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Being


I am Being
in Time
I am feeling
in Time
I exist
in the flux
transient
powerless
to Time
I am Being
in Nature
I am form
In Nature
I exist
in the elements
volatile
vulnerable
to Nature
I am Being
in Nothingness
I am unformed
in Nothingness
but I exist
in the void
orderless
defenceless
in Nothingness
I am Being
I exist
temporal
in chaos
searching
in Nothingness.

◄ Single Malt Tears

Critical Obfuscation of the Poet Critic ►

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 21:05

Hi Nicky, just catching up, really like this,mainly because I don't think I would ever dream of writing it, brave writing and left me with an uncomfortable feeling in a way, suppose you meant that - the feeling of restriction, anyway good stuff, hope to see you soon Jeff X

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Nichola Burrows

Wed 21st Oct 2009 21:37

Don't know if I want to do that with this one Cynthia, It's supposed to be stark and rigid, if it wasn't, I don't think it could contain the 'philosophical content', it would become airy fairy and philosophical rambling. Dave was very astute in his comment, however I am more in tune with Heidegger than Sartre (even though his theories on relationships in 'Being and Nothingness' fascinated me), and their writings stem from the same existentialist mode of thinking.

Funnily enough it was Heiddegger who argued that poetry and deep philosophical thinking can bring deeper insight into what it means to be in the world.x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 21st Oct 2009 20:04

Nicky, I would jockey the lines out of rigid order - not to get carried away - but less military.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 20th Oct 2009 17:28

Fascinating. Well structured, as others have said. It achieves the difficult objective of getting philosophical ideas into poetic form and helping the reader to FEEL what it means to come down on one side of the debate. It seems to me (though I may be wrong) that this one goes right back through the existentialism/essentialism debate to early Greek philosophers (Thales etc) playing around with concepts of being and becoming.

Echoes of that old bit of fun -
“To be is to do”–Socrates.
“To do is to be”–Jean-Paul Sartre.
“Do be do be do”–Frank Sinatra.

I'm with Sinatra - sounds like you're with Sartre?

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Mon 19th Oct 2009 22:49

Well thought out this one i think Nicky.
I can certainly connect with it. Good stuff for me too. :-)

Janet.x

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Andy N

Mon 19th Oct 2009 21:03

bet that would prove a bugger to perform.. i would get it totally back to front! good stuff!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 19th Oct 2009 11:16

Brilliant, Nicky, in thought and word choice and structure.

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