Me or not Me, that is the question, really like this Kath, got a good flow to it, well written, honest and definitely deserves a title, Jeff X
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Nice and naughty, great idea too! Jeff XZ
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Sad, and can feel the pain Ann, think it's something we all go through and need to write about, you've done it brilliantly in such few words, loved it Jeff x
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Hi Ann, this should have a good chance in the ghost comp, really enjoyed it, Jeff
Comment is about no place like home (blog)
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Hi Dave this is very powerful, a very worthy piece and tribute to the brave, LMF my arse! I like to ask questions (one in my latest poem!) and this does just that and quite rightly, brilliant writing too which would grace any book about war and armed combat, nice one mate Jeff
Comment is about LMF (blog)
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Might not put my Jack the Ripper poem on for a while as my latest was a bit raunchy - won't want to be getting a reputation!
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Ah, but Graham - it started with a kiss (x)
Comment is about diamante love (blog)
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Enjoyed this John. Looks like you've given considerable care to the structure and it does work - for me anyway.
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Fri 29th Jul 2011 12:15
It is a wonderful tribute Dave..I do like the way you brought in the ordinary (breakfast) to bring in another dimension, another emotion..
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Fri 29th Jul 2011 12:08
Yes one time I went back to a place that meant much to me John..should never go back for what we have in our minds eye is then broken..your write resonated with me..
Comment is about Back home (blog)
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A few months ago, I took my wife and youngest to see where I spent my youth, and couldn't even find my way around -- knocked flat and re-developed.
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Philipos
Fri 29th Jul 2011 10:34
Thanks Greg (Infarcation) I agree with the suggested improvement and am grateful for the comment.
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Philipos
Fri 29th Jul 2011 10:31
Hi Laura, 'Infarction' (of the Myocardial type) my coming to grief nearly 2 decades ago at the top of Ayers Rock in Oz.
Glad you made a link with rhythm and pulse activity. Many thanks also for your suggestion which I have taken up.
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A little bit racy for my liking Ann, but nice to see you've still got your Mojo working. One change I'd make, I'd change the x to an a. This way it could be the most erotic journey from A to z. Well done!
Comment is about diamante love (blog)
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What a pity Izz is on holiday, she'd have enjoyed this one. Excellent.
Comment is about diamante love (blog)
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Ann! slow pussy inDEED - I am shocked and PERTURBED madam!
hehehe :D
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Stomach churning write Dave - really evocative, plunged me right into that terror and chaos. I like your stance in it too.
Comment is about LMF (blog)
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Thanks Greg & Andy - appreciated
My mother's brother, Mervyn Donaldson was killed in a Lancaster over Holland in 1943
http://www.cwgc.org/search/certificate.aspx?casualty=2620304
I'd like to dedicate this to his memory. Standing by his grave was very emotional.
Bomber Boys by Patrick Bishop is an excellent objective account of it all. There are big points of debate around the bombing campaign which Bishop covers fairly, but no one should ever take anything away from the sheer raw courage of the men. The statistics are appalling.
Comment is about LMF (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
lot of layers in this, Kath.. like particularly the use of torpid on the last line..
Great stuff.. Keep em flowing (Hope you are okay - I'm running round a bit at the moment but have a new poem or two to post here soon-ish x)
Comment is about Untitled (blog)
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Not a element of history I know, but I like the structure in this piece, Nick and I think it works well towards the ending.. Keep em coming.. A
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well scripted ending, Kealan.... On first reading, it didn't really hit me but it has there.. Wow.. Keep em coming man.. A
Comment is about I Heard Her Sigh By The Fireplace (blog)
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oddly enough with this, on the preview page of it - it flashed it up in a different order which i maybe preferred to the way I saw it when I went into it here, but I did enjoy it and can totally relate to it (I have my own piece My Hometown which may well end up on here shortly too).. Cheers A
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I really enjoyed this, Dave and totally agree with Greg. My Dad was born just before the second world war and lost a brother then.. I'll have a chat to him sometime to see what he thinks about it as he remembers it.
From my perspective, I particularly enjoyed 'You have sweated as an engine cuts out,
as the pilot corkscrews away
from a ravenous, death-spitting night-fighter,
whose cannon shells burst the fuselage around you'
I may consider splitting it up to stanzas however just for pacing purposes.
