Excellently put with 'pith and vinegah'.

There have been other poems on this idea. It might make a good subject for a shared 'theme'.

Comment is about The End of my Soul on Saturday Nights (blog)

Original item by David Mac

Thanks !
(I have no idea what the offside rule is :D )

Comment is about Melanie Coady (poet profile)

Original item by Melanie Coady

I know that I know what I know. Yes? This is excellent, Kealan, well-considered, bold, honest and provoking in the best way. The opening two lines are an effective hook to catch the reader's interest, and to begin your theme. The final two lines are apt and forceful. It is interesting that your conclusion of a 'Non-god' rests on the cycle of seasons only, but it does make a strong point, and perhaps, in one poem, that is all you wanted. The lower-case 'god' in the title is very clever.

Comment is about How Can god Be When Spring Rains (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Many lines are simply beautiful. A very well-crafted poem in general. I can't quite decide whether it is a father's incestuous relationship with a daughter, or just first love between teenagers as 'to rob me of an apology due' seems to imply. Whatever, the diction breathes sensuality. Don't trash it.

Comment is about Untitled (blog)

Really like the spare simolicity of this. There's no sense of the wrier straining to make us feel something, just a bunch of simple words: reminds me of H.D. -

I like its simple imagism - the 'direct treatment of the thing' of it.

Comment is about foxheart (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Spare, tight, essential, a hint of something lost.
It's sad yet uplifting, wonderfully unsentimental whilst evoking sentiment.
Quartz is hard, cold; a heart that beats no more, yet the life that burgeons around it, is it willing the heart back to life?
And the whole hints at a poet's heart hovering between stone and life.
Blimey, see what your lovely poem did!

Comment is about foxheart (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Powerful stuff Pete and as each day passes with the situation in Japan your poem gets more and more relevant. I hope I get to see you perform this one.

Excellent

Comment is about I am Mox (blog)

After re-reading this, I don't like it. I'm trashing it.

Comment is about Untitled (blog)

hey laura...its nearly monday! will see you for bunfly recording debriefing sesh. ill bring my violin.
louise coulson mentioned getting heads together to organise the reading tents for imploding festival. havent written anymore of the childrens stuff so maybe we could have a chat about that.
see you then x

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hi Melanie - glad you enjoyed When Man Has Gone - thanks for taking the time to read it x

Comment is about Melanie Coady (poet profile)

Original item by Melanie Coady

brilliant huni xx feel like i should hug you?!lol

Comment is about After All The Fucking Shit Has Already Fucking Hit You (blog)

Original item by David Mac

sooo true! xx

Comment is about The End of my Soul on Saturday Nights (blog)

Original item by David Mac

Ha - and what has now happened to Haven - is nothing safe on your profile?

Funnily enough I read it today but was too short on time to comment. I was going to come back and say that it obviously wasn't autobiographical. Anyone with a decent knowledge of Barbara Cartland (as the teenage moi was) would know that her books would never have entertained the union of a male farm-hand with a monied female. Far more likely for an ordinary girl to find a french/italian count or some english nobleman and be swept off her feet - into a four poster bed - not a hay stack.

I enjoyed the poem - though I needed to revisit to comment on style. I did wonder whether such a woman really existed. She seemed too happy and contented in her little bubble - not lonely at all. xx

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

ha ha ha brilliant hun xx

Comment is about Old Alfie (blog)

wow jesus hun ur fukin gud!! xx miss u here in waterford

Comment is about Health (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

wow kealan hun xx

Comment is about How Can god Be When Spring Rains (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

wow! xx

Comment is about Untitled (blog)

Incredibly powerful poems Anthony. I always enjoy reading your work. I have read these several times now, and find more in them each time.
Cate xx

Comment is about alpha et omega (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Rebecca many thanks for commenting on When Man Has Gone which me the chance to visit your site and indeed enjoy your work - best regards

Comment is about Rebecca Audra Smith (poet profile)

Original item by Rebecca Audra Smith

hello Tim, my thanks go out to you for your kind comments on 'Stars Would Gladly Cast Their Gleam' - much appreciated :) Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Tom Harding (poet profile)

Original item by Tom Harding

Thanks both. This is from a growing collection of pictures and poetry I've been slowly putting together. Hopefully one day I can collate them all in a chapbook. I've always liked the mix of the two.

