By the time my feet touch the ground my dreams have left me and in such flicking, flashing haste no matter how hard I try to hold onto the simplist image.and yet one word or sight can bring everything into crystal clarity from a dream you may have had many years before.
Great poem, very thought prevoking.
Gus

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Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

I especially like your sample poem, it flows very poetically, and has some intriguing ideas within it. Very nice.
Katy

Comment is about Lenford White (poet profile)

Original item by Lenford White

Hello
Many thanks for your comment on my poem, I think that I wrote previously on somebody else's poem that there are so many different ways to interpret somebody's work, and that was one of the interpretations that I got when I read mine back after I had written it...that it was about a love that would exist even after it had left this world. This poem was actually written about two clients of mine (I am a support worker for disabled and terminally ill people) they are very close, not married or anything like that because they are not able to, but they are quite elderly, and I just saw their love, and wrote what I thought that they felt between them. But thank you so much for your words, and yes I would very much like to read the poem that you mentioned. I will also look at some of your work here :)

Comment is about Lenford White (poet profile)

Original item by Lenford White

Thanks Katy for your comment I agree my poem could be read like that also are you the same katy that has been trying to contact me about razbecks as I noticed you live in hampshire!

Comment is about you will judge us from afar (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Thanks for posting this, Pete.
It's still powerful on the page. Some strong images and great turns of phrase. And the terrific build-up of desperation to get out.

By the way, I'm now going to post the one you THOUGHT I'd read on Sunday.

Best wishes,Rod

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

Hi Gus

The Scouse House
3 Oliver Lane
Birkenhead
Wirral
CH41 6AP
(by Beatties Car Park)

Tel: 0151 647 6247

Admin: 0845 838 2092

It is by the car park of Beatties (House of Fraser) in Brikenhead. Next to Argyle Taxis and opposite the Firemen's Arms pub.

Comment is about Wirral Words tonight (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Hi Mal
Where is the Scouse House?...i.e. postal code

Gus

Comment is about Wirral Words tonight (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Hi Steve.
I really liked the way this took me back to adolescence. Freedoms, first loves, adventures and, of course, the awkwardness. A well-worked snapshot of a certain time, thoughtfully put together. Much admired.
Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about Party to it (blog)

Original item by Steve O'Connor

Hi Chris

Long time since I have heard from you mate. How is life treating you?
Your work is good, so go to make a blog entry and post some poetry. I look forward to hearing from you soon and reading your work.

Comment is about Really want to get my work out there (blog)

Original item by Chris Heidtbrink

thanks for the comment, glad you enjoyed it. x

Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)

Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse

Thanks Gus,
Have you any suggestions as to a final solution -start a war in the Balkans perhaps-big drugs problem on our streets coming from there -good excuse, like Afghanistan !

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Just post like 3 a week, that way its not to many, for all us old working folks, to read and think about.Your doing great!

Comment is about Really want to get my work out there (blog)

Original item by Chris Heidtbrink

Loved the beastiality poem!!! :-) Set me smiling for the day!!!

Comment is about Mia Darlone (poet profile)

Original item by Mia Darlone

Hi Bernard, Thank-you for reading & commenting on 'Initial Name' - very much appreciated - I've left a bit more on the comments page of the poem.
Juniper
x

Comment is about Malpoet (poet profile)

Original item by Malpoet

Hi Gus,
Thanks for your comments on 'Initial Name', much appreciated. Have left a bit more on the comments page of the poem.
I've never met a Gus, but my great-grandfather was Alfred Augustus - he stepped on a mine in 1917 in Ypres.
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Thanks Winston, for your comments on 'Initial Name' - I've left a bit more about it on the comments page of the poem.
Cx

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Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Gus, thank you for your input and suggestions for playstation- they're greatly appreciated. x

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Original item by Gus Jonsson

I think this is so powerful. I know many people interpret writing in lots of different ways, and more often than not this never matches the writers interpretation, but I get the feeling that this is a critcism of society, and of what past generations have done to put you in the position that you find yourself in now. Whatever the intentional meaning, i really enjoyed reading this.

Comment is about you will judge us from afar (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

excellent work. i like how it not only takes you through a damaging relationship - but also how the contrast of the innocent rythm of 'roses are red' and your actual hard hitting words.x

Comment is about Private Rainbow (painbow) (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

i heard this last night as you know ,
it was stunning , your reading was heart stopping pete

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

there's nothing like primitive passion. im sure it's innate in all of us but so few let go to it. great poem x

Comment is about D (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Pete, this poem seems to have grown into what now is an epic and difficult raw journey for the reader. you have managed here to bottle the darkness in a jar... which can't be ignored and if brought out into the light is still a black jar. Stayed in my head all day

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

Good read this Anthony. 1st part especially liked
"She lets them think that they have bought and sold her,
that debts and checkout chain can hold her,
mould her to the corporate scheme"
and the tunneling analogy.
Good tranportation to another place in pt 2 and 3 "In these golden rose-washed hours she wanders, lost in bliss," nice line. Then we return from the dreams at the end with a bump. "The trolley serpent clatters" great. thought the list of items worked well. Lovely format to the story. Most enjoyable. thanks. Winston

Comment is about Peacock Dreams (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Thank you, Val, for your comment on playstation. I appreciate it x

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Hi Val
I was all relaxed until half way through! then woah... liked the relaxing start, the end and enjoyed the ride in the middle. Winston

Comment is about Paradise (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

a very emotive subject well put, and sadly alot more commonplace than the higher profile cases the public get to hear of. your message is clear- we all have a responsibility to report suspected or actual abuse/cruelty. x

Comment is about Will It Ever Cease (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Hello, many thanks for the comment, always useful to have a different perspective and yes, that line does sound alot better...it flows well, so thank you very much! :)

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

"A soft, maple leg lay across my thigh
as we drifted,
it did seem so different to before,
as I said it would,
but she had insisted."

