Good poem.

'this Rasputin wanders'

great line!

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Hi Clarissa

I am afraid it would take a small book to explain it properly. It is rather an in joke aimed at those who went on the trip. Sorry about that. It was not at all exotic actually, just a short visit to Bordeaux in France where a dozen drunken British poets rolled around the city for a few days talking rubbish, getting lost and showing off as poets do.

Just a few little translations:

Camel - pure fantasy pilot
My baby - BMI Baby airline
Alabaster - pretty poet and fine musician Alabaster de Plume
Stupid-o-clock - four in the morning
La Manche - The English Channel to us. (Everything in the world is English or British)
What the actress said to the bishop - conversation laden with innuendo.
Tall Guy and Fat Girl - the hands on Gemma's watch.
Strong armed & church of christ - John Armstrong, maths graduate of Christchurch College, Oxford and our trip organiser.
Black burned Jeanne - French heroine Joan of Arc burned by the British for being too like a man.
pluie d'or - golden rain - pee
Bury beret - beri beri - disease of malnutrition - Gemma from Bury wearing a beret - alcoholics get malnutrition - Gemma doesn't drink.
Spanner in the legs - legless drunks - line from Gemma's poem
Shorn and shriven caverners - allusion to poet Sean Kavanagh.
Cambridge - English pub in Bordeaux - host to La Poesie.
Rosbif - French term for the English
Poa Tribe - reference to powerful performance poem by Scott Devon.
Bebe thrown to ground - some drunken discussion in the pub about another of Gemma's poems & the extreme height difference between Scott & Gemma.
River Jordan and 2 horses refers to Julian Jordan and his Citroen 2CV car. The grape and picnic relate to an eccentric French psychologist and his garage of 2CV's variously decorated as grape fields, fish bowls, etc.
Aunt's old pen - Alabaster again
Anarking - Paul Blackburn - the anarchist King of Poetryland
les grenoulles - the frogs - affectionately insulting English term for the French
feathers and gems refers to Alabaster and Gemma. Hues of blue are about the colours of Oxford and Cambridge universities. Oxford is dark blue. John and I went to Oxford and the pub is the Cambridge.
Then the hungover trip home when Gemma's tall guy indicates.

There you go. I think I missed some out, but I am exhausted now.

Comment is about Captain Camel & the Band of Hope (blog)

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Very Nice Malcom, It sounds very exciting,wish I could understand more. Is there any way you could explain more of it to me?Please, it sounds fantastic, like a trip to an exotic place. But then Im an American, I may be missing it all. haha take care

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Why aye man

Narmean

Comment is about Captain Camel & the Band of Hope (blog)

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Tis, too. Fabulous.
It's the way you read it, too, Amanda. Your stage presence is superb and your poetry touches the souls of the listeners, those with ears they can call their own.

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Nice one Malcolm
Ca évoque bien le sejour poetique a Bordeaux, like.

Comment is about Captain Camel & the Band of Hope (blog)

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thanks Sophie
hey ill prob put this up as an MP3 ya into or what?

ill be writing from a diffeent space for a while, if anything just to sharpen my traditional sphere, if such a thing can be done (as I cant find any corners) especially on the moon it being so round these days

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This is very nice Peter, yes many times we all seem to forget our friends, we dont talk much except here and thats so little it may not count. Special friends should not be forgotten and never spoken to as if they are less then the dirt we walk on. I miss special people to. Very nice poem. hope your well.

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I got it Peter, I was always flying to the moon and around as a kid, but Im wondering about the atmosphere thing, you know me always thinking , I know there is not an atmosphere . why dont others? Would that not affect the trip, I mean make it rather fake? I dont know.Curse my brain for thinking to dam much. Great poem though, funny yes funny

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yikes my post has become garbled Sophie. SOmehow a segment has ended up at the end.
c o n f u s e
sorry!

Comment is about back to the moon (blog)

So you made it to the moon?
Are you not going back then?