Comment is about Afternoon Novena (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Hi Anthony, thanks for your comments on my pyrenean poem. My ride was 3 years ago now. Going for the Alps however in Sept. Yes, those col names are very poetic in their own right arn't they, Win x

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

good title with the title hunting rach, hardest thing of a poem for me usually getting the right title..

enjoyed it otherwise.. good stuff x

Comment is about Abstract Notions (blog)

Nice...like the use of the painting / drawing with it! Am I right in guessing this is from a book or a collection?

Comment is about Afternoon Novena (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Science and art come together in a poetic fusion, a merging of two worlds of words, encoding the life of our site and our community. Brilliant riff.
This is what Write Out Loud is all about. Thank you Ann.

Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I know this feeling.

Comment is about The End of my Soul on Saturday Nights (blog)

Original item by David Mac

But of course now the bug is fixed - this poem makes no sense whatsoever! We obviously need more glitchy bugs on WOL - great when you are struggling for an idea for a poem! Thank you!! And. . . . Goodnightxxxx

Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

nice. very funny.

Comment is about The Big Society (blog)

Original item by Jack Pascoe

sweet & nicely woven. reminds me of the sadness of keats.

Comment is about Stars Would Gladly Cast Their Gleam (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

nice, lyrical & tough.

Comment is about Untitled (blog)

nice poem and lovely title Dave-best regards.

Comment is about Stars Would Gladly Cast Their Gleam (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

only just caught up with this and would like to join the chorus of appreciation. Great stuff

Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Yes writing this was so much fun
Once I had found me specs
I enjoyed it just as much
As I used to enjoy . . . crochet :)

Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Of course I did it on purpose! Honestly - what are you all like!! That's why the writing is a delicate shade of pink :)

Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

BTW - I was assuming that you'd done the WOL/LOL and Bits/Nerves (no tits) on purpose ??
so am I (like)an effin ijit or are you a poetry-like Goddess ? Hmm?

Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

marvellous ! - you had fun here didn't you ?? xx B

Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks A.E.! Very kind words...

Comment is about Nagasaki Shadows (blog)

Original item by Nash

Thanks for your comments on the Uncertain Narcissist-very spiffing : )

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks for your comments Francine and Isobel-when I have performed this poem in public there are usually a few titters and gasps, but what the hey : )

Comment is about THE UNCERTAIN NARCISSIST (blog)

Original item by Gareth Writer-Davies

wow!!

Comment is about Afternoon Novena (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

absolutly loved it darlin xx

Comment is about The Big Society (blog)

Original item by Jack Pascoe

Hi David. Yes, thanks very much for your recent comments on the Betjeman poem and Touch Wood. Fair enough, if he's not your cup of tea. I was quite taken aback by the amount of affection he engenders. Of course, I feel a great bond because of his love of trains. Sometimes I find it difficult to write about anything else but railways!

Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)

Original item by David Cooke

I've just been catching up with your recent poems. (All very good and hope you've seen my posts.) I was inspired to put my latest on after reading your recent railway poems.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

A 'stew' of words, all simmering together, each 'ingredient' keeping its individual taste but contributing to the final flavour of the 'dish'.

Are you calling this style experimental? It is interesting, for sure; needs a lot of discipline in word connotation/associative idea manipulation.

Comment is about Health (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Like the way you bring us to the scene and depart again and leave it for us to remember our own similar experiences as motorists - it dwells in the mind though these shocks and we keep going back to the same event in most cases - talking/writing about these experiences certainly helps and as you so rightly put it 'makes you think'

Comment is about Routine is death; Death is routine (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley