thnks Dave, I will...had to let it out now though...Steve

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Whoaah! You did it.
What a fantastic poem.
I like the coals of fire line too
And the doctrinal mire.
I think I've plodded through that myself on occasion.

Comment is about To plumb the depth of soul ( a villanelle) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

A powerful blend of longing, beauty, history and righteous anger. My French is very limited but the poem does seem to flow beautifully in the original language. It would be good to hear an audio version, though perhaps difficult to arrange

Comment is about Oh ! Ma ville natale (blog)

Original item by Poetry in Translation Group

A very moving tribute to home-land and country.
The sixth stanza particularly i found quite emotionally powerful but the whole thing has some wonderful imagery.

(I needed the translation to understand it in my ignorance of foreign languages. I could imagine this being read out with considerable feeling.) Very enjoyable.

Comment is about Oh ! Ma ville natale (blog)

Original item by Poetry in Translation Group

Oh Cynthia
This simply devine so simple yet so clever..

Wonderful, your writing always delights me.

Augusta x

Comment is about To plumb the depth of soul ( a villanelle) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is absolutley astounding in its depth. I love it Cynthia. :-)))
A fantastic analogy to life itself and the journey of the human soul. Wow!

Janet.x

Comment is about To plumb the depth of soul ( a villanelle) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fantastic poem Cynthia, your best ever I think, and I've only read it once and I just KNOW it will get better! I also feel I can totally empathise with the sentiments. I'm feeling those coals of fire at the moment. Ow! xx

Comment is about To plumb the depth of soul ( a villanelle) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mr Carr, I have taken the plunge. Thanks for your encouragement. Making this was an adventure!

Comment is about To plumb the depth of soul ( a villanelle) (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is so good, Ann, touching and embracing us all.

Comment is about butter (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I actually read the whole poem in French, not realizing there would be a translation. It is a strong, sensitive poem, and the translation is very good.

Comment is about Oh ! Ma ville natale (blog)

Original item by Poetry in Translation Group

On Monday's I fall in love is impressive, particularly the image of wet fairy lights magnifying the mosaic rain.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Winston

Just wanted to say thank you I colelcted the CD from sorting office this week and loved your recording for Charlie Pike, it was very authentic with sentiment detatched and envoking the words perfectly.

Top man !

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Note: other supermarkets are available. I'm sure witches shop at Tescos too! xx

Comment is about be witched (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Lisa,
thankyou for the little feedback- very humbled.
keep up the good work!
Marianne

Comment is about Lisa Milligan (poet profile)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

Hi Ann, I'm glad you liked the Kingfisher poem. Final lines are very important, I think. I added the last line some time after I'd written the rest of it, and found that it had changed the meaning in some way - but that I thought it worked. Btw, I must say that I find the new profile picture quite distracting! I don't think you had been showing us the mud maid's best side before! Greg x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Andy,
Thanks for your comment on 'weeping willow'. Glad you enjoyed it. x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

made me think of the end off romeo and juliet, except where juliet kills herself instead off romeo... very sad stuff but i enjoyed the content...

Comment is about Weeping Willow (blog)

im glad you enjoyed it and also that the audio came out ok. thanks for reading and listening and thanks for the comment, its appreciated.

Comment is about the innocent cliffs (blog)

Original item by chris dommett

Hi, I'm glad you enjoyed reading 'weeping willow'. Thanks for taking the time out to comment and for the wonderful praise! x

Comment is about Lisa Milligan (poet profile)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

Gus, your such a dear doll! xxxx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Enjoyed this - very droll

Comment is about A Model Husband (blog)

Hi Graham - I guess I was hoping for a violent and dramatic contrast rather than coarse, but I am sure you have a point. I know you have a very sensitive ear for language - I remember you didn't like my microscope in another poem. Do appreciate you taking the time to think about it. xx And thanks Liam. xx

Comment is about goddess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

How I have missed you!

Thank you as always Gus for your input and comments on my latest,
'Into love's shadow'...
I did edit... not sure about the one line though - we'll see.

Merci : )
xxx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

As always Isobel, I appreciate your support, as well as your funny and insightful comments.

Merci pour tout : )
xxx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

I read many of your works and wish I could comment on any one of them. The truth is your writing is up out in the stratosphere somewhere that no mere mortal can put into words your brilliance. Consider me a fan.

Lisa

Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

this is full of charisma and i enjoyed it from start to finish

Comment is about 20 Years from Now (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hi Lisa, thanks for your comments on 'Elusive Old Friend', much appreciated. I do tend to write in rhyming forms more often than not, it's a bit of a family tradition really, my grandfather having written his life story in verse :)

Comment is about Lisa Milligan (poet profile)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

good piece, its hard not to think negative wen our race is a bunch ov ignorant idiots and our planet is a spinning ball of hypocracy

Comment is about Snow Shoes (blog)

I love "Only Fond". I've found myself there more than once. What I like most is how you've captured what it's like...what's going on in our heads as we fight it. I think the lines:

"but I can fall in fond

or maybe fall in very fond"

are brilliant. And I believe I will be recalling those lines in my head next time I find:

"I should not fall

head over heels

head in the clouds

off my head

in love with you"

Thanks for that. I'm sure one day I will need it!!

Lisa

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I don't know if it's the current season, but this one I felt in my slowly thawing bones! I admire how you rhyme because that's not something that comes naturally to me and you've made it look so easy here! It's hard to pick a favorite verse, but if I had to, it would be the first one. Really nicely written. Love it.