Wonderful!
that is just a tranquil image, love the concept, its great.

Comment is about Paris '46 (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

a nice mantra
this visual imagery
we can all
use
when we need to be
in another place

so warm Val

thanks x x x

Comment is about Paradise (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

hi Melissa, wow, this one sure is a good poem!

Comment is about Glimmer of Love in Glass (blog)

hi melissa, very nice, love the way you did this one!

Comment is about Cyber Villain (blog)

Hi Pete
Thanks for that...would love to Co Host with you ...couldn't think of anyone better... I have a venue in mind for a permanant home...but am still open to other suggestions... I think You would bring ,and I would certainly support and imput in a new and creative partnership presentation. The only small draw back that has slowed me down is that in a few weeks I will need to be hospitalised, albeit a short stay..therafter the worlds me oyster as they say....If you're interested give perhaps we can meet up for a drink and discuss.
email me.
Gus

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

Val, Mike, Chris = Thank you!

Mike,
Never sure wether its too public or appropiate to respond on the comments boxes,i'm fine with it, i think you are.

I'm really sorry to hear the fight is still raging. I know that theres big battles going on 4 you. I hope that the poetry is continuing to help as it does me. I know talking helps, I hope I can be an ear for you somehow. I always have the deepest respect for anyservice man and always the time for anyone who wants to talk. You have the skill to get thru, you may or may not know that people are thinking of you, even ones you dont even know, they are there, I hope the light gets thru, try something totally new this week, do something very simple, but totally new, see what happens. Your poetry is powerhouse.

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

Good work.
Cx

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

Very good. Still miss my gauloise bleu!
Cx

Comment is about Dear Nicotine (blog)

Pete ,your performance and poem last night at Middleton was outstanding. Powerful yet sensitive.Having worked in the NHS for 36years your poem is still in my head, sadly nothing changes.

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

Hi Jordan - thanks for your recent comments. I've seen you perform at Hebden and was astonished at your level of performance around your words. Keep it up.

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Original item by Jordan

Wow! This is a really nice poem. I like the japanese wordage at the end.
Mike

Comment is about jiyuu ni naritai (blog)

Nice one!
Mike

Comment is about Remembrance (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Pete, sorry I couldnt make it to the Olde Boars Head last night. For reasons you write above I wasnt well enough to recite anything. Just a temporary glitch. Occasionally PTSD manifests itself in ways akin to your poem. Nightmares etc. This poem I can really empathise with. For I, for all my service career (and coping with this thing we call society), have spent time on these wards. I do think in the main, a lot of psychiatric patients are not necessarily treated that well. And the language the health professionals can be somewhat daunting. For example, they use the word 'comply', with regard to taking your meds or not. 'Did the patient comply?' If you look the word up in the dictionary, it means 'Yield'. How are survivors and sufferers of a society that put them there in the first place, supposed to 'Yield', within the sphere of society that dictates those that disagree be placed. I think you get my drift. I have been unwell in the past, and have seen many sufferers. Most just needed some love and a hug and empathy, not lingo that frightens in environments akin to a prison. Nice work blue. Speak soon
mike

Comment is about Dreams of Leaving (got to get out) (blog)

Lots of subtext going on here! Like it
Cx

Comment is about Cyber Villain (blog)

would like to help you co-host your new night Gus.
Love your profile pics, have you a list of them? I would like them as wall art, if you saw my house you would understand why.
Pete

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

You are quite the poet with your flow of words and rhyme, and congrats on being published in the poetry anthology.

Comment is about Scabby Knees! (blog)

lol. I hate the dentist too, and this poem fits perfectly with how I feel about sitting in that chair and opening wide. But it's good to have teeth, isn't it? ;)

Comment is about Appointment with fear! (blog)

Original item by Jeffarama!

A breathtaking piece with a beautiful picture to flow poetically with each and every word. Well-done. :)

Comment is about Words (blog)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

fabulous poem, Pete. each moment described and guided through with a beautiful serenity i'd love to be able to replicate. soulful content. lovely x

Comment is about swimming underwater (blog)

Hi Mike,
Blame the mattress, a work of fiction, but I did meet someone who swore that's how she got pregnant, she had five kids. If I had eight kids I'd have no time to write anything.

I really like Noel Hill gritty and thoughtful.

Comment is about Noel Hill (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Sian, what a beautiful piece. that period of adjustment and letting go after he's gone is heartfelt. x

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by sian howell

i agree with Pete. your reality punctures our pampered lives, i'm always holding my breath when reading your war poems- your powerful raw accounts are vital in waking us up to think beyond the sterile and diluted stories fed by the media. humbling stuff, Mike x

Comment is about Noel Hill (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

goodness what pain this conveys , it is remarkable how you have put across the agony of war. sian X

Comment is about Noel Hill (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!