of such
things and what was needed to carry on. There
were so many dreadful events known to so many that
there was a determination of "get on and get over it"
- especially in the personal sense at a time when grief
was just that - a personal thing to be dealt as such.
It is not callous or unfeeling to bring attention to the
past...as L.P. Hartley wrote so perceptively in his
famous novel "The Go-Between": "The past is a foreign
country, they do things differently there." And that
certainly includes attitudes to tragedy from whatever
hideous/tragic source or set of circumstances.
As for this entry as a "poem"...I see it more as a
written account, or as I put it earlier: "a timely reminder".
Those who take offence are entitled to their views and
I am content to refrain from responding in kind, except
to say I've seen violent death at first hand and saved
lives that might have been lost. A certain mindset
is required that is known to those who have been there and done it. If it discomforts some, then so be it.
Comment is about Burnden Disaster 1946 (blog)
Original item by Jeffarama!
When I think of that line from the Bible to the effect that "the poor will always be with us" I wriggle with anger and unhappiness. It haunts me because I fear it may be true.
I would love to be a tree-hugging activist for good causes.
No, let's come out of the closet, I AM a freedom fighting commie bastard up to my world-shattering tricks.
But there it is- oppression, injustice, intolerance of all kinds seem to be written into the tragedy of the world for all time. But hey, that don't stop me trying!
Good poem. Some very good lines :)
Comment is about That Road Don't Come (blog)
Original item by Corr Lens
Sorry to contradict David but those plums were greedily gobbled up by wet chickens (last seen pushing a red wheelbarrow) :)
Comment is about Fruitless (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
I like this pair of lines Alexandra
"Affection is a weapon
Charm is a murderer"
Your conversational style in this makes it an easy read. Your message as usual is very direct and open.
The female's wiles are clearly described but I can't decide whether you secretly love or loathe them.
Comment is about Those Paintbrush Women (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
You can check out the winners and their poems here: http://www.youngpoetsnetwork.org.uk/2016/03/09/agincourt-600-poetry-competition-the-winners/
Comment is about Calling young poets: deadline nears for Agincourt competition (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Fancy some swinging - - -
well the theme
for Stockport poetry
is to turn
back the clock
it all happened
so it seems
in the sixties
love and peace
rock and roll
when everyone just
dreamed of flowers
in their hair!
So swing on down and write down what you remember of that far off time.
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
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Many thanks for your comments, guys. I did a contract at Rhodia in Whitehaven some years ago where they made immodazoline (I think that's how it's spelled). I assumed that's where they get the product name Daz from.
Comment is about DAZ (blog)
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I love a poem that rhymes.
just not this one.
no,no,no! It's very good :)
Comment is about DAZ (blog)
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Jeff, well done with this poem. Burnden Park has been to some extent the forgotten football disaster. There were huge crowds at games just after the war ended. Chelsea had 100,000, way over capacity, for a friendly against Moscow Dynamo in 1945, and were lucky to escape a similar tragedy. And yes, you're quite right to be disappointed with one of the comments on here.
Comment is about Burnden Disaster 1946 (blog)
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Oh goodness, sorry about the late response haha, I never received an email about this comment. I'm not too sure how to feel about this one myself :P It has a different feel to it than my normal pieces. I feel the other ones convey, or at least try to convey insight. This one feels more as if I, or the voice of the poem, is speaking from a point of power. Dignity and cadence as you say, I would say are two good words to describe it hahaha
Comment is about (blog)
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Much enjoyed the breadth and sympathy of this piece.
Comment is about Charred (blog)
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Your response to my comment on 'Touchdown' pretty much verifies my immediate response to your poem. I'm glad I stopped to read it. And I do think you made a lot of 'scores' in very few words. (joke - although I didn't intend it to be.)
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
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I wouldn't bloody forgive him! One of my favourite books of all time is that, and he is the last person anyone with any sense would put in the role of Heathcliff!
Comment is about HEATHCLIFF (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Wed 9th Mar 2016 11:04
Wow! Don't know what else to say really, but this is great, really enjoyed it. Love all the images, but particularly the Svalbard lines x
Comment is about when i love you next (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Hehe, you're all clearly invited now :) Bring your own coconut shells!
Thanks chaps :) Makes a refreshing change to write something a bit lighter.
Thanks to Stu for his brilliant idea that we pinched :D
Comment is about Inappropriate (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
I've never been on the Watercress Line, Ray. We holiday a fair bit on the Hants/Dorset border and we've been on the Swanage Railway a few times.
Our Gert and me have been shareholders in the NYMR for about 25 years which gets us a free ride each year. They don't exactly doff their caps when they see us!
Comment is about The Moorland Train (blog)
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Great that you live up north John and enjoy the wilds that make up the background - I have to make do with the Watercress line in Hampshire; still worth the £100 footplate ride, though. Nice rolling style with a song structure. I love railway poetry, tha' knows.
Ray
Comment is about The Moorland Train (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Uniquely humorous and satirical with great writing - why wouldn't it be?
Ray
Comment is about Inappropriate (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
A great eulogy for a time past but lived day by day and a moving account on how precious life is.
Ray
Comment is about Lest I forget (blog)
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Quite gothic, like Rossetti or Byron maybe, Stu. Very colourful imagery and so expressive. Almost a transition to afterlife. I love tobacco crepe skin!
Ray
Comment is about when i love you next (blog)
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steve mellor
Tue 8th Mar 2016 19:47
Hi MC
I do appreciate the comment regards my Referendum piece. Just a bit of fluff, but ....
And BOGOF, you couldn't make it up could you
Thanks again
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
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Yes indeed, MC. Fabulous growl of a voice that other JC. I agree about the hiccup in rhythm.
Comment is about The Moorland Train (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
The other JC loved his trains too! I have the CD of an LP
I bought years ago by the Man in Black: Ride This Train.
Great use of a classic Cash tune here by WOL's very own
JC.
I can't agree with AW's suggested line "The driver lets off
some steam" - a bit awkward in rhythm for the song line,
but I'd change the second line to - "When he sees the train guard's flag".
Comment is about The Moorland Train (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
steve mellor
Tue 8th Mar 2016 15:54
Thanks for your thoughts Harry.
I must admit that I wonder if the Tory Party will ever be the same, whichever way the vote goes.
For some reason, I keep getting an image in my brain of Boris taking over from Cameron (if it's a No) and having talks with Trump (as President).
I must go now as I feel a little nauseous
Again, thanks for taking the time to comment
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Jemima Jones
Sun 13th Mar 2016 11:47
good morning Wendy.No problems in replying whenever you like.With respect,you made me laugh this morning,when I saw your profile photo upside down.You haven't emigrated to Australia by any chance have you?
These little mistakes happen don't they Wendy.Take care love,and keep writing those lovely compassionate poems.
Thank you.Jemima.
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