Thank you Cynthia , it is a light-hearted commentary on life, how one second or one word can change things, also how misinterpretation is so easily made.
I like the comment on keeping a better movement with the ending ee sound. Brilliant , thanks.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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And your sense of humour just keeps popping. I think it's terrific. In my city the 'council' members had to remove a street sign which they had changed from 'Cul de sac' to 'Dead End' because they hadn't allowed for the prominent Funeral Parlour on the corner.
Janet's right; funny signs are open game.

Comment is about Well Shod (blog)

Common sense is hard to maintain against the bombardment of commercial 'love icons'. Well put, encouraging your readers to consider the really important things about loving, but ... perhaps along with some of the other 'romantic' trappings which women do appreciate. It's a good poem.

Comment is about Love Isn't.... (blog)

A heart-toucher, Emily. We, the readers, will supply our own appropriate pronouns.

Comment is about he has a sleeping disease (blog)

I can't tell you how many times i've read 'my space'. Still discovering something new each on each read. I love the subtle rhymes in it particularly and the repeated slowing down lines. (Repeated doesn't feel quite the right word but hopefully you'll see what i meant by that comment). :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Emily
I'm not a great commentator, but I love 'simple' poems such as this. It says bucket loads about caring in such a short space.
It reminded me (in some ways) of a poem by Langston Hughes - 'Dream'. Have a look if you get the chance.
Steve M.

Comment is about he has a sleeping disease (blog)

Hi Izo....U R correct....a great deal of sadness in the last line.. very intuitive..

Many Thanks
Gusxx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Cheers Chris!.although you've just made my view of work even more hateful with your admittedly true comments! Lol

Comment is about WORK (blog)

Thanks for the comment Janet! Perhaps my idea of a "Luxury" bubble bath is a bit old-hat then!Haha

Comment is about Love Isn't.... (blog)

Spoken like a true man!
Seriously though Jon boy, there's so many truths and sadnesses too in this poem for the way life and love is, or isn't as you perceive love to be..

This is a great poem and i love it.
Janet.x

ps. My bath has lavender, patchouli and ylang-ylang in it please. Strawberries belong in a dish with cream. :-)

Comment is about Love Isn't.... (blog)

Hi Janet
Are you talking about me or the poem?
x Steve M. x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

I agree, very enigmatic and one which has put several thoughts running through my mind. I know what it means to me but it could mean so much more to someone else so i'll leave it there.
Interesting piece this.

Janet.x

Comment is about Sweet Sixteen (blog)

I bet there's loads of little poems could be written about signs in streets and shop windows.
I'll be looking out for some now after this funny little observation Stephen.

Janet.x

Comment is about Well Shod (blog)

:-)

thanks very much for your considered response to my comment. It's really very informative. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about garside (poet profile)

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True. Seen yesterday in Huddersfield.

Comment is about Well Shod (blog)

Thanks for your comment Winston - look forward to receiving it. Yes I am well - a little tired as usual and cross with myself for not having written anything - but fine on the whole.
Will hopefully bump into you at some venue soon. Hope all is well with you and that the boat is still water tight. x

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Cynthia

thanks again for reading and making comment

i am practising the fledglin guantanamo approach to poetry ; )

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Anthony - since when did a man ever ejaculate anything that approximated sense?
John - love, love, love this one. It brings to mind all those boring biology lessons looking at the anvil, the stirrup and the cochlea. This one obviously reverberates with many and definitely hits the funny bone. x

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Short, sweet and funny Steve x

Comment is about Well Shod (blog)

I have left more comments on "On Meeting a Poet" Thanks Win

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

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Anthony is spot on with his neo-stereotypical view of Northern monkeys.
Or is he?
Maybe the girl had truly big ears.

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

cynthia, thankyou for the best review I have ever gotten. i am touched that you appreciate that poem, as regarding usage of words - it really is whatever spurts out of my heart and if its there, then its right for me at the time. i rarely touch a poem after i have written the first time, i really like the magic of it and greatly appreciate your work.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Getting ready to use my WOLOP vote at the right time this time ! lol.

hope all is well with you ,Win x

Comment is about WOLOP Award (blog)

Original item by Isobel

OMG Anthony!
LOL
You are indeed a funny man : )

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

thax 4 your great comments re 'All Kissed Me Down'... hope my suggestions re your Fly to |the Moon were acceptable.


Many Thanks
gus

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Very moving, Val. Both my children have Australian partners, my son will marry his girlfriend next Easter, and whilst I think both have chosen wonderful people to share their lives with, part of me is a little worried that they'll all run off down under. But - anything that makes them happy!
Cx

Comment is about A Mothers Soliloquy (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

:o )

Comment is about relapse (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Love this! Had a tune playing in my head whilst I was reading ... Easy, like a Sunday morning..... - the poem gave me that same, laid back feeling. And the relationship sounds like something to be cherished too.
Don't particularly like the title though - for me, it doesn't quite fit.
Cx

Comment is about Punanis, Peckers and Poems (blog)

Original item by Mia Darlone

On Meeting a Poet has now some explanatory notes attached. Have a look and tell me what you think. Thanks for the comment in the first place.