Superb otherwise.
Comment is about LMF (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Compelling poem, David. I had to look up "lack of moral fibre" and found it was a charge against WW2 airmen who found themselves unable to keep flying. What now would be regarded as combat fatigue or post-traumatic stress. I'm reading a book at the moment called Bomber County which combines an examination of world war two bombing and the poetry of the period.
Comment is about LMF (blog)
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Thu 28th Jul 2011 22:56
I've said it before, I'll say it again - you're one horny bint :)
well done
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Thu 28th Jul 2011 22:06
Lorra fun this poem Hazel. like to hear you reciting it in the old Red Lion.'saloon-bar.
Room at the top.
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Philipos
Thu 28th Jul 2011 19:59
Hi Ann, many thanks for your comments on 'Etchings' your supportiveness is always appreciated.
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A brave posting John, as we know you are a pussycat. (Well, a pussycat who likes feet anyway!) I'll put my Jackie poem on tomorrow.
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Blimey! Thoroughly enjoyed this. Rich, luscious language. Interesting structure. Cor!
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I could say I'm more of a slow pussy - but I won't!
Comment is about diamante love (blog)
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Philipos
Thu 28th Jul 2011 18:31
(Re; Etchings), I couldn't agree more Cynthia, too often we forget those time frames in which scenes are set and values of the time.
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Philipos
Thu 28th Jul 2011 17:26
Hi Greg, re; The Crossing Place, answer no, not yet but thanks for reminding me - will try to pop in soon.
Learned about the other life of the site from a former Surrey colleague. Best regards.
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Philipos
Thu 28th Jul 2011 17:13
'Heat reminding her of comfort' and 'Forcing the cigarette into submission' my fav bits.
Comment is about I Heard Her Sigh By The Fireplace (blog)
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Philipos
Thu 28th Jul 2011 17:10
Enjoyed - absolutely fab last verse.
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Hi Ann.
I'm not sure if my reply to your welcome message actually got through and I would hate for anyone to think I was just being ignorant and couldn't be bothered to reply. Hence I have changed the profile pic and added a couple of other offerings via the blog.(I am only now beginning to learn how this sight works) NOW!! Off into the ether with you comment and we'll see what this electronic pigeon brings back.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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Nope, all your participles are present and correct, as are your adjectives. I'm impressed. Mine took me aaaages! I had to keep double checking heh :D
The only tiny point I would make is that those last PPs should be related to the last noun, according to the rules I've read. But as Cynthia says, it's really quite flexible.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
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Eh oop Laura - I just did give it a go but my pariciples may be adjectives! Hope Cynthia will forgive me! :)
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
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Hahaa! You must have put this up while I was typing on your profile!
Blimey *fans self*
This blows mine out the water! :D Nice one!
That's really clever using the x and z as nouns too
Brilliant :D
Comment is about diamante love (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Don't know how I came up with this one! Pardonnez moi!
Comment is about diamante love (blog)
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Eh up Ann - aye, give the diamante idea a go. It's a really good exercise and had me scratching my head checking and rechecking my present participles and adjectives. I used to know all that years ago! I might have a go at a few more actually, now that I've worked out an easier way to proceed than the last few days of head-scratchin! :D
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I can't tell my present participles from my adjectives!!! But I might give this a try too.x
Comment is about Ocean Thoughts (blog)
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An interesting story - I actually googled Jayne Fontaine to see if it was based on real life but it doesn't appear to be. I like how it's set in what appears to be a working class environment, and the ganging up that goes on re Mabel.
In the second to last stanza, should that be 'caused' rather than 'cause'?
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Thu 28th Jul 2011 01:44
Thank you Jules, Stefan and Jeff :)
A little bit of fun is good for all I think x
Comment is about Visitation (For The Ghost Theme) (blog)
Thanks for your comments on For My Brother, Dave. And good luck for the new season!
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Jeff Dawson
Fri 29th Jul 2011 15:09
Cant have been easy to write this never mind put it out, extremely brave and as a poem very powerful, hope it helped, best wishes Jeff
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