Lisa

Comment is about Elusive Old Friend (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

You have captured here what happens to so many of us...I have lived in that place. You have the acknowledgement that the feelings are fantasy and your own, that he doesn't even know (which always causes me such frustration)...the stellar line is "But not necessarily unsatisfying." So much honesty and sincerity in that line. And the last 3 lines...that's the truth and the reality. There's comfort in knowing I'm not the only one that can get caught up in everything you've described in this piece. Love it.

Lisa

Comment is about Letter in a Drawer (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is tragically beautiful. I, too, love the weeping willow and find it a large part of the piece's beauty.

You did such a great job with each verse. It is very tightly written and there isn't a weak spot in any of it. I especially love the first verse.

Strong, well written and heartbreaking. Nicely done.

xxLisa

Comment is about Weeping Willow (blog)

Hello Ann. An interesting piece. I found the airplane and missile analogies a little coarse for such a lyrical piece. Lovely idea.

Comment is about goddess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

magnificent.

Comment is about goddess (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Cynthia, glad you liked 'Just Passin’ Thro’ (Still Got The Blues for You)'Win :-)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Cynthia
Thanks for the comments on "20 Years from Now". I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thankyou for all those great comments and advice..I have edited to 'a pleasure of anticipation' and yes it does roll off the tongue smoothly! The inspiration for this is the relationship between myself and my violin.

Comment is about It's Easy to Believe (blog)

I can see the influence of your loss in the raw and poignant way you express yourself. My book 'My Father's Eyes Were Blue' is mainly about loss and I feel I can relate.

Keep hold of the pen and paintbrush and it will help your loved ones live beneath the eyelids in your dreams.

Comment is about Alison Mary Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Alison Mary Dunn

So true what you say about friends! A powerful start Alison. Welcome to WOL.

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Pretty pictures
Painted scrawls
A myriad of colours on city walls

Spelling out her name

Rose
A pole dancing Queen
Only Seventeen

Can’t your hear the drums?

Fernando is keeping up a good face

Listen
It’s just jazz

Comment is about Take Two... (article)

The rhyming schemes in some of your work can sometimes make the poem seem just a little bit at odds with the subject matter.
This one for me, as Francine says is tragic at the end and the message is very strong and there's something about it which resonates with me.
I love it because of the willow tree which sways in my visual scene in it.
It's a bit like the gruesome death one you wrote where generally, people wouldn't associate as being poetic and yet there is absolutely nothing offensive in your use of words.
I find your poetry very intriguing. Keep 'em coming and go with the flow. I'm loving it.
Janet.x

Comment is about Weeping Willow (blog)

I enjoyed this too. I heard the music and the drum beat and happily danced in the dream.

I learn a lot from Darrens comments though i don't always understand the technical terms he uses such as 'velar consonant' etc..
'pleasurable anticipation' seems to roll from the tongue when emphasis is on the 'an' as i read it aloud (AN- tici-PA-tion but i would probably have written is as pleasure of anticipation too.
How about an audio?

ps this for me is a great example of how the comments section in blogs should really be like. A good mix of thoughts, feelings, observations and helpful knowledgeable know how.
:-)

Comment is about It's Easy to Believe (blog)

I liked this a lot too Stella. It went down very well when performed.

Comment is about It's Easy to Believe (blog)

Hi Cynthia

hope you are well - thanks as ever for reading

spayed is the word i wanted for this poem


thanks x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

All across the city
The writing was on the wall
For the Pole, who
Between her fingers,
Rose to such heights
That, war-blushed,
He could turn
The other cheek
At their finger pointing.

I prefer a single image when stimulating free writing. The idea, for me, is to trigger a single spark from which their own ideas flow. Having more than one feels less like stimulus and more like trying to satisfy the tutor’s choice of photo. But perhaps that's just me?

Comment is about Take Two... (article)

Purely from your seemingly deliberate choice of words and their phonaesthetic quality, you have highlighted how an awareness of the difference between a voiceless velar consonant <music> <thick> is contrasive with the sounds of <smoothly> <compelling> etc.

This is great.

The phrase 'pleasureable anticipation' however, is then made to 'sound' like it's riding over cobbles in a wonky wheeled shopping trolly.

'in the (a) pleasure of anticipation' (?) has more in common with the smoothness of the other words in use toward the end of the piece.

I enjoyed it - it stopped me watching Match of the Day.

Comment is about It's Easy to Believe (blog)

SCRATCHITTI

The toys have visited
Going cap cap cap like the OCDs they misruly are

Decisions are backjumps
They’re landfill in the lungs
Make one, break one, they’re neither heaven nor slam
Sh1t no,
You can commit them like stickers

Me, I was
Almost all city queen till, buff,
my gallery gets massacred
Holler props to the anti-hat for that.

Sunlight registered on the Mohs scale of mineral hardness
When I went racking for cannons

Restocked on potential,
I baled a soft rose/ bombed an epiphany –
Which was this:
All Nature is grafflage

So, me, I leaned into a wall till my face was a throw up
& went legal

Comment is about Take Two... (article)

I like this one Stella - it is so very sensual and you performed it beautifully at the Bards.

Comment is about It's Easy to Believe (blog)

I like this one Ann. You use a simple little childhood trick to weave such a tale. It catches you cos deep down I guess we all want to think we are special. To find out you aren't - just another bod - can be the most hurtful thing of all.

Comment is about butter (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Really liked this one Stella

Comment is about Watching Kumar Work (blog)