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The girl and the lake

She reflects upon the surface

As the cold wet arms of the lake

Take her in their deadly embrace.

She feels the cold tendrils curl

Around her calves, her thighs, her waist.

 

The water pales her skin,

It darkens her lips

It shadows her clear, serene eyes,

ecstatic in its aqueous grip.

 

The darkness envelops her,

the currents caress her

as the lake takes her under;

binds her in a fatal matrimony.

 

A cold, waxen and bloated wife,

torn from her former life.

The lake is a jealous lover,

needy and clasping and hungry.

It pulls and it tugs; an insistent caress.

 

The flow of the undertow

balloons her white dress

as the life finally flows from her eyes

and bubbles rise from her throat

carrying the last of her sighs.

The lake is a jealous lover.

◄ Titanium Butterfly

Pandora's Box ►

Comments

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Steven Kenny

Sat 5th Jun 2010 22:09

Thanks for your comments Darren and Emma! :-)

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Emma Robinson

Fri 21st May 2010 10:23

also no conks- good work!

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Emma Robinson

Fri 21st May 2010 10:23

I love it! And I did think it was about a suicuide, i enjoyed the slow verbs you've used which give the impression of her gradually sinking in which is why I thought it was suicide I think, ace and sad and i'll send you a link to another poem by Gillian Clarke which this reminds me of. :)

darren thomas

Wed 19th May 2010 20:58

Hi Kenny - you're using a colourful lexicon in your work - and the last line, although simple, has resonance.

Nice one.

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