Win

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

What's that you say John?

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Ouch! Big ears?
Cx

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

For me, one of your best; a little less esoteric in structure, with hard-hitting truth using memorable imagery. Isn't 'draping' a gorgeous word? Do you ever hesitate to use certain words even from one poem to another? Regardless of time lapse?

Comment is about Wife (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Your sarcasm scintillates. I take your 'point'.

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Ello Gus, thank you for reading Shoormal and making your kind comments, I'm happy to see you're back here again, and you're front..ha ha..sorry i nicked your bad joke..Debz xx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

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i meant taking the time to make such nice comments .. : )) D x

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

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HI Dave, thank you for reading and taking the time to comment on my poem, Porous, deb xx

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

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Hi John,

And I always thought that those shell-like appendages were for whispering sweet nothings into. Maybe the Kama Sutra has a specialist Northern edition - or maybe you were trying (in a manly, misogynistic, Neanderthal fashion) to f**k some sense into her. :-)

Regards,
A.E.

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Hi Janet

Liked this, added to greatly by the dedication.

win

Comment is about No Title. (blog)

Hi Neil. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on "On meeting a Poet". Win

Comment is about Neil West (poet profile)

Original item by Neil West

I could argue that last point but i won't.
There are some lines in this which could possibly upset certain people if taken the wrong way. Personally i enjoyed reading it. In this bag, i think the rhyme and form it takes allows you to get away with saying something you want to get off your chest but without aiming your grievances at anyone in particular.
Well done i think.

Janet.x

Comment is about Why is a Body Bag Black? (blog)

Original item by Brian Wood

I'm much the same as others with regards to first person etc...
I have found on my own poetic trail of discovery and learning that the majority of poems written in the first person is 'taken' to be personal experience of the writer.
If a writer doesn't mind what the reader knows or thinks they know from the content, then it makes little difference to the poem but can make a difference to the type of comments you will receive. I guess you should do what feels right for you Nicky on this one. If and when it feels right for you is the key.

Interesting reading other peoples comments.
Janet.x

Comment is about The Poem That Should Never Have Been A Poem (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Are you coming up from the dark side with this one John?

Laughter in your poetry isn't my usual re-action but laugh i did.
Janet.x

Comment is about A Short Meeting With My One True Love (blog)

Original item by John Togher

Hi Cynthia,
in answer to your question on my poem.
I don't know either. I can say in all honesty that the poem wrote itself. It sat on my desk top for two days before posting it because i thought there was more to come. I know how it makes me feel and i now have some idea of what it means to me personally but the fact that Nicky and Francine and others saw something for themselves in it says it isn't just for me and was right to share it. Whatever anyone takes from it or wants to see in it is for them to see and decide for themselves what it means to them.

In this case as they say - I just write the stuff. :-)
Thanks for your interest and comments.
Janet.x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Andy. Thankyou for commenting on "On meeting a Poet" glad you liked it. Win

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Would agree with Janet. Great to see humour on this site - not enough people do it. Get some more stuff up quick.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

You are probably struggling with a title for this becauseit is something that should never have happened - hence the poem that should never have been. I understand exactly where Darren is coming from with his advice. The poem is so raw that it hurts to read it and the reader feels like a powerless intruder. I am of the opinion though that certain poems, once written, should be left alone - they are as they are and it feels almost like a violation to mess about with them. When and where to use 1st and 3rd person is a useful thing to consider though and certainly something you might like to think about for future cathartic poetry. When you use 3rd person it does seem to attract more readers - possibly cos they are less embarrased by talking about the emotions you have raised - so much easier when you can put distance between you - as Darren commented.

Comment is about The Poem That Should Never Have Been A Poem (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows

Then put up some more. It really did make me titter. To be honest i wouldn't be able to tell a rubbish poem from a great one but i know what i like.

Janet.x

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

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Ah but my pic was taken at the Manchester green room theatre slam event earlier this year. What's your excuse for the shades?

I see you live between Bolton and Wigan. Westhoughton maybe? I know someone by the name of West in that area. (Jimmy).

Janet.x

Comment is about Neil West (poet profile)

Original item by Neil West

Thanks Janet. There's plenty more where that came from - all equally rubbish!
John

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

I have toyed with the idea of Darren's, of maybe transferring this piece to the third person, and at present I cannot find the 'want' within me to do this at the present time. Maybe at some point in the future I will, and out of sheer curiosity. It would be interesting to hear your opinions on this as I am generally of the school of thought that believes that a moment, a thought , an expression of emotion, or an idea captures a moment or a certain point in time That may be, a second, a minute, a day, a week, a month, a year or even an era.

And I have been troubled with giving it a title, I cannot dredge up anything that I feel fits, so, It remain ' the poem that was never mean't to be( or should never have been) a poem'.

I feel humbled by the constructive and heartfelt feedback that I have received. And those of you who have previously commented on the pieces that I have offered, know that I like to respond to everyones comment.

Taking me a little while at the moment, because I delve into your poetry.

Comment is about The Poem That Should Never Have Been A Poem (blog)

Original item by Nicky Burrows