It's just that it seemd a heck of a lot of trouble
and a gargantuan amount of cash
to get there
I just assumed you would be going back every day?

"well no, there were no indians there"

Oh nothing to kill, I see.
No one to bully, I see

Bit boring was it?

"er apart from playing spacehoppers and crashing the lunar buggy, yes"

Makes sense, yep.
I noticed when you er, put the rockets up, you know tossed them up to the sky, it kinda of seems like a big metal prick, like a needle.

Pointing up from the launch pad at the labia sky.
You fucked the planet
now fuck space.

Does that make sense or am I being an arse, Buzz (aldrin)?

well the whole thing kinda freaked me out mahhhn Im still getting over the trip.

They dressed us up cool too, in bacofoil suits! wow mahhn far out sixties (sixty) fashion. Mary quant was gunning for us at one point.


anyhow what I was trying to say Pete was Sophie could have joined us, hell yes I could have shown all the poets a thing or two up her lookin down an the world. We the yankees beat the russian bear ya know!

what Pete was tryin to say is
we conquered the four corners of the earth
found the moon
pissed on it (to mark our ground)
got bored
and left

rather like the proverbial concrete lamp-post!

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SOPHIE! sorry its a fun way of explain the poem!!! you see any more or I made it worse!!!!!

:-)


Pete


oh, ok, well it looked good down here, until your rocket had disaperaed into the heavens.

Did you meet god BTW? and How was he? Elvis perhaps?

Oooh no nothing like that.
We did put on our black and white helmets, hard ones.
and before they ask, no they are not available in pink (tut you and your phallic jokes Pete as bad As Mr thomas)

well talking of helmets, and things one eyed Japanese mean anything to you?

Your nuclear bomb kinda put a stop to the imperialists, did you see any up there?

Pete, you are gettin offensive, we only defend!
we pre packed our jet pac and the frozen yankee flag. We had to make the flag look like it was flying so we created a frozen one. There is no atmosphere you see. (apart from spacehopper parties)

Comment is about back to the moon (blog)

Hi Pete, I read it 3 times, a bit of a challenge at first but then eureka!
I like it.
Was it all faked? Only Lady Moon knows the answer.

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Thanks for reading John!

Comment is about Rachel Fox (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel Fox

Yeah. Cranky and rusting. No gears.

Thanks Pete.

Comment is about Canoedling (blog)

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I have to agree with Melanie. I felt a sustained rhythm in there too.

Comment is about Ashes and dust (blog)

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The 'Golden Porridge Gun' is awarded to Mr Peter Crompton. Many layers indeed. The phallic symbols, the unnecessary penetration and soiling of a beautiful thing for Man's own gratification and nothing much else. The anti-climatical experience felt by Nations...Onwards towards Mars. The girl standing at the bar sipping her Astro cocktails saying silently, "Come and get me Big Boys.
Unmanned probing is good - but not like the real thing".
Love it.

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Darwinian evolution
is a truly wonderful thing.
Transforming a prison officer
from grafting to ex-pat bling.


thats a great stanza Malcolm.

rolls out so well.

you are a poetry machine

Comment is about Canoedling (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Thanks.
Hey yes Ill read this one out.
Its really fun to read I tried it just after writing it.

I may add some subtle sound fx

wonder if theyll class this as racist
i think its the closest i have got yet

as usual and as the great Darren Thomas says, layers and lines within lines within lines

take a look for the clues
x
pete

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Hello Phil

Another beauty from you Romantic Poet- Beautifully penned. Thank you for the love poetry, each line is very beautifully written.

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

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Hello Richard

I am attracted to your style of writing. You have a special gift for a beautiful expressions in each of your poems. The feelings and emotions to your stanzas are very profound, and the poem it is easy to read. Thank you for another great piece of poetry. Really great read!

Regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about Find Me (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

HI peter, this is great ! are you going to read it outloud?You should put it on youtube so I can hear how it would be read.

Comment is about back to the moon (blog)

Hello Mr. Malpoet

Beautifully written with a great advice to the beautiful animal - The Bull.
Loved the line when you wrote...

"the butchers has gone down hill
since the supermarket came.
Don't go there.

Great imagination. Enjoyed reading your poem.

Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

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HI, Richard

Beautiful entry! Loved the romantic stanza.

"A poet walks across the shore,
Shoeless, reciting a song
The beach is empty, the sea
Crashing against the rocks,
Washes up a beautiful woman
She’s naked
Golden hair, white skin,
An English rose
He hair covers her soft breasts
He gives her mouth to mouth
She coughs, chokes,
Sea water leaves her lungs.
She gasps and falls into his arms.
Angel eyes look into his,
His hands run down her face."

*Then the ending well wrapped.*

"She bathes him in the calm sea,
Under the skies watchful eye,
He is baptised,"

Excellent poem - pleasure to read.!


Kind Regards,
Zuzanna

Comment is about The poet and his muse (blog)

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thanks pete, quite a comment

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thanks guys, im il work on part two!

Comment is about God Is A Welch (working progress) (blog)

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thanks! glad you like

Comment is about Ashes and dust (blog)

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WOW!!!! What a fantastic poem - thank you for the pleasure.
xx

Comment is about God Is A Welch (working progress) (blog)

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Hi Peter,
I like the beautiful simplicity of this poem, you look very dapper in your tux in the pics on the gallery - hope you enjoyed your birthday on Sunday. Best wishes.
Magi
xxx

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HI Richard, this is great! I to love it and would love to know if there is more. Its like a movie, I could see it all! thanks

Comment is about God Is A Welch (working progress) (blog)

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Nice villanelle on radiohead.
They don't pop up in many poems.

Comment is about Rachel Fox (poet profile)

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Hey steve

Welcome to the site. Fantastic poems. I love the way they suggest a deeper, more complex meaning to what is written...intriguing.

Thanks for the thoughtful comment you put on my blog.

Have fun in the land of poetry and prose.

Mel
x

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Hey Hannah, I love this poem. It is very atmospheric: the joy of colour against the drab, harsh, inhospitable background of this urban churchyard. Your eyes were painted, almost like rose-tinted specs giving you a brighter perspective on an otherwise sombre place with a sombre name, though you don't menton it: Blackley: the old ICI dyeworks.
favourite lines: we watched the stars switch on, writing the dyeworks into the sky.
Julian

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'pacing on puffed out feet'

nice layer and connection
(puffed out reminded me of a breeding ritual! )
many connections

I was curious to the absent father
made me wonder with your experience
if many were alone in birth

I saw the landing as the arrival

i like the puzzles of poetry
our own intepretations

thanks!

Comment is about landings (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

b l u s h central!

Thanks for the dedication!

Well you know maybe we can continue the theme.

the birth idea features in a lot of my early writing, I hope we can inspire each other poets out there!!!

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Original item by Carol Falaki

clever
dark once again
the symptom of a tortured mind
if only for a while Richard

this poem is the antidote
for how i feel
in these transient times

thanks

Comment is about Live On (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

absolutely.
this is brilliant.
Dark and demonic the devil dog-

Richard from the clearing fog
I saw the mutts eyes
just one look
to instill
the deathly chill
of a hanging rope


more please. this place you have taken me is like a scene from a film. it is wonderful.

thanks

Comment is about God Is A Welch (working progress) (blog)

Original item by Richard Brooks

Hey Phil

I can only sing Darren's song on this one...you romantic you.

Lovely

Mel

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Wow Richard! This is really powerful.

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Original item by Richard Brooks

Hi Phil - I've just looked up the words 'Old Romantic' in the OED. All it says is - Phil Golding!
Good stuff.

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great! thinking outside the box is what i like about this poem

Comment is about Soul (article)

Thankyou so much Mel and Zuzanna for your comments about my poem.

I have visited Japan, and plan to move there in May this year, and I hope my insights will help me to adapt to this very different culture.

Lots of love

Belinda xx

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