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Falling

When I close my eyes
and stop breath
space becomes wider, like falling,
wider than the grey clouds
spread, uniform,
to the end of the world
like mud in water,
wider than you and I,
and loneliness is falling backwards
through the darkness of a void present
with this high pitched sound
of a whistle between two wires
so stretched that touching cuts.
I fall backwards, sightless,
in a dreamlike slow motion,
like not breathing,
and sometimes darkness is not
that anger springing from within,
upwards from your guts
with the sharp moves of a hungry wolf,
when you don’t know who is there
waiting in the dark, o so silent,
to hold you in your fall
when you close your eyes
and breath stops.

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Comments

Deborah Jordan Bailey

Wed 28th Oct 2009 13:46

"loneliness is falling backwards
through the darkness of a void"
i lack skills to make constuctive comments but i know that i want to keep this poem and your words linger in my mind and flow together beautifully like the meeting of the waters.deb

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 24th Jul 2009 09:54

I do too, Amanda. I needed to read it more than once, but everything fell into place with more attention...it's really good, pulls you in (or down) with you; very well constructed.

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Wed 22nd Jul 2009 19:44

I like this